视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Keep your answer direct and organize it: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce repetition (e.g., avoid saying similar ideas twice like “I feel calm” and “I feel that I am still there”) and use one linking phrase to connect ideas. Also vary vocabulary (revise → look through; calm → relaxed) and limit to 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos because looking through them later helps me relive the moment and feel relaxed. For example, photos from a beach trip help me remember the light and sounds, so I often review them when I want to unwind.

建议: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh) and grammar mistakes, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and keep to 2–4 sentences. Correct small errors (e.g., “take photos of them” and “review them when I am at home”).

示例: I prefer urban views because the architecture and skyscrapers offer interesting shapes and details to photograph. For example, I like capturing reflections on glass buildings, and later I edit these photos at home to study the composition.

建议: Start with a clear preference sentence and avoid unclear word choices (“prefer using the other countries,” “static”). Give one concrete reason and an example. Fix grammar (“For instance, Spain” and “palms” could be “palm trees”), avoid repetition, and use a linking word (because/for example). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer views in other countries, such as Spain, because different landscapes and plants like palm trees give me fresh photo opportunities. For example, the coastal streets and palms in Barcelona create colourful scenes that inspire new compositions.

× Definitely yes, because when I'm at home I can revise them and I always feel calm and I feel that I am still there, so I really like taking pictures.

✓ Definitely yes, because when I'm at home I can review them and I always feel calm and feel like I'm still there, so I really like taking pictures.

The sentence uses 'revise' which in this context is incorrect; 'review' is the correct verb for looking over photos. Also 'I feel that I am still there' is wordy; 'feel like I'm still there' is more natural in present tense. Keep present continuous/present simple consistent. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I would say that I prefer urban areas because, uh, there are so many skyscrapers so I can take photo of them and, uh, review them when I will be at home.

✓ I would say that I prefer urban areas because there are so many skyscrapers, so I can take photos of them and review them when I am at home.

Use plural 'photos' (singular/plural issue) and maintain correct tense: 'when I will be at home' is incorrect in English; use present simple 'when I am at home' to refer to a future habitual action. Also 'take photo of them' should be 'take photos of them.' Main issues: plural noun and incorrect future tense usage. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Uh, I really like a city, views and buildings.

✓ I really like city views and buildings.

The original sentence misplaces the article 'a' before 'city' and incorrectly separates 'city views' with a comma. The correct phrase is 'city views' (compound noun). This is a sentence structure and article usage issue; remove 'a' and the comma. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer using the other countries, for instance Spain.

✓ I prefer visiting other countries, for instance Spain.

'Prefer using the other countries' is incorrect. Use 'prefer visiting other countries' or 'I prefer other countries.' 'Using' is wrong choice of verb. This is an incorrect preposition/verb usage and sentence structure problem. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I really like to see palms and see I I think it's so static and I think because of this views I can get a new beautiful photos.

✓ I really like to see palm trees; I think the scenery is so tranquil, and because of these views I can take beautiful new photos.

Multiple errors: 'palms' is better as 'palm trees'; 'see I I think' contains repetition. 'Static' is not the best adjective for scenery—'tranquil' or 'peaceful' fits. 'Because of this views' should be 'because of these views' (demonstrative agreement) and 'a new beautiful photos' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'beautiful new photos' or 'a new beautiful photo.' This covers adjective choice, demonstrative agreement, and article/noun number. Grammar problem type ID:13}]}},