打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Use correct adverbs (e.g., 'better' not 'betterly'), reduce hesitations, and organize your response: give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and a short example. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' smoothly.

示例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me concentrate and remember information better. For example, when I take lecture notes by hand, I process ideas more deeply and can recall key details later. Therefore, handwriting is more effective for my learning.

建议: Avoid repeating words and list items clearly and briefly. Start with a topic sentence, then add two concise specific uses with linking words like 'for' or 'such as'. Keep sentences varied to sound natural.

示例: I use a laptop keyboard every day because it is more portable than a desktop. I mainly use it for emails and online classes, and I also make slides and write reports for my medical studies.

建议: Correct verb tenses and avoid repetitions and hesitations. Give a clear time reference and one concise summary of what you learned, using linking words like 'where' or 'where I'. Use correct nouns (typing, not typings) and limit to 2–3 specific examples.

示例: I learned to type after I finished 10th grade when I took a three-month computer course. There I started as a beginner and learned basic typing, creating files and folders, sending emails, and making simple graphs.

建议: Be precise and avoid redundant phrasing like 'more improved'. Use a clear sequence with linking words such as 'after' and 'then', and quantify improvements if possible. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: After completing the three-month computer course, my sister gave me a laptop, so I practiced typing every day. Over time, my speed and accuracy improved significantly through regular practice and typing exercises.

× It helps me concentrate and remember things betterly.

✓ It helps me concentrate and remember things better.

'Betterly' is not a correct adverb form in English. The correct comparative adverb is 'better'. Use 'better' after verbs to indicate improved ability (e.g., remember things better).

× For example, uh, when I when I write, when I take notes on lectures.

✓ For example, when I write or when I take notes during lectures.

The original sentence repeats fragments and lacks a clear connector. Remove the repeated phrase and use a conjunction (or) and the preposition 'during' to show time. This creates a complete, fluent clause that fits the context.

× Like when I take notes on lectures, uh, it helps me recall recall it recall details easily.

✓ When I take notes during lectures, it helps me recall details easily.

The original contains repeated words and an unnecessary filler 'uh', and uses 'recall it' which is incorrect. Remove repetitions and fillers; 'recall details' is the correct verb-object structure. Use 'during lectures' for the timing phrase.

× I type on a laptop keyboard every day because because it is more portable than desktop.

✓ I type on a laptop keyboard every day because it is more portable than a desktop.

The sentence repeats 'because' and omits the indefinite article before 'desktop'. Use 'a desktop' to refer to a desktop computer in general. Remove duplicate words.

× I use it for emails, online classes or making slides for my medical classes.

✓ I use it for emailing, attending online classes, and making slides for my medical classes.

List items should be parallel in form. Change 'emails' to the gerund 'emailing' and 'online classes' to 'attending online classes' to match the -ing forms and improve parallelism.

× Writing reports and attending online classes, so laptop keyboard.

✓ I also use it for writing reports and attending online classes, so I prefer a laptop keyboard.

The original is a sentence fragment and lacks a subject and verb. Make it a full sentence by adding 'I also use it for...' and state the conclusion 'so I prefer a laptop keyboard' to convey the meaning clearly.

× After my 10th class, I take a computer classes for three months.

✓ After my 10th class, I took computer classes for three months.

The action happened in the past, so the verb should be in the past tense 'took'. Also, use 'computer classes' (plural) without the article 'a' because 'classes' is plural.

× There I started as a beginner.

✓ There I started as a beginner.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the context; no change needed. (Included for completeness because it matches no listed error types.)

× I beginner as a trainee, A trainee or trainee, Umm, I learned basic uh, like typings, uh, making files, folders, sending emails and making questions that type of question, making graphs.

✓ I began as a trainee. I learned basic skills such as typing, creating files and folders, sending emails, making graphs, and writing simple questions.

Multiple errors: 'I beginner' is incorrect form; use past 'I began'. Capitalization and repetition removed. Use 'basic skills' instead of 'basic like typings'. 'Typing' is the correct noun; 'typings' is incorrect. Use parallel noun phrases (creating files and folders, sending emails). 'Making questions that type of question' is unclear; replace with 'writing simple questions'. This correction addresses verb form, article use, word choice, and sentence structure issues.

× After I completed my three month computer classes, my sister brought me a laptop.

✓ After I completed my three-month computer classes, my sister bought me a laptop.

The sequence is past, so past tense 'bought' is correct; 'brought' implies carrying to a location where the speaker already was. Also hyphenate 'three-month' as a compound adjective. 'Computer classes' is fine.

× Then I started typing regularly and slowly my speed and accuracy became more improved.

✓ Then I started typing regularly, and slowly my speed and accuracy improved.

Use simple past 'improved' rather than 'became more improved' (redundant). 'Became more improved' is awkward; 'improved' is sufficient. Add a comma and 'and' to connect the clauses smoothly.