视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural, concise, and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and add one brief reason with linking word. Keep to 1–3 sentences and avoid redundancy.

示例: Not really. I don’t usually take photos of views; I prefer to savor the moment and enjoy the scenery directly. For example, when I travel I focus on the experience rather than photographing everything.

建议: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details using linking words (because, for example). Avoid vague words like 'solemn' if you mean peaceful, and correct pronouns and verb forms.

示例: I prefer rural views because they feel peaceful and well cared for by local people. For example, villagers often maintain gardens and paths, which makes the landscape look tidy and pleasant.

建议: Make the answer more concise and organized. Start with a clear preference sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words and avoid repetition (e.g., 'sea and ocean' or 'landscapes and surroundings').

示例: I prefer the views in my country because the Philippines offers mountains, beaches and lush landscapes, and the people are generally calm and friendly. However, I also enjoy visiting other countries to experience different cultures and learn new things.

× Actually I don't capture or take a pictures of any different views.

✓ Actually I don't capture or take pictures of different views.

The error is using the noun plural 'a pictures' and awkward verb choice 'capture or take' with article. 'Take pictures' is the correct collocation without 'a'; remove 'a' and 'any different' is redundant so simplify to 'different views'. Use negative contraction 'don't' with base verbs. Suggestion: say 'I don't take pictures of different views.'

× I just want to savor the moment where I am in.

✓ I just want to savor the moment I am in.

The sentence contains an unnecessary relative adverb 'where' before 'I am in', creating redundancy. The present participle form issue arises from awkward clause ending with a preposition. Better: 'savor the moment I am in' or 'savor the moment I'm in.' Also could be 'savor the moment I'm in right now.'

× I prefer views in rural areas because it is so solemn that the community folks are the one who's taking care of its view or the their surroundings.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are so peaceful and the community members are the ones who take care of their surroundings.

Multiple agreement errors: 'it is so solemn' mismatches plural 'views' — use 'they are'. 'Solemn' is incorrect word choice; 'peaceful' fits better. 'Community folks' is informal; 'community members' is appropriate. 'Are the one' should be 'are the ones' and 'who's' should be 'who'. Possessive 'its view' should be 'their surroundings' to agree with plural noun. Also use simple present 'take care' for habitual action.

× And then it is very important for me the deepest or the. Community engagement like that.

✓ Also, deep community engagement like that is very important to me.

Original has fragmented structure and incomplete clause 'the deepest or the.' Reorder to subject 'deep community engagement' + verb 'is' + complement 'very important to me.' Use 'deep' rather than 'deepest' unless comparing.

× Actually, I prefer the views in our country because here in the Philippines you have the mountains, the sea and the ocean, and then beautiful landscapes and the surroundings and the people are very respectful and very calm environment.

✓ Actually, I prefer the views in our country because here in the Philippines we have mountains, the sea, beautiful landscapes, and respectful, calm people and surroundings.

Tense/person inconsistency: 'you have' is inappropriate in a personal preference answer; use 'we have' to refer to the country. Redundant 'sea and the ocean' — 'the sea' suffices. 'The people are very respectful and very calm environment' mixes people and environment; separate nouns and use adjectives correctly: 'respectful, calm people' and 'calm environment.' Remove extra 'and the.'

× But I also like to visit our other countries to see their culture, to learn about their culture.

✓ But I also like to visit other countries to see and learn about their cultures.

Redundant phrase 'our other countries' is odd; say 'other countries.' Repetition 'to see their culture, to learn about their culture' is repetitive—combine into 'to see and learn about their cultures.' Use plural 'cultures' when referring to multiple countries.