视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, simplify language, correct grammar, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences, use past/current habits and specific examples (e.g., landscapes, architecture, street scenes).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I often photograph city skylines and rural landscapes because I like capturing contrasts in light and architecture. Also, I take street photos of people and cars to document everyday life in a place.

建议: Start with a clear preference statement, then give one or two specific reasons and an example using linking words (e.g., because, for example, so). Correct grammatical errors and avoid vague phrases. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use descriptive vocabulary (e.g., peaceful, wildlife, scenery).

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because they connect me more closely with nature. For example, I enjoy photographing open fields, forests and animals since the scenery is peaceful and offers richer natural colours than busy city streets.

建议: Give a direct answer (preference) and then explain briefly with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, for example, so) and correct collocations (go abroad, familiar with). Keep responses concise and natural (2–3 sentences).

示例: I prefer views in other countries because travelling abroad lets me discover unfamiliar landscapes and cultures. For example, visiting coastal towns in another country gave me new coastal colours and architectural styles that I don't see at home.

× However, I'm in a new environment.

✓ I'm in a new environment.

The word 'However' is used to contrast two clauses but there is no preceding clause to contrast in this turn, so it creates a sentence structure problem. Remove 'However' to make the sentence clear and grammatically correct. Suggestion: omit unnecessary discourse markers unless contrasting a specific prior idea.

× I do as much as we would take pictures or whoever I find myself.

✓ I take pictures whenever I can or whenever I find something interesting.

The original sentence uses incorrect idiomatic phrases and unclear structure ('I do as much as we would take pictures' and 'whoever I find myself'). Replace with a clear construction using 'whenever' to indicate time and 'can' or 'something interesting' to express opportunity and object. Suggestion: use 'whenever' + subject + verb and a clear object.

× There's something that has become part of my daily lifestyle and I can't do away with it.

✓ Taking pictures has become part of my daily life and I can't do without it.

The clause is understandable but wordy and slightly unnatural. 'There's something that has become part of my daily lifestyle' is vague; rephrase to a clear subject 'Taking pictures' and use the idiom 'can't do without it.' Suggestion: make the subject explicit and use natural collocations (daily life, do without).

× So I like taking pictures of different places, different plans mean it environment being it cars, everything that I found different or what they.

✓ So I like taking pictures of different places, landscapes, environments, cars—anything I find different or interesting.

The original contains many incorrect words and fragments ('plans mean it environment being it cars', 'what they'). This is a sentence structure and word choice problem. Replace with a clear list using commas and a concise phrase 'anything I find different or interesting.' Suggestion: list examples with parallel structure and use appropriate nouns like 'landscapes' and 'environments.'

× I love views both in the urban areas and in the rural areas, but I prefer the rural to the urban areas because with the rural areas it's really connecting me too.

✓ I love views both in urban and rural areas, but I prefer rural areas to urban ones because rural areas really connect me to nature.

Preposition and article use is awkward: 'in the urban areas' / 'in the rural areas' is better as 'in urban and rural areas.' 'Prefer the rural to the urban areas' should be 'prefer rural areas to urban ones.' 'Connecting me too' should be 'connect me to.' Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, use 'prefer X to Y' structure, and correct preposition 'to.'

× Nature more than there ever must have, the view of animals, the environment.

✓ I feel more connected to nature than ever; I enjoy views of animals and the environment.

The fragment is ungrammatical and contains incorrect word order and modal use ('must have'). Rephrase to express the intended meaning: increased connection to nature and enjoyment of animal views. Suggestion: use a complete clause and parallel structure for the list 'views of animals and the environment.'

× I love views both in my home country and then with other countries, but I prefer to go to abroad to have a different view, a different environment and then to explore what they have.

✓ I love views in my home country and in other countries, but I prefer to go abroad to see different views, experience different environments, and explore what they have.

Problems: unnecessary 'then', incorrect collocation 'go to abroad', and awkward pronoun 'what they have.' Use 'go abroad' (no 'to'), parallel verb forms 'see', 'experience', 'explore', and 'what they have' becomes natural in context. Suggestion: use correct collocations and maintain parallel verb structure.

× Because I'm already conversant with my the environment in my home country, I want to see what other country to have.

✓ Because I'm already familiar with the environment in my home country, I want to see what other countries have.

Errors: 'conversant with my the environment' has extra article and wrong adjective; use 'familiar with the environment.' 'What other country to have' is ungrammatical—use 'what other countries have.' Suggestion: use correct adjectives ('familiar'), remove extra articles, and use plural 'countries' when speaking generally.