打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid repetition of similar adjectives (clearly, cohesively, coherently) and remove unnecessary phrasing like 'one person'.

示例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me organize my ideas more effectively. For example, when I attend lectures I jot down key points and diagrams, which makes reviewing for exams much easier.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, then add a specific reason with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like 'much better in terms of usage' and redundant clauses such as 'provided by my computer.'

示例: I type on a desktop keyboard every day because my workplace provides a desktop computer. I find desktop keyboards more comfortable and faster for long tasks, so I can work more efficiently.

建议: Clarify the time and give a coherent reason. Use one or two sentences only and avoid incomplete or confusing clauses. Correct grammatical errors (e.g., 'that's it's', incomplete ending).

示例: I learned to type about 15 years ago when computers became common at school. At that time most assignments had to be printed, so I practiced typing to complete and submit my work.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide a specific method and an example. Fix grammar (e.g., 'will means') and avoid filler words like 'obviously'.

示例: I improve my typing through regular practice; for instance, I use online typing exercises for 15 minutes each day and type all my emails and reports to build speed and accuracy.

× I prefer handwriting. I believe that handwriting provides the ability for one person to organize their thoughts clearly, cohesively, and coherently.

✓ I prefer handwriting. I believe that handwriting gives a person the ability to organize their thoughts clearly, cohesively, and coherently.

The original sentence used 'provides the ability for one person,' which is wordy and slightly awkward. Replacing with 'gives a person the ability' uses a more natural pronoun ('a person') and a clearer verb ('gives'). This improves readability and pronoun usage by avoiding awkward 'one person' construction. Suggestion: use concise pronoun forms like 'a person' or 'someone' and prefer simpler verbs like 'gives' or 'allows'.

× For example, when listening to a subject or a lecture, I prefer taking notes for future references.

✓ For example, when listening to a lecture, I prefer taking notes for future reference.

Two issues: 'listening to a subject' is unnatural; 'a lecture' is correct. Also 'references' should be singular 'reference' after 'future'. Use of the preposition 'to' with 'listening' is fine but the noun choice and pluralization were incorrect. Suggestion: use 'listening to a lecture' and the fixed expression 'for future reference'.

× I type on a desktop keyboard every day and that is because I work on a desktop provided by my computer.

✓ I type on a desktop keyboard every day because I work on a desktop computer provided by my workplace.

The phrase 'provided by my computer' is illogical; a computer does not provide itself. Also the original had redundant 'that is because'. Correction removes redundancy and clarifies agent 'provided by my workplace'. This fixes subject-verb clarity and logical reference. Suggestion: ensure the provider of an item is a sensible agent (workplace, company, school).

× Desktops are much better in terms of usage compared to laptops.

✓ Desktops are much better to use than laptops.

'Better in terms of usage compared to' is wordy and slightly awkward. 'Better to use than' is a clearer comparison structure. This corrects sentence structure and comparative phrasing. Suggestion: use simple comparative patterns: 'X is better than Y' or 'X is easier to use than Y'.

× 15 years ago I learned to type on a keyboard.

✓ Fifteen years ago I learned to type on a keyboard.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but numbers under twenty are usually written as words in formal writing. No tense error. Suggestion: spell out small numbers in formal responses; otherwise the past tense 'learned' correctly matches '15 years ago'.

× I believe that's it's.

✓ I believe that's it.

The original 'that's it's' incorrectly uses two contractions back-to-back creating an extra 'it'. The intended phrase is 'that's it' (that is it). Suggestion: avoid chaining contractions; use 'that is' if unsure.

× With the introduction of computers, most assignments were asked to be provided using printing machines and paper.

✓ With the introduction of computers, most assignments were required to be submitted on paper.

The phrase 'were asked to be provided using printing machines and paper' is awkward and unidiomatic. 'Required to be submitted on paper' is a natural way to express that assignments had to be turned in on paper. Suggestion: use 'submitted' or 'turned in' and the collocation 'on paper'.

× As a result, I had to provide those assessments on.

✓ As a result, I had to submit those assessments on paper.

The original sentence ends with a preposition and omits the object ('on' what?). Adding 'paper' completes the idea: 'submit assessments on paper.' Suggestion: ensure prepositions have objects and use 'submit' for assignments.

× By practicing, for example, if you type every day at your office or at home, obviously this will means that you'll be better at typing.

✓ By practicing; for example, if you type every day at your office or at home, obviously this will mean that you'll be better at typing.

There are two errors: 'this will means' uses incorrect verb form—'means' should be base form 'mean' after 'will'. Also sentence punctuation/structure is awkward; using a semicolon or rephrasing improves clarity. Suggestion: after 'will' use the base verb form ('mean'), and simplify the introductory clause: 'By practicing. For example, if you type every day at your office or at home, you will become better at typing.'