视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and clear: open with a direct topic sentence saying whether you like taking pictures, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words (umm, and) and repetition. Use correct verb forms and word order (e.g., “I take photos of different views because…”).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I visit parks or interesting places I take pictures and post them on my social media to share my free time activities with friends.

建议: Start with a clear statement of preference, then give specific reasons using linking words like “because” or “as”. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use comparative phrases correctly (e.g., “more spacious and comfortable than urban areas”).

示例: I prefer rural areas because they are more spacious and peaceful than cities. For instance, rural landscapes often have open fields and quiet paths, which I find more relaxing than busy streets.

建议: Give a direct answer first, then explain with a clear reason and one specific example. Correct grammatical mistakes (e.g., “I prefer views in my own country because I have already visited many places there”). Remove hesitations and unnecessary phrases like “I've prepared my bills.”

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I have already visited many of the best beaches and mountains here. For example, each summer I go to a familiar coastal town that has beautiful sunsets, so I feel more comfortable staying in my country than travelling abroad.

× Umm yes, I'm taking a picture and and different views because when I go different play place umm I post it in social my social media account because I want to flex my free time.

✓ Umm yes, I take pictures of different views because when I go to different places I post them on my social media account because I want to show how I spend my free time.

The original uses 'I'm taking' and 'picture' incorrectly. Use the simple present 'I take' for habitual actions. 'Taking a picture and and different views' is ungrammatical; use plural 'pictures of different views'. Missing preposition 'to' before 'different places'. Replace 'post it in social my social media account' with 'post them on my social media account' (correct preposition 'on' and pronoun agreement). 'Flex my free time' is informal and unclear; 'show how I spend my free time' is clearer.

× Umm for me is rural area areas because it more, umm, spacious and comfortable comfortable compared to urban umm.

✓ Umm for me, rural areas are better because they are more spacious and comfortable compared to urban areas.

The sentence has singular/plural inconsistency: 'rural area areas' is wrong; use 'rural areas'. The dummy subject is missing; include 'rural areas are better' and correct verb agreement 'they are' for plural. 'it more' should be 'they are more'. Duplicate word 'comfortable comfortable' removed.

× I I don't see uh experience or view in the prefer or view in the.

✓ I don't have much experience of or preference for those views.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It repeats words and lacks a clear object. Rewriting as 'I don't have much experience of or preference for those views' conveys the intended meaning and fixes structure and redundancy.

× For me, I've prepared my bills in my country because I every umm summer place or vacation place place be I already got it to travel compared to the other country I don't prefer because I never toured toward them.

✓ For me, I plan my trips in my own country because I already know the summer and vacation spots here; I don't prefer other countries because I have never traveled there.

The original mixes tenses and has incorrect verb forms. 'I've prepared my bills in my country' is odd; better to say 'I plan my trips in my own country'. 'I already got it to travel' is incorrect; use 'I already know' or 'I have already been' depending on meaning. 'I never toured toward them' is ungrammatical; use 'I have never traveled there'. The corrected sentence uses present simple and present perfect appropriately to indicate knowledge and lack of past experience.