视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (what you photograph and why). Use linking words to connect ideas and correct small grammar issues (e.g., "all kinds" not "any kinds").

示例: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often shoot portraits of people and close-ups of animals because I like capturing emotion and detail, and photography also helps me relax after a busy day.

建议: Give a clear preference or explain why it depends using linking words. Avoid filler words like "umm" and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "scenery" and "vibrant nightlife"). Keep sentences grammatically correct and avoid small mistakes ("a more a lively" → "a livelier atmosphere").

示例: It depends, but I usually prefer rural scenery because it offers trees, waterfalls and peaceful parks that feel majestic. However, urban areas can be exciting too, with flashy lights and a livelier atmosphere, which is great for night photography.

建议: Answer directly and give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "messy"—explain what you mean (e.g., overcrowded streets, lack of green spaces). Fix grammar and sentence endings. Limit to one main reason plus a brief example.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I find many places abroad have more green spaces and well-preserved historical areas, whereas cities like Hanoi can feel crowded with many high-rise buildings. For instance, I loved the parks and quaint streets I saw in Kyoto, which felt much more relaxed for photography.

× Oh yes, I love taking pictures in different views.

✓ Oh yes, I love taking pictures of different views.

Use the correct preposition with 'taking pictures'. The common collocation is 'taking pictures of' something, not 'in' views. Replace 'in' with 'of' to be natural and grammatically correct.

× I'm obsessed with taking pictures in and taking pictures of objects or humans or animals or any kinds.

✓ I'm obsessed with taking pictures of objects, people, animals, and all kinds of subjects.

Remove incorrect preposition 'in' and use 'of'. Use 'people' instead of 'humans' for natural speech. Use 'all kinds of subjects' instead of 'any kinds' for correct quantifier and noun agreement. Also simplify the list for fluency.

× I'm focusing on photography right now, so taking pictures is also a way to relax after.

✓ I'm focusing on photography right now, so taking pictures are also a way to relax.

The phrase 'relax after' is incomplete and unclear. Better to state 'are also a way to relax' (note: 'taking pictures' is a gerund phrase that can take singular 'is' or plural 'are' depending on meaning; here 'is also a way' is preferable: use 'is' for singular: corrected version could be '...so taking pictures is also a way to relax.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× Rural areas have a much more beautiful scenery than urban areas.

✓ Rural areas have much more beautiful scenery than urban areas.

Use uncountable noun 'scenery' without article and avoid 'a' before 'much more beautiful'. 'Much more beautiful scenery' is the correct comparative structure.

× They have trees, parks, umm plants, waterfalls and much more.

✓ They have trees, parks, plants, waterfalls, and much more.

Remove filler 'umm' and add a comma before 'and' for clarity in a list. This improves fluency and punctuation.

× It's just so majestic.

✓ It is just so majestic.

Change contraction 'It's' to 'It is' only if formal register required; grammatically both are acceptable. No major grammar error; provided full form for clarity.

× Whereas urban areas have flashy lights and a more a lively.

✓ Whereas urban areas have flashy lights and are more lively.

Remove extra article 'a' and use correct adjective structure 'more lively' with the verb 'are' to form a complete clause. Original had word order and article errors.

× I live in Hanoi so I do prefer other countries view because in my country there are a lot of skyscrapers and buildings which can be really messy.

✓ I live in Hanoi, so I do prefer the views of other countries because my country has a lot of skyscrapers and buildings that can look really messy.

Use 'the views of other countries' (plural and possessive structure) instead of 'other countries view'. Add comma after 'Hanoi'. Use 'has' instead of 'there are ...' for smoother structure. Use 'that' to introduce defining relative clause and 'look really messy' for natural description.

× But when I took a look at other countries view they are just so magical and majestic that.

✓ But when I looked at the views of other countries, they were just so magical and majestic.

Use past simple 'looked' to match 'when I looked', plural possessive 'the views of other countries', and past 'were' for consistency. Remove trailing 'that' which is incomplete. Add comma before main clause for clarity.