视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more natural and concise: use a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “important memories” and “special memory” are repetitive) and limit to up to 4–5 sentences. Use linking words like “for example” or “so” appropriately. Fix verb forms (“memorized” → “helps me remember”) and plural/singular agreement.

示例: Yes, I do. Taking photos helps me remember important moments with friends, so I try to capture different views when I travel. For example, on my last trip I photographed city skylines, coastal cliffs, and a busy market to remember the variety of places we visited.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence and give clear, specific reasons. Correct unclear phrases (e.g., “in my premium”) and grammar (“a lot of kind of views” → “many kinds of views”). Use one or two linking words to connect reason and example. Keep it concise and natural.

示例: I prefer urban views because cities offer many different photo opportunities, such as architecture, street scenes, and colorful markets. For instance, I enjoy photographing contrast between modern skyscrapers and old buildings when I visit downtown areas.

建议: Give a clearer, grammatical reason and a specific supporting detail. Fix tense and structure (e.g., “going to foreign countries has become difficult” and “seeing pictures of foreign countries feels more important”). Avoid repetition like “so that's why” and keep to 3–4 sentences max.

示例: I prefer views from other countries because travel has become harder recently, so I appreciate photos that show different cultures and landscapes. For example, I often look at pictures of European streets and Asian temples to learn about architecture and daily life abroad.

× Yes I do because it makes me memorized of my important memories and special memory with my friend.

✓ Yes, I do because it helps me remember my important and special memories with my friends.

The phrase 'makes me memorized' incorrectly uses the past participle 'memorized' after 'make'. English uses 'make' + object + base verb (e.g., 'make me remember') or a different verb such as 'help' + base verb. Also 'memory' should be plural when referring to more than one event and 'friend' should be plural if referring to more than one friend as implied. Suggest using 'helps me remember my important and special memories with my friends.' Grammar problem type ID: 9

× For example, when I went on a travel with my friends, I took a lot of pictures of different views in different places.

✓ For example, when I traveled with my friends, I took a lot of pictures of different views in different places.

'Went on a travel' is unnatural; the verb 'travel' can be used directly as the past tense 'traveled'. Using 'traveled with my friends' is more idiomatic. The rest of the sentence correctly uses past tense ('took'). Grammar problem type ID: 5

× I prefer views in the cities because I think in my premium there are a lot of kind of views that I can take pictures and there are a lot of things that I want to keep in mind.

✓ I prefer views in cities because I think my area has many kinds of views that I can photograph, and there are many things I want to remember.

Problems: 'in the cities' is better as 'in cities' for a general preference. 'In my premium' is incorrect; likely intended 'in my area' or 'in my neighborhood'. 'A lot of kind of views' should be 'many kinds of views' (plural and proper quantifier). 'Take pictures' is better as 'photograph' or 'take pictures of'. 'Keep in mind' should be 'remember'. The corrected sentence uses proper prepositions, quantifiers, verb forms, and word choices. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× So I prefer views in cities.

✓ So I prefer views in cities.

This sentence is acceptable as corrected above; no pronoun error remains. No change needed other than punctuation. However, if referring back to earlier sentence, it's fine as is. (No grammar problem to fix.) Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I prefer views in other countries because recently going to the foreign countries becoming difficult and so that's why seeing pictures of foreign countries is more becoming important.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because recently it has become difficult to travel to foreign countries, so seeing pictures of them has become more important.

Errors: 'recently going to the foreign countries becoming difficult' lacks auxiliary verbs and correct tense. Use present perfect 'has become' to describe a recent change with current relevance. 'Going to' should be 'to travel to', and 'foreign countries' does not need 'the'. 'More becoming important' is ungrammatical; use 'has become more important.' Also replace 'seeing pictures of foreign countries' with 'seeing pictures of them' to avoid repetition. These changes correct tense, verb forms, and article usage. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So that's why I prefer.

✓ So that's why I prefer them.

The original sentence ends with an implicit object missing. 'Prefer' is a transitive verb and typically needs an object ('them' referring to views in other countries). Adding 'them' clarifies the meaning and fixes the pronoun omission. Grammar problem type ID: 12