视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it is slightly long and contains small grammatical issues and redundancy. Make a clear topic sentence, use one or two specific supporting details, and vary vocabulary. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., “in my Instagram” → “on my Instagram”; “when years come by” → “when years go by”).

示例: Yes — I love taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel abroad I photograph cityscapes and landmarks and post them on my Instagram so I can look back years later and remember those trips.

建议: Your response answers the question but has grammatical errors and repetition. Use a direct topic sentence, avoid redundant phrases, and give one specific reason or example. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “As someone who lived in a rural area right now” → “Since I currently live in a rural area”).

示例: I prefer views in urban areas. Since I currently live in the countryside, city sights feel fresh and offer more to explore, such as unique architecture and busy street life.

建议: You give a balanced answer but it is slightly repetitive and has grammar and word-choice issues (e.g., “theirs architectural designs” → “their architectural designs”; “enjoy life here in the Philippines” is vague). Keep sentences concise, use linking words for contrast, and include one specific example or detail about what you want to see abroad or at home.

示例: I’d like to see views in other countries in the future because I’m curious about their architectural styles. However, at the moment I prefer exploring my own country’s landscapes, such as coastal towns and historic sites, even though international travel can be costly.

× That's why I like to post it in my Instagram so that when years come by, I can just go back and reminisce the cities I've visited or views that I've taken.

✓ That's why I like to post them on my Instagram so that when years go by, I can just go back and reminisce about the cities I've visited or the views I've taken.

Errors: incorrect use of object and preposition and missing preposition before 'reminisce'. 'Post it' should be 'post them' because 'pictures' (implied plural) is plural (Singular and plural issue and pronoun reference). 'In my Instagram' should be 'on my Instagram' (incorrect preposition). 'When years come by' is unnatural; use 'when years go by'. 'Reminisce the cities' needs 'reminisce about the cities' or 'reminisce the cities I've visited' is incorrect. Suggestions: ensure pronouns agree with the noun they replace, use 'on' with social media, and use 'reminisce about' with the object preceded by 'about'.

× As someone who lived in a rural area right now, I would prefer views in the urban areas.

✓ As someone who lives in a rural area right now, I prefer views in urban areas.

Errors: tense and article/pronoun usage. 'Who lived' is past tense but 'right now' requires present tense: use 'who lives' (present tense issue). 'I would prefer' suggests conditional; simple 'I prefer' fits the current preference. 'The urban areas' should be 'urban areas' unless referring to specific areas. Suggestions: match tense to time adverbs and avoid unnecessary articles.

× It's just something new to me and it's something that I can explore a little bit more.

✓ It's something new to me and something I can explore a little more.

Errors: wordiness and awkward repetition. Repeating 'it's something' is redundant. 'A little bit more' can be tightened to 'a little more'. Suggestions: simplify sentences by removing repetition and extra fillers for clarity.

× In the future, I would definitely want to explore other countries and to see theirs architectural designs and what they can offer.

✓ In the future, I would definitely like to explore other countries and see their architectural designs and what they can offer.

Errors: infinitive and pronoun errors. Use parallel structure: 'would like to explore... and see...' rather than 'would want to... and to see'. 'Theirs architectural designs' is incorrect: use possessive adjective 'their' before 'architectural designs'. Suggestions: use parallel verb forms and correct possessive adjectives.

× But as of right now, I really want to enjoy the beauty of my country.

✓ As of right now, I really want to enjoy the beauty of my country.

Error: unnecessary conjunction. Starting with 'But' after a previous contrasting statement is acceptable but can be omitted for smoother flow. Suggestion: remove 'But' when not needed to avoid informal redundancy.

× However, it's very expensive to go on a trip and enjoy life here in the Philippines, but I would really want to explore all the things.

✓ However, it's very expensive to take a trip and enjoy life here in the Philippines, but I would really like to explore everything.

Errors: verb choice and word choice. 'Go on a trip' is acceptable but 'take a trip' is more natural. 'I would really want to explore all the things' is awkward; use 'I would really like to explore everything'. Also consider removing the second 'but' or rephrasing to avoid two contrasting conjunctions. Suggestions: choose idiomatic expressions ('take a trip') and use 'everything' instead of 'all the things'.