视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Perbaiki keteraturan kalimat dan tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat topik yang jelas, hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'like' berulang kali, dan perbaiki struktur subjek-predikat (mis. 'the views is' salah). Berikan satu atau dua rincian spesifik tentang apa yang Anda rasakan atau jenis pemandangan yang Anda sukai. Contoh fokus: nyatakan perasaan lalu jelaskan jenis pemandangan dan alasan secara singkat.

示例: I enjoy taking photos of different views because they make me feel peaceful. For example, I love capturing sunsets and mountain silhouettes, as the colors and shapes calm me and create memorable moments.

建议: Perbaiki kosakata dan kejelasan ide. Hindari terjemahan langsung dari bahasa Indonesia yang menyebabkan frasa tidak jelas (mis. 'reverse my mind'). Gunakan satu atau dua alasan spesifik dan kata penghubung seperti 'because' atau 'so' untuk alur logis. Sebutkan contoh konkret yang mendukung preferensi Anda.

示例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more relaxing. For instance, I enjoy open fields and forest paths where I can hear birds and feel calm, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan hindari pengulangan. Gunakan struktur yang lebih natural seperti 'I prefer views in my country because we have...'. Sebutkan nama atau deskripsi singkat tempat, dan jelaskan mengapa tempat itu istimewa (misalnya pemandangan, pengalaman pribadi). Gunakan satu atau dua kalimat tambahan saja.

示例: I prefer views in my country because we have beautiful mountains and lakes. For example, the nearby Mount Merapi has stunning ridges and the clear lake at its base is a peaceful spot for photography and reflection.

× This is like, I think like a blessed moment and then, uh, the views is. Clear my eyes.

✓ This is, I think, a blessed moment, and the views are clear to my eyes.

The original sentence has subject-verb agreement errors and awkward verb forms. 'The views is' is incorrect because 'views' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are' (Grammar problem type ID 27). 'This is like, I think like a blessed moment' contains unnecessary fillers and missing article; correct form uses the article 'a' before 'blessed moment' (article error, ID 22). 'Clear my eyes' is an awkward collocation; 'clear to my eyes' or 'clear my eyes' could be used but 'are clear to my eyes' is more natural. Suggestion: remove filler words, include the correct article, and use plural verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I prefer in rural areas because it may get cozy, reverse my mind, reverse my hands and take him pretty and then make me feel it relaxing.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are cozy, they relax my mind and hands, and they make me feel relaxed.

Multiple issues: 'I prefer in rural areas' should be 'I prefer rural areas' without the preposition 'in' (incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). 'It may get cozy' uses 'it' for plural 'areas'; use 'they are cozy' for subject-verb agreement (ID 27). 'Reverse my mind, reverse my hands' are incorrect verb choices and likely intended 'relax my mind and hands' (incorrect verb choice and verb form, ID 6/8); 'take him pretty' is ungrammatical—probably meant 'look pretty' or omitted; corrected to 'they relax my mind and hands'. 'Make me feel it relaxing' should be 'make me feel relaxed' (incorrect use of participle/adjective, ID 9/13). Suggestion: use correct prepositions, match subjects and verbs in number, choose verbs that convey the intended meaning ('relax'), and use the adjective 'relaxed' after 'feel'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I prefer view in my country because my country have a mountain that sit really beautiful mountain and my country has a lake and the lake is the best view in my country.

✓ I prefer views in my country because my country has a very beautiful mountain and a lake, and the lake is the best view in my country.

Errors include missing plural and incorrect article: 'I prefer view' should be 'I prefer views' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). 'Prefer view in my country' also needs 'in' acceptable but pluralization more natural. 'My country have' is subject-verb agreement error; 'country' is singular and requires 'has' (ID 27). 'That sit really beautiful mountain' is ungrammatical; use 'has a very beautiful mountain' (article error, ID 22, and sentence structure, ID 26). Repeating 'my country' multiple times is redundant; combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use correct plural forms for 'views', use 'has' with singular subject, include articles 'a' or 'the' where needed, and simplify sentence structure.