视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar (verb forms and articles), reduce redundancy, and add a clear topic sentence plus one specific detail. Use linking words if adding extra information. Keep it under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I love taking photographs. For example, I often go to the beach in summer to photograph the shoreline and the seabirds because the light is beautiful at sunset.

建议: Make a concise topic sentence stating your preference, correct grammar (articles, plurals), and explain clearly with one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, so). Avoid vague phrases like “light of the night.”

示例: I prefer rural areas for photography because natural light is more abundant and landscapes are less cluttered. For instance, open fields at sunrise give softer light and fewer buildings to distract from the subject.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, correct pronoun and phrasing errors, and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid unclear expressions like “my guys” or “all in front of my eyes.”

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new landscapes and cultural sights I haven’t seen before. For example, traveling abroad lets me photograph unique architecture and markets that are rare in my hometown.

× Yes, I love take photos always.

✓ Yes, I always love taking photos.

Errors: missing -ing form after 'love' (verb + -ing form, ID 8) and incorrect adverb placement (sentence structure, ID 26). Explanation: After verbs of preference like 'love', use the -ing form (taking). Place adverbs of frequency (always) before the main verb phrase or after 'be' (I always love taking...). Suggestion: say 'I always love taking photos.'

× I go to the beach on on summer and I like to take pictures about the beach or the animals that you find there.

✓ I go to the beach in the summer and I like to take pictures of the beach or the animals you find there.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'on on' and wrong preposition 'about' (preposition use, ID 11) and article/phrase issues for time expression (sentence structure, ID 26). Use 'in the summer' for seasons and 'pictures of' to indicate subject of photos. Remove duplicated word 'on'. Also 'the animals you find there' is clearer without 'that'. Suggestion: 'I go to the beach in the summer and I like to take pictures of the beach or the animals you find there.'

× I believe that rural areas are better for taking photos because you have the light of the sun or the light of the night and in urban areas the building.

✓ I believe that rural areas are better for taking photos because you have sunlight or nighttime lighting, whereas in urban areas the buildings

Errors: awkward phrase 'the light of the sun or the light of the night' and missing plural/article for 'building' (article errors, ID 22) and sentence structure (ID 26). Use 'sunlight' and 'nighttime lighting' or 'artificial light' and plural 'buildings'. Suggestion: '...because you have sunlight or nighttime lighting, whereas in urban areas the buildings...' (complete comparison in next clause).

× And don't permit the sunlight.

✓ and they don't let the sunlight through.

Errors: incorrect subject and verb form (pronoun/subject missing and verb choice, IDs 12 and 8) and incorrect verb 'permit' and word order (sentence structure, ID 26). Use 'they' or 'buildings' as subject and 'let ... through' to express blocking light. Suggestion: combine with previous sentence: '...whereas in urban areas the buildings block the sunlight.'

× I prefer the views in another country because I think that my guys can see different things that that they never see.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I think people there can see different things they have never seen.

Errors: incorrect phrase 'my guys' and wrong demonstrative 'in another country' vs plural (singular/plural issue, ID 1) and repeated 'that that' (sentence structure, ID 26) and tense of 'see' (past participle needed: 'have never seen', ID 9). 'My guys' is informal/unclear; use 'people there'. Use plural 'other countries' to match general preference. Use present perfect 'have never seen' for experiences up to now. Suggestion: 'I prefer views in other countries because I think people there can see different things they have never seen.'

× So from my perspective, all in front of my eyes are awesome.

✓ So from my perspective, everything I see is awesome.

Errors: unnatural word order 'all in front of my eyes are awesome' (sentence structure, ID 26) and wrong noun phrase 'all' vs 'everything' (word choice/adjective use, ID 13). Reorder to 'everything I see is awesome' for natural English. Suggestion: 'So from my perspective, everything I see is awesome.'