视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitation and redundant phrases, use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Watch filler words (uh) and avoid repeating the same idea (memorize places / memory).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. When I travel I often photograph landscapes like coastlines and city skylines to remember the trip, and I post a few pictures on social media so friends can see what I experienced.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors. Avoid repeating words (rural areas/nature) and tighten sentence structure.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because natural scenes like mountains and rivers help me relax. For example, walking by a river clears my mind and hiking in the mountains gives me energy.

建议: Eliminate hesitations and combine reasons clearly with linking words. Provide one concrete example to support the emotional connection claim to make the answer more specific.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because they are more affordable and easy to reach, and I have personal connections to them. For instance, the coastal town where I grew up reminds me of family holidays, so visiting it feels comforting.

× Absolutely yes.

✓ Absolutely.

'Absolutely yes' is awkward; 'absolutely' alone is a natural short response. This is a sentence structure usage issue: reduce redundancy and use a single adverb to answer positively.

× I love capturing new sceneries and everywhere I go, especially when I travel, I like to memorize the places and the memory I had in uh, travels.

✓ I love capturing new scenery everywhere I go; especially when I travel, I like to remember the places and the memories I had on those trips.

Multiple issues: 'sceneries' is incorrect — 'scenery' is an uncountable noun (use Grammar Problem Type: Singular and plural issue), and 'memorize the places and the memory I had in travels' uses wrong verb and preposition. Use 'remember' not 'memorize' for recalling experiences, 'memories' plural, and 'on those trips' for correct preposition. Sentence structure improved by splitting and using appropriate nouns and verbs.

× I also love sharing photos on social media with my friends so they can feel connected with me.

✓ I also love sharing photos on social media with my friends so they can feel connected to me.

Use 'connected to' rather than 'connected with' when indicating emotional connection to a person. This is an incorrect preposition usage.

× Personally, I prefer the views in rural areas like mountains, rivers and fields because it makes me feel relaxed and refreshed after going to countryside and there is something about the nature and rural areas that makes me feel so excited.

✓ Personally, I prefer views in rural areas like mountains, rivers, and fields because they make me feel relaxed and refreshed after going to the countryside, and there is something about nature and rural areas that excites me.

Several errors: subject-verb agreement and article use. 'The views... because it makes me' should be 'they make me' (subject-verb agreement). 'Going to countryside' needs the definite article 'the countryside'. 'The nature' is unnecessary; use 'nature' (article error). Also prefer 'excites me' over 'makes me feel so excited' for concision. Corrections address article errors and subject-verb agreement.

× I, uh, definitely choose, uh, the views in my own country because it's much cheaper and accessible and I know the places and I also feel connected more to my country views, uh, because I remember family trips and my childhood.

✓ I definitely prefer views in my own country because they are much cheaper and more accessible, I know the places, and I feel more connected to them because of family trips and my childhood memories.

Issues: awkward word choice and structure. Use 'prefer' rather than 'choose' for general preference. 'It's much cheaper and accessible' has subject-verb and parallelism errors — 'they are much cheaper and more accessible' matches plural 'views'. 'Connected more to my country views' should be 'feel more connected to them'. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories'. This fixes sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and plurality.