视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more relevant: give a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and unclear words, and add one brief supporting reason with linking words. Focus on 'views' not 'viewers' or unrelated words.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they capture the atmosphere of a place. For example, city skylines can show busy life, while coastal scenes feel calm, so photos help me remember and share those moods.

建议: Make a clear choice first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetition; use vocabulary like 'urban', 'rural', 'open spaces', 'architecture', 'landscape'.

示例: I prefer rural views because open fields and natural landscapes offer more variety for photography. For instance, the changing light on hills and rivers creates interesting compositions that urban scenes often lack.

建议: State your preference once, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and use clear descriptive vocabulary (e.g. 'scenery', 'architecture', 'culture').

示例: I prefer views in other countries because diverse landscapes and cultural landmarks provide fresh photo opportunities. For example, historic streets and exotic coastlines often create more striking images than the familiar scenes at home.

× Yes, I I love to see pictures of different viewers because it reminds me of business and visitors and she got visitors and it it sets a good background and it's just.

✓ Yes, I love to see pictures of different views because they remind me of business trips and visitors, and they set a good background.

The student used incorrect nouns and pronouns ('viewers', 'it', 'she') and had repetition and unclear references. Change 'viewers' to 'views' to match the intended meaning. Use plural pronoun 'they' to agree with plural 'pictures' and ensure pronoun-antecedent clarity. Remove redundant words and repetitions. Suggest practicing replacing vague pronouns with clear nouns and ensuring subject-pronoun agreement.

× I'll stay if I prefer views in open areas because people because of the qualities of the of the spaces and it gets more fancy space places to take pictures away and use as my ground.

✓ I prefer views in open areas because of the qualities of the spaces; they offer nicer places to take pictures and serve as good backgrounds.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repetitions and unclear phrases ('I'll stay if', 'because people because of the qualities'). Remove the incorrect conditional 'I'll stay if' which does not fit context, simplify the cause 'because of the qualities of the spaces', and replace vague expressions ('fancy space places', 'use as my ground') with clear nouns ('nicer places', 'good backgrounds'). Practice forming a single independent clause with a clear reason clause.

× I prefer views in other countries because I love the scenery and it's more and I prefer views in other countries because I love the scenery and it's more antifaz which makes my pictures come out beautiful.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I love the scenery and the light, which makes my pictures look beautiful.

The sentence repeats itself and uses unclear words ('it's more', 'antifaz') and incorrect pronoun references. Replace repetition with a single clear statement, change vague 'it's more' to a specific noun 'the light' if that was intended, and use 'which makes my pictures look beautiful' for correct relative clause and verb choice. Suggest avoiding repetition and using specific nouns rather than vague pronouns or unknown words.