视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and natural, but it is slightly wordy and repeats ideas ("beautiful moment/place" and "capture the moment and memorize"). To improve, give a concise topic sentence, then one specific supporting detail and use a linking word to connect them. Also vary vocabulary (use 'preserve' or 'record' instead of 'memorize').

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing scenes because they help me preserve special moments; for example, I often take photos of sunsets at the beach to remember the colours and atmosphere.

建议: Your answer addresses both options but contains fillers ("uh") and is slightly repetitive. Improve fluency by removing fillers, making one clear topic sentence, and adding a specific contrast using a linking word (e.g., 'however' or 'also'). Provide one concrete example for each preference.

示例: I like both urban and rural views. For example, in the city I enjoy photographing street fashion and busy markets, while in the countryside I prefer capturing quiet fields and trees, which show a very different mood.

建议: Good enthusiasm and specific mentions (nature, historical places). To improve, start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then use linking words to add one specific example or reason. Watch minor grammar: use "its" (not "it's") for possession and avoid vague phrases like "something that".

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I am proud of its landscapes and historic sites; for instance, I often photograph a nearby castle whose architecture and surrounding woods always impress me.

× For the sake of art, yes, actually I do.

✓ For the sake of art, yes, I do.

The original sentence includes unnecessary filler word 'actually' which is not a grammatical error but can be removed for clarity and naturalness. No -ing form error applies; however trimming fillers improves fluency. Suggestion: Omit unnecessary discourse markers to make the sentence more concise.

× When it comes to a very beautiful moment or a very beautiful place, I really like to capture the moment and memorize it for the rest of my life.

✓ When it comes to a very beautiful moment or place, I like to capture it and remember it for the rest of my life.

Use of 'memorize' is unnatural in this context; 'remember' is the correct verb meaning to retain in memory. Also avoid repeating 'a very beautiful' and 'the moment' twice. 'Capture it' and 'remember it' are parallel and more natural. Suggestion: Use simpler verbs and avoid repetition.

× Actually, I care about both of them because I enjoy living in a big crowded city.

✓ Actually, I care about both because I enjoy living in a big, crowded city.

'Both of them' is acceptable but 'both' is more concise. Also add a comma between 'big' and 'crowded' for coordinate adjectives. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary pronouns and punctuate adjective list correctly.

× I enjoy, uh, seeing people with, uh, different styles in different views and areas, and I also enjoy, uh, being in the nature and rural areas.

✓ I enjoy seeing people with different styles in various urban areas, and I also enjoy being in nature and in rural areas.

Remove filler 'uh' words. 'Different views and areas' is wordy and unclear; 'various urban areas' is clearer. 'Being in the nature' is incorrect; use 'being in nature' without article. Suggestion: Eliminate fillers and use natural collocations ('in nature', 'rural areas').

× I care deeply for my country and it's beautiful nature, the different places that you can visit, the historical places and castles and buildings.

✓ I care deeply about my country and its beautiful nature, the different places you can visit, and the historical sites, castles, and buildings.

Use 'care about' not 'care for' in this context. 'It's' is a contraction of 'it is' but here the possessive pronoun 'its' is required. 'Historical places' is fine but 'historical sites' is more idiomatic; add commas for list. Suggestion: Use correct preposition 'about' and possessive 'its', and punctuate lists clearly.

× It's something that I am most proud of and I would never get tired of.

✓ It's something I am very proud of, and I would never get tired of it.

'Omitting 'that' after 'something' is more natural. 'Most proud of' is grammatically acceptable but 'very proud of' is more idiomatic. Add 'it' at the end of the second clause for clarity. Suggestion: Simplify relative clause and include the object pronoun for the phrasal verb 'get tired of'.