视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn hiểu được ý nhưng còn nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, lặp từ và thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, rồi đưa ra 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ “can” hai lần, “they they”), sửa lỗi số nhiều/dạng từ (views → views, picture(s)), và dùng liên từ đơn giản để mạch lạc (for example, because, so). Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu.

示例: Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because they help me keep memories. For example, when I travel I often photograph landscapes and post them on Instagram and Facebook. This way my friends can see where I have been and share my experiences.

建议: Câu trả lời thiếu mạch lạc và có nhiều tiếng lắp (umm), lỗi ngữ pháp (view → views, rural area → rural areas, it's bring to me the comfortable). Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer rural areas), sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể liên kết bằng từ nối (because, so, which). Tránh dùng nhiều từ đệm, dùng tính từ/phó từ chính xác và đảm bảo số nhiều/hình thức từ đúng.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they help me relax and relieve stress. For instance, I enjoy peaceful countryside scenes with green fields and mountains, which feel much more calming than busy city streets.

建议: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng câu còn nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp (view → views, my country have → my country has, a Plaza không cần viết hoa, it's helped me release really stress) và liệt kê thiếu mạch lạc. Hãy nói một câu chủ đề, sau đó mô tả 1–2 đặc điểm cụ thể với liên từ phù hợp (for example, such as) và kết luận ngắn gọn. Sử dụng tính từ phù hợp (stunning, peaceful) và đúng dạng danh từ (relieve stress).

示例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many stunning landscapes. For example, there are green valleys, mountains and peaceful rural plazas, which help me relax and relieve stress.

× I usually take pictures of different view because they help me to keep a memory

✓ I usually take pictures of different views because they help me to keep memories

'view' should be plural 'views' to match 'different'. 'a memory' is unnatural; use plural 'memories' or 'a memory' with 'keep' rephrased. Use plural to reflect multiple experiences.

× and when I travel I photograph so I can post the pictures on the social media like Instagram, Facebook or TikTok

✓ and when I travel I take photographs so I can post the pictures on social media like Instagram, Facebook, or TikTok

'the social media' is incorrect; use 'social media' without the definite article. Also 'photograph' as a verb is fine but 'take photographs' is more natural. Add commas in the list.

× so my friend can can see me on that pictures and they they know me where I travel

✓ so my friends can see the pictures and know where I travel

Use plural 'friends' to match context. Remove duplicate words 'can can' and 'they they'. Use 'see the pictures' rather than 'see me on that pictures'. Use 'know where I travel' for correct word order.

× I prefer view in rural area because umm, it's bring to me the comfortable and help me to relieve stress

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because it brings me comfort and helps me relieve stress

'view' and 'area' should be plural: 'views' and 'areas'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it brings' and 'helps'. 'the comfortable' is incorrect; use 'comfort' as a noun. Remove extra 'to' before 'relieve'.

× or when I umm, I can relax and enjoy the views with a a breathtaking sceneries and

✓ or when I can relax and enjoy the breathtaking scenery

Do not mix plural 'sceneries' with 'a'. Use singular 'scenery' with 'breathtaking'. Remove duplicated 'a' and trailing 'and'. The structure 'enjoy the breathtaking scenery' is natural.

× Well, I prefer view in my country because umm my country have a very stunning view with a green views, a mountain, a Plaza and rural area with peaceful countryside

✓ Well, I prefer views in my country because my country has very stunning scenery with green views, a mountain, a plaza, and rural areas with a peaceful countryside

Use plural 'views' and 'areas'. Subject-verb agreement: 'my country has' not 'have'. 'a Plaza' should be lowercase 'plaza'. 'scenery' is more natural than repeating 'view'. Ensure articles are consistent.

× and it's helped me release really stress

✓ and it helps me relieve stress

Tense and form: 'it's helped' (present perfect) is inconsistent here; use simple present 'it helps' to match habitual action. 'release really stress' is incorrect; use 'relieve stress'. 'really' is unnecessary or should be 'a lot of' if intensifier is needed.