打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and reduce fillers (e.g., "uh", repeated words). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a brief example. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

示例: I prefer typing to handwriting because it is much faster and easier to edit. For example, when I write essays on my laptop I can rearrange paragraphs and correct mistakes quickly, which saves time and improves the final draft.

建议: Avoid repetition and fillers; give a clearer structure: state the main fact, then give one contrasting detail. Use a linking word for contrast (e.g., "however").

示例: Yes. As a computer science student I use my laptop almost every day to write code. However, at my internship I use a desktop because it has a faster keyboard and better performance for running large programs.

建议: Make the answer grammatically correct and add a short supporting detail with a linking word. Use past tense consistently and plural/singular agreement.

示例: I learned to type in elementary school. In our computer classes we practiced touch-typing and learned techniques to increase speed and accuracy.

建议: Avoid repetition and use clearer phrasing. State the main method, then give a specific example or result using a linking word like "so" or "therefore".

示例: I don't practice typing formally; instead I improve through regular use. Because I write code every day, my typing speed and accuracy have gradually increased, so I can work more efficiently.

× I personally would like to type on the computer more than writing it on the paper because it is faster and I can edit and drag my text around, uh, real quick.

✓ I personally would rather type on the computer than write on paper because it is faster and I can edit and drag my text around quickly.

The original mixes forms incorrectly: 'would like to ... more than writing' should be parallel: 'would rather V than V'. Also 'writing it on the paper' is unidiomatic; use 'write on paper'. 'Real quick' is informal; use the adverb 'quickly'. Use of parallel infinitive/verb forms improves grammaticality and clarity. Suggestion: use parallel structures (would rather + base verb) and prefer standard adverbs (quickly).

× Yes, as a CS student I type on the laptop laptop almost every day because I need to write programs and when I'm uh, in the office doing my internship, I type on the desktop which is a lot faster.

✓ Yes, as a CS student I type on my laptop almost every day because I need to write programs, and when I'm in the office doing my internship I type on a desktop, which is much faster.

Errors: repeated word 'laptop laptop' and incorrect article use 'on the laptop'—use 'my laptop' to show possession. Comma needed before coordinating conjunction 'and'. 'The desktop' changed to 'a desktop' unless referring to a specific desktop; 'much faster' is more natural than 'a lot faster'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: fix repetition, use appropriate articles and commas, and choose natural adverbial phrases.

× I learned typing when I was in elementary school.

✓ I learned to type when I was in elementary school.

'Learned typing' is nonstandard here. After 'learn' with an action, use the infinitive 'to type' (learned to type) or the gerund in different contexts (I've learned typing as a skill) but 'learned to type' is the correct and idiomatic past-tense form. Suggestion: use 'learned to + base verb' for acquiring skills: 'learned to type.'

× We have computers class that we learn how to type fast and correctly.

✓ We had a computer class where we learned how to type quickly and correctly.

Multiple issues: tense should match past ('have' -> 'had') because earlier sentence is past. 'Computers class' is ungrammatical; use 'computer class' or 'computer classes'. Use 'where' or 'in which' to link clause. 'Fast' as an adverb should be 'quickly'. Also ensure past tense consistency: 'learned'. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistency and use correct noun forms and adverbs.

× I do not intentionally try to train my typing, but as I do do type regularly because I need to write code, I gradually improve on this.

✓ I do not intentionally try to train my typing, but because I type regularly to write code, I gradually improve.

Problems: duplicated 'do' ('do do') is an error. Word order and connectors are awkward: 'as I do type regularly because I need to write code' should be simplified. 'Improve on this' is wordy; 'improve' suffices. Removing unnecessary auxiliaries and tightening the sentence improves clarity. Suggestion: remove duplication, simplify clause order, and use concise phrasing (because I type regularly to write code).