视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Focus on correct grammar and more concise natural phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., "I used to take pictures every day") and avoid repetition. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "scenery," "landscapes") and limit response to around 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I lived on the South Island, I used to take photos every day, especially in Queenstown, because the scenery changes with each season. For example, I often photographed tree-lined paths, park scenes and colorful skies.

建议: Make your preference clear and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., "I prefer..." or "It depends because...") then use linking words (however, on the other hand) and give one specific reason for each choice. Use correct countable/uncountable nouns ("greenery" instead of "green stuffs") and more precise vocabulary ("architecture," "countryside"). Keep to 3–4 sentences.

示例: It depends, but I usually prefer urban views for their striking architecture. However, I also enjoy rural landscapes for the peaceful greenery and wide-open views. For instance, in the city I admire modern building designs, whereas in the countryside I like photographing rolling hills and fields.

建议: Clarify your meaning and correct vocabulary ("views" not "reviews"). Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific comparisons using linking words (for example, whereas, while). Avoid vague phrases like "many things" and give concrete examples (parks, coastlines). Improve sentence grammar and avoid overlong or repetitive sentences.

示例: I prefer the views in New Zealand because the environment feels cleaner and more scenic. For example, you can easily find parks, coastlines and open viewpoints everywhere, whereas in my city in Brazil the scenery is often dominated by dense buildings and fewer green spaces.

× Yes I do. When I was living in South Island I I was usually take pictures every day, especially in Queenstown because every season there is different and every place you go it's beautiful.

✓ Yes I do. When I was living on the South Island I usually took pictures every day, especially in Queenstown, because every season is different and every place you go is beautiful.

Errors: incorrect past continuous with 'was usually take' and incorrect preposition 'in South Island' and extra word repetition 'I I' and missing commas. Use simple past 'took' for habitual past actions ('usually took'), use 'on the South Island' for islands, and remove duplicate 'I'. Keep 'every season is different' in present because seasons generally differ (general truth). Add commas for clarity.

× So I enjoy to take a picture from the trees, from the parks, from the sky.

✓ So I enjoy taking pictures of the trees, of the parks, and of the sky.

After 'enjoy' use the gerund form ('taking'), not the infinitive 'to take'. Use plural 'pictures' for general activity and preposition 'of' to indicate source/subject of photos. Include serial comma style with 'and' for clarity.

× It depends. Sometimes I really enjoy the urban areas because I love the buildings, the big buildings and also the design. They make the city.

✓ It depends. Sometimes I really enjoy urban areas because I love the buildings, the big buildings, and also the design. They shape the city.

Minor style: 'enjoy the urban areas' to 'enjoy urban areas' is more natural. 'Make the city' is awkward; use 'shape the city'. Commas added. No tense change needed; present simple is correct for general preferences.

× But I also like the rural areas because I can see more green stuffs and the landscape.

✓ But I also like rural areas because I can see more green things and the landscape.

'Stuffs' is uncountable/incorrect; use 'things' or 'areas of greenery'. Remove 'the' before 'landscape' or keep 'the landscape' depending on meaning; here 'the landscape' is acceptable. Use plural 'rural areas' without article.

× I do prefer reviews here in New Zealand.

✓ I do prefer views here in New Zealand.

The student wrote 'reviews' instead of 'views' — wrong word. No article needed before 'views' in this general statement.

× For me, it's a clean and a beautiful view.

✓ For me, it's a clean and beautiful place to view, or 'For me, the view is clean and beautiful.'

Using 'a' before both adjectives is awkward: use 'a clean and beautiful view' or rephrase. Depending on intended noun ('view' or 'place'), maintain article placement. Ensure adjective order is natural.

× Here in New Zealand, in Brazil, especially in my city, I cannot see many things, you know, because it's a lot of buildings.

✓ Here in New Zealand I can see many beautiful places, but in Brazil, especially in my city, I cannot see many because there are a lot of buildings.

Original mixes locations confusingly. Clarify contrast: use 'there are a lot of buildings' (correct existential structure) and 'cannot see many' what? 'many beautiful places' makes meaning clear. Use 'there are' for plural existence rather than 'it's'.