视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (like “Uh”), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “because” and “so”). Also vary vocabulary (e.g., use “perspectives” or “settings” instead of repeating “different”).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because changing perspectives and lighting can reveal interesting details. For example, shooting a city skyline at sunset often highlights colors and reflections that aren’t visible during the day.

建议: Make the sentence grammatically correct and more specific. Begin with a clear preference, then give two concrete reasons linked with “because” or “so”. Avoid vague words like “scenario” and “polite” — use precise adjectives such as “peaceful,” “natural,” or “scenic.”

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are more peaceful and scenic. For instance, open fields and forests offer natural colors and quiet atmospheres that make photographs feel calmer and more atmospheric than busy city streets.

建议: Clarify your meaning and remove hesitation. State your preference, then support it with specific cultural or landscape details. Use linking words like “because” and “for example,” and avoid repeating words. Replace unclear phrases such as “poetic theme” with concrete descriptions (e.g., “traditional landscapes” or “unique architecture”).

示例: I prefer views in my own country because its landscapes and traditional villages reflect our cultural heritage. For example, the terraced fields and historic temples create scenes that are both visually striking and meaningful, which I don’t often find elsewhere.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because from different angles or different scenarios, Uh, the pictures get their own structure and can be beautiful enough to click.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because, from different angles or different scenarios, the pictures take on their own structure and can be beautiful enough to photograph.

The original uses 'get their own structure' which is informal and awkward; 'take on' plus a noun is a more natural verb phrase. Also 'to click' is an informal literalism; 'to photograph' or 'to take' is standard. Use of present participle 'taking' is correct; changes address word choice and collocation rather than tense.

× I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban areas 'cause it's so scenario and polite environment and surroundings in rural areas which makes a pictures more beautiful than urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban areas because the environment and surroundings in rural areas are more picturesque and peaceful, which makes the pictures more beautiful than those taken in urban areas.

The original uses 'scenario' incorrectly as an adjective and 'polite' incorrectly for environment; these are word choice errors (adjectives). Also 'it's ... environment' has subject-verb mismatch with plural nouns; 'are' fits. 'a pictures' is wrong article+plural. Replace with appropriate adjectives 'picturesque' and 'peaceful', correct verb agreement, and use 'the pictures' and 'those taken in urban areas' for clarity.

× I prefer views in my country because our country has the scenario views and the poetic theme which we describe some of the songs of our local cultural, uh, songs.

✓ I prefer views in my country because it has scenic views and a poetic atmosphere that we describe in some of our local cultural songs.

The original misuses prepositions and idiomatic phrases: 'has the scenario views' is wrong; use 'scenic views'. 'Which we describe some of the songs of our local cultural songs' is ungrammatical and contains redundant words. Use 'describe in some of our local cultural songs'. Preposition 'in' is required with 'describe in songs' and remove redundancy.

× So it makes a picture more beautiful rather than other country.

✓ So it makes a picture more beautiful than in other countries.

The original mixes 'rather than' with a comparative structure incorrectly. For comparisons use 'more ... than ...' and ensure the second element is parallel and pluralized if appropriate: 'than in other countries'. Also ensure agreement 'countries' rather than 'country' when speaking generally.