视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, and avoid redundancy. Add one specific supporting detail (where/why) and use a linking phrase. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially when I travel or backpack. For example, I often stop during evening walks to photograph a colorful sky because the light makes the scene feel peaceful and memorable.

建议: Clarify preference with correct vocabulary and grammar. State a direct topic sentence, give two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid filler words. Use plural/singular appropriately and correct prepositions.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I grew up in a village and feel more connected to nature. Also, there are more natural scenes like fields and open skies at sunset, which are better for photography.

建议: Make the meaning clearer and correct grammar. Give a concise topic sentence and a specific reason why views abroad feel special, using a linking word to expand. Avoid repeating the same idea twice; provide an example.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they feel new and memorable compared with familiar scenes at home. For instance, I remember the coastal cliffs I photographed in Portugal more vividly because they were unlike anything I see locally.

× Of course I like take a picture of different view on the way during a back hostel.

✓ Of course I like to take pictures of different views on the way when backpacking.

Errors: missing 'to' before verb after 'like' (verb + to-infinitive or gerund required), singular/plural issues ('a picture' vs 'pictures', 'different view' vs 'different views'), incorrect phrase 'during a back hostel' (wrong word order and choice). Suggestion: Use 'like to take' or 'like taking'; use plural 'pictures' and 'views' to match general activity; replace 'during a back hostel' with 'when backpacking' or 'while staying in hostels'.

× I usually take a picture when I see beautiful sky in the evening.

✓ I usually take pictures when I see a beautiful sky in the evening.

Errors: singular/plural and article usage. 'a picture' is acceptable but 'pictures' sounds more natural for a habitual action; 'beautiful sky' needs the article 'a' to be grammatically correct. Suggestion: Use 'take pictures' for repeated actions and include 'a' before singular nouns like 'a beautiful sky'.

× So make me proud and happy when I see that.

✓ So it makes me proud and happy when I see it.

Errors: missing subject ('it') and wrong verb form 'make' instead of 'makes' for third-person singular; pronoun 'that' better as 'it' for clarity. Suggestion: Include subject and use correct third-person singular verb form: 'it makes'.

× I prefer wheel in rural area more than urban area because I said stay in the village.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas because I used to live in a village.

Errors: 'wheel' is incorrect word choice; singular/plural inconsistency ('rural area' vs 'urban area'); incorrect comparative phrasing 'prefer X more than Y' should be 'prefer X to Y'; 'I said stay' is incorrect — likely meant 'I used to stay' or 'I used to live'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer rural areas to urban areas' and 'used to live in a village' to express past habitual residence.

× So, uh, there is many good nature, uh, for take a picture and then have evening have beautiful sky.

✓ There is a lot of beautiful nature to take pictures of, and the evenings have beautiful skies.

Errors: 'there is many' should be 'there are many' or 'there is a lot of' depending on countability; 'nature' as uncountable should be 'beautiful nature' or 'many natural scenes'; missing 'to' before verb 'take' and wrong preposition after 'take pictures' (use 'of'); awkward phrase 'have evening have beautiful sky' needs restructuring and plural 'skies'. Suggestion: Use 'There is a lot of beautiful nature to take pictures of' and 'the evenings have beautiful skies' for clarity and correct grammar.

× I prefer view in other country because I need to save memory for another country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I want to save memories of other countries.

Errors: missing articles and plurals ('view' -> 'views', 'other country' -> 'other countries'); awkward phrasing 'save memory for another country' unclear — likely means 'save memories of other countries' or 'keep memories from other countries'; 'need to' may be better as 'want to' depending on meaning. Suggestion: Use plural forms for general preference and rephrase 'save memories of other countries'.

× In own country I already see every time then I need to save memories for another country.

✓ In my own country I have already seen everything many times, so I want to save memories from other countries.

Errors: missing possessive article 'my' ('In own country' -> 'In my own country'); tense/aspect and wording 'I already see every time' incorrect — use present perfect 'have already seen' and clarify frequency ('many times'); 'need to save memories for another country' should be 'want to save memories from other countries'. Suggestion: Use 'In my own country I have already seen everything many times, so I want to save memories from other countries.'