视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is natural and relevant, but a bit wordy and contains minor grammar mistakes. Keep responses concise (max 5 sentences), start with a clear topic sentence, and use linking words to structure supporting details. Improve grammar: use correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., “share with my family,” “remind myself later that I was there”). Add one specific example to make the content more vivid.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I like to capture scenes to share with my family and to remind myself later that I was there. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach because the colors and reflections help me remember that special evening.

建议: Your preference is clear, but the answer is informal and slightly disorganized. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Avoid vague phrases and capitalize only as needed. Correct collocations (e.g., “rural views,” “cityscapes,” “night lights”) and remove filler words.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I grew up in the city and find cityscapes and night lights less interesting. For example, I enjoy photographing mountains and coastal scenes where I can also capture wildlife and open space.

建议: Good attempt to show balance, but the response is repetitive and contains hesitations. Provide a concise topic sentence, then explain briefly with a linking phrase (e.g., “however,” “for instance”) and give a specific contrast between the two. Avoid filler words like “like” and restructure sentences for grammatical accuracy.

示例: I can't choose because both domestic and foreign views have unique appeal. For instance, I enjoy familiar landscapes at home for their cultural context, but I also love views abroad for the different architecture and natural scenery they offer.

× It really helps me to remember the beautiful moments that I've been.

✓ It really helps me to remember the beautiful moments I have experienced.

The original uses 'I've been' which is incorrect because 'be' as a main verb needs a complement (place/time) or a past participle is required to express experiencing something. Use the past participle 'experienced' after 'have' to form the present perfect tense to mean you have lived/experienced those moments. Suggestion: use 'I have experienced' or 'I have had' rather than 'I've been' without an object.

× I also try to capture the moments to share my family or just remind myself later that I have been there.

✓ I also try to capture the moments to share with my family or just to remind myself later that I was there.

The verb 'share' usually requires the preposition 'with' when indicating the person you share something with. Also 'that I have been there' is awkward in this context; 'that I was there' or 'that I have been there' could work but 'that I was there' fits a simple past reference to being at a place. Suggestion: use 'share with my family' and 'remind myself that I was there' for clarity.

× Like rural area views more because I've always lived in urban areas and the sceneries of the tall buildings or Night Lights are a bit boring to me, so I prefer watching oceans or mountains and animals with people.

✓ I like rural views more because I've always lived in urban areas, and the scenery of tall buildings or night lights is a bit boring to me, so I prefer watching oceans, mountains, and animals with people.

Several issues: 'Like' needs subject 'I like'. 'rural area views' is wordy; 'rural views' is natural. 'sceneries' is uncountable here—use 'scenery' (singular). 'Night Lights' should be 'night lights' (lowercase) and treated as uncountable; use singular verb 'is' with the uncountable noun 'scenery'. Also punctuation and list formatting improved: use commas between items. Suggestion: start with 'I like rural views more' and use 'scenery' and correct verb agreement.

× ...the sceneries of the tall buildings or Night Lights are a bit boring to me...

✓ ...the scenery of tall buildings or night lights is a bit boring to me...

The noun 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and requires a singular verb form ('is' not 'are'). Using plural 'sceneries' is uncommon and forces incorrect plural verb agreement. Suggestion: use 'scenery' and 'is' for correct subject-verb agreement.

× Yeah, such thing.

✓ Yes, something like that.

The fragment 'Yeah, such thing' is ungrammatical because 'such' needs a noun phrase ('such a thing') and the casual phrasing is awkward. A complete and natural response is 'Yes, something like that' or 'Yes, that kind of thing.' Suggestion: use a full phrase to respond rather than an incomplete fragment.

× Well, it's hard to choose one because every country has its own like both beautiful urban areas and the rural ones at the same time.

✓ Well, it's hard to choose one because every country has both beautiful urban areas and rural ones.

The original sentence has extra filler 'its own like' and awkward word order. 'Has its own both' is incorrect. Simplify to 'has both... and...' to express two simultaneous qualities. Suggestion: remove 'its own like' and use the correlative conjunction pair 'both... and...' for clarity.

× So I love both of them because they are different in their own ways.

✓ So I love both because they are different in their own ways.

'Both of them' is grammatically acceptable, but in context 'both' alone is more concise after previously mentioning the two categories; keeping 'of them' is not wrong but slightly redundant. This is a stylistic improvement rather than strict grammar; however, to maintain parallelism with the previous corrected sentence it's smoother to use 'both'. Suggestion: say 'I love both because...' or keep 'both of them' if preferred.