打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use correct tense and articles. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference now, then briefly contrast with the past. Use linking words like "however" and correct phrases such as "computerized system" and "type documentation."

示例: I prefer typing now because my workplace uses a computerized system. However, when I was at school, handwriting was more common. Typing is faster for patient records and makes it easier to share information.

建议: Start with a direct answer (desktop) and then give a brief reason. Avoid repeating 'we' and simplify phrases. Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" to connect reason and result.

示例: I use a desktop keyboard every day because our Hospital Information System runs on desktop computers. Therefore, I routinely enter patient data and documentation at a workstation.

建议: Combine short sentences into a clear, chronological answer. Correct tense and phrasing ("encountered the computer" or "had computer class"). Avoid redundant expressions like "way back."

示例: I learned to type when I was in first grade, at about seven years old. It was my first computer class and I was excited to learn by practicing the exercises my teacher gave us.

建议: Give a direct method and a short example of practice. Use specific activities (online exercises, typing tests) and clearer vocabulary ("typing" not "typewriting"). Use linking words like "for example" to add detail.

示例: I improve my typing by practicing regularly to build muscle memory. For example, I do online typing exercises and timed tests several times a week, which helps increase my speed and accuracy.

× When I was attending my school years, handwriting is the preferred form of documentation.

✓ When I was attending school, handwriting was the preferred form of documentation.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was attending school'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Is' is present tense; replace with 'was'. Also 'my school years' is awkward; 'attending school' is more natural.

× But nowadays when you are working in a company such as hospital, we have already a computerized based system wherein we type, written or input the documentation through a computer.

✓ But nowadays, when you work in a place such as a hospital, we already have a computer-based system in which we type or input documentation using a computer.

Tense and form consistency: 'when you are working' can be simplified to 'when you work'. 'Company such as hospital' needs article 'a' and 'place such as a hospital' is clearer. 'Computerized based' is incorrect; use 'computer-based'. 'Written' is wrong in the list of verb forms; use 'type or input' to keep verbs parallel. Use present simple for general statements.

× We have this computerized system which is called Hospital Information System in our workplace wherein we input our general information and data, documentation and everything we did to our patient through our desktop.

✓ We have a computerized system called the Hospital Information System at our workplace, where we input general information, documentation, and everything we do for our patients using a desktop computer.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'we did to our patient' mixes past tense with present routine; use 'do for our patients'. Use article 'the' for a named system and plural 'patients' for generalization. 'Through our desktop' is improved to 'using a desktop computer'. Also ensure parallel list ('information, documentation, and everything we do').

× It all started way back when I was in grade one.

✓ It all started way back when I was in grade one.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses past tense to describe a past event. Included here for completeness.

× I was seven years old.

✓ I was seven years old.

No correction needed; this is a correct past-tense statement.

× It was the first time I have encountered my computer subject and it I was amazed during that time seeing and holding it by hand, practicing whatever our teacher has told us to do.

✓ It was the first time I had encountered a computer class, and I was amazed then, seeing and holding the computer, practicing whatever our teacher had told us to do.

Use past perfect ('had encountered') for an action that occurred before another past moment ('it was the first time'). 'Computer subject' is better as 'computer class'. Remove extra 'it'. Use past perfect 'had told' to keep sequence of past events. Make phrasing clearer and parallel.

× Just like any form of activities or tasks, you can improve your typewriting through memorization and practicing.

✓ Just like any form of activity or task, you can improve your typing through memorization and practice.

Use singular 'activity or task' for parallelism and generalization. 'Typewriting' is uncommon; use 'typing'. After 'through', use nouns 'memorization and practice' rather than gerund 'practicing' for parallel structure.

× You need to have a repetition and muscle memory in order to memorize the keyboard and improve your typewriting.

✓ You need repetition and muscle memory in order to memorize the keyboard and improve your typing.

Article use: 'a repetition' is unnatural here; use uncountable 'repetition'. 'Typewriting' replaced with 'typing' for natural modern usage. Sentence is present general advice, so present tense is correct.