视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more natural and concise, correct word choice and grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing scenic views when I travel because it helps me remember special moments. For example, I often take landscape photos and later share a few of my favorites with friends on social media. It's relaxing and has become a hobby that helps me appreciate new places.

建议: Improve fluency and sentence structure, remove filler words and correct awkward phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct vocabulary (e.g., "catch my breath" not "shake for some breath").

示例: I prefer rural views because I live in a busy city and I need a break from the hustle and bustle. For example, I like going to quiet spots away from crowds to watch the sunset and take photos, which helps me relax and feel refreshed.

建议: Correct grammar and word choice, avoid unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g., "British rest scenery" is unclear). Be specific about what makes your country's scenery special and provide one or two concise supporting details. Keep to 2–3 clear sentences.

示例: Although I've traveled to many countries, I prefer rural scenery in Vietnam because it feels peaceful and familiar. For instance, the terraced rice fields and quiet coastal villages make me feel calm and at home when I travel around Vietnam.

× Yeah, I'm really into coloring beautiful scenery whenever I travel.

✓ Yeah, I'm really into photographing beautiful scenery whenever I travel.

The verb 'coloring' is incorrect in context; the speaker means taking photos. Use the gerund 'photographing' (verb + -ing) to indicate the hobby/activity. Suggestion: use 'photographing' or 'taking photos of' to be natural. (Note: This entry addresses incorrect verb choice in -ing form.)

× Taking photo of that can help me remember the special moment.

✓ Taking a photo of that can help me remember the special moment.

The singular countable noun 'photo' requires an article. Use 'a photo' to be grammatically correct. Alternatively, 'taking photos' (plural) would also work.

× And I also really enjoyed sharing the beautiful scenery with my friend on social media.

✓ And I also really enjoy sharing the beautiful scenery with my friends on social media.

The original uses past tense 'enjoyed' but the context describes a habitual/present preference. Change to present simple 'enjoy' for current habit. Also 'friend' should be plural 'friends' if referring generally; use 'my friend' only if referring to a specific person.

× It's very relaxing and it's also my hobby.

✓ It's very relaxing and it's also a hobby of mine.

Using 'my hobby' is acceptable but 'a hobby of mine' is more natural when speaking generally. This addresses pronoun/reference naturalness; keeps meaning clearer.

× I'm currently living in the city and I'm very tired of their hustle and bustle.

✓ I'm currently living in the city and I'm very tired of its hustle and bustle.

The pronoun 'their' refers to plural nouns; 'the city' is singular, so use the singular possessive pronoun 'its' for agreement.

× In the city. I would go to somewhere off the beaten path and like shake for some breath of fresh air in the Russell area.

✓ When I'm in the city, I go somewhere off the beaten path to get a breath of fresh air in the rural area.

Original has sentence fragments and awkward phrasing: 'In the city.' is a fragment; 'would go to somewhere' mixes conditional/modal with location incorrectly; 'like shake for some breath' is ungrammatical. Revision uses present simple for habitual action and correct collocations: 'go somewhere', 'get a breath of fresh air', and 'rural area' instead of 'Russell area' unless 'Russell' is a specific place (then clarify).

× I want to see the sunset and take a picture of that in the rural area.

✓ I want to see the sunset and take a picture of it in the countryside.

Using 'that' to refer to 'the sunset' is awkward; 'it' is the correct pronoun. Also 'the rural area' is unnatural here; 'the countryside' is more natural when speaking generally about rural scenery.

× I have chances to travel to many destination around the world, but to be honest about the rural scenery, I think that my country Vietnam is the best.

✓ I have had chances to travel to many destinations around the world, but to be honest about rural scenery, I think that my country, Vietnam, is the best.

Use present perfect 'have had' for life experiences, or 'have' with plural noun: 'many destinations' (countable) rather than 'many destination'. Add commas around 'Vietnam' as apposition. Also remove 'the' before 'rural scenery' to be more natural.

× I like the peacefulness and the British rest scenery in Vietnam, which make me feel so calm and feel like home whenever I travel around Vietnam.

✓ I like the peacefulness and the beautiful rustic scenery in Vietnam, which make me feel calm and at home whenever I travel around the country.

The phrase 'British rest scenery' is incorrect and likely a mischoice of words. 'Beautiful rustic scenery' or 'quiet rural scenery' fits the intended meaning. Use 'make me feel calm and at home' for natural collocation. Also 'Vietnam' repeated is redundant; 'the country' is smoother.