视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organized: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (tense and verb forms), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also use clearer vocabulary for “recall” and describe a concrete example of a view you like.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often take photos of mountain landscapes because the sweeping peaks and mist create a dramatic scene that reminds me of peaceful hikes. Moreover, I keep these photos to share with my family and to remember special trips.

建议: Start with a clear preference statement, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, ‘because’ / ‘also’) with clearer vocabulary and correct grammar. Avoid contradicting words (you said rural but then described crowded urban scenes).

示例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and feature natural scenery such as fields and forests, which are more relaxing. Also, rural areas often have unique rural activities and light at sunrise that make for better photographs.

建议: Give a direct answer then support it with specific reasons and examples. Improve grammar (use singular/plural correctly and correct verb forms), use linking words such as ‘because’ and ‘for example’, and avoid vague phrases like ‘very different feeling’ by describing the feeling more precisely.

示例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because they offer new landscapes and cultures. For example, I enjoy capturing colorful street markets abroad since they show lifestyles and traditions I cannot see at home, and these photos help me remember and share those experiences.

× I loving taking pictures.

✓ I love taking pictures.

The student used 'loving' as a finite verb, but English requires the base form with the present simple 'love' to express a habitual preference. Use 'I love' instead of 'I loving' to form a correct present simple sentence describing a general liking.

× I like taking picture in different views.

✓ I like taking pictures from different viewpoints.

The noun 'picture' should be plural ('pictures') when speaking generally about taking more than one photograph. Also 'in different views' is awkward; use 'from different viewpoints' or 'of different views' to express variety.

× I loved taking, uh, pictures in different views.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views.

The student used past tense 'loved' while describing a current or general preference. Use present simple 'love' to indicate an ongoing habit or liking.

× The mountain views are the air view.

✓ The mountain views are breathtaking from the air.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. Rewriting clarifies meaning: if the student means how mountains look from above, use 'from the air' and an appropriate adjective like 'breathtaking'.

× I want a different view.

✓ I want a different view.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed; it clearly expresses desire for a different perspective.

× Umm, it is a great memory, recalls and everything.

✓ Umm, it creates great memories and helps me recall moments.

'Memory' should be plural 'memories' when speaking generally, and 'recalls' is not used this way. Use 'helps me recall' or 'brings back memories' to form a natural expression.

× You want to take a picture and recall it for future.

✓ You want to take a picture and remember it in the future.

Use 'remember it' rather than 'recall it for future.' 'In the future' is the correct phrase; 'for future' is incomplete.

× I prefer views in rural areas because there is a crowded place, people are busy in their lives and recapturing that moment.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because urban places are crowded, people are busy with their lives, and it's harder to capture those moments.

The original mixes rural/urban meaning and uses 'there is a crowded place' awkwardly. Use 'urban places are crowded' for contrast. 'Busy with their lives' is the correct prepositional phrase; 'recapturing that moment' is wrong—use 'capture those moments'.

× We and the other peoples with us and the uh, whether the cars, the road, the wet Rd. rainy roads and the working shops and everything.

✓ We and the other people with us notice the cars, the roads, the wet rainy streets, the shops that are open, and so on.

'Peoples' is incorrect as the plural of people; use 'people'. The fragment was a run-on list; rephrase to a clear list using correct nouns ('roads' not 'Rd.' and 'streets' or 'roads'). 'Working shops' is unnatural; use 'shops that are open' or 'busy shops'.

× I prefer in other countries because there are many different places that we have never seen.

✓ I prefer places in other countries because there are many different sites we have never seen.

'I prefer in other countries' is incomplete; say 'I prefer places in other countries' or 'I prefer visiting other countries.' Also 'places' or 'sites' fits better with 'seen'.

× We want to capture that and we want to recall our memory in future.

✓ We want to capture them and recall the memories in the future.

Use 'capture them' (referring to places/moments) and plural 'memories'. 'In the future' is the correct phrase. 'Recall our memory' is awkward—'recall the memories' or 'remember' is better.

× We want to show them to our family, our members.

✓ We want to show them to our family members.

'Family, our members' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'family members' as the correct noun phrase.

× Like there is a many activities to capture to there is a very different feeling.

✓ There are many activities to capture, and there is a very different feeling.

Use plural 'There are' with 'many activities' (not 'a many activities'). Also separate clauses with 'and'. The structure was ungrammatical; this correction fixes subject-verb agreement and article usage.