打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and unclear fragments. Also correct vague phrases (e.g. “you chose them that I'm thinking about them”) and use precise vocabulary (e.g. “shows I’m thinking of them”).

示例: I prefer handwriting. For example, when I travel I send postcards because they feel more personal and show I’m thinking of the recipient. In addition, writing by hand takes more time than a text, which makes the gesture more meaningful.

建议: Be concise and avoid filler words (umm). Give a clear reason and a brief supporting detail with linking words. Use correct terms (e.g. “ergonomic keyboards” instead of “typing boards”).

示例: I usually type on a desktop keyboard both at work and at home. This is because desktop setups allow me to use ergonomic keyboards and a proper monitor height, which reduces strain on my wrists and improves comfort.

建议: Open with a direct, simple statement of timing, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and make the timeline clear (school then apprenticeship).

示例: I learned to type in seventh grade during weekly IT classes at school. Later, during my apprenticeship I continued practicing in additional classes, and consistent practice helped me increase both speed and accuracy.

建议: Give a clear, structured answer: state your main method, explain how you practice, and mention specific tools with linking words. Avoid repetition and ensure details are specific (e.g. naming typing programs or exercises).

示例: I improve my typing mainly by regular practice. For example, I use online programs like TypingClub to do short daily drills that track speed and accuracy; over time this routine increased my words-per-minute and reduced errors.

× I prefer handwriting. I usually write my friend's postcards from places I've traveled to because I think it's such a nice gift and you chose them that I'm thinking about them.

✓ I prefer handwriting. I usually write my friends' postcards from places I've traveled to because I think it's such a nice gift and it shows that I'm thinking about them.

Original sentence uses friend's (singular) but refers to multiple friends; possessive plural should be friends'. Also phrase 'you chose them that I'm thinking about them' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replaced with 'it shows that I'm thinking about them' to convey intended meaning clearly and correctly use a pronoun referring back to the act of sending postcards.

× And it's not just sending a text by phone, it's your T it's that you actually take time out of your day to write something.

✓ And it's not just sending a text by phone; it's that you actually take time out of your day to write something.

Original contains 'it's your T it's' which appears to be a spoken hesitation or typo and disrupts sentence structure. Removing the extraneous fragment and joining clauses with a semicolon or conjunction clarifies the comparison and corrects adjective/adverbial use.

× In my professional and also my private life, I usually type on a desktop keyboard.

✓ In my professional and private life, I usually type on a desktop keyboard.

The phrase 'my professional and also my private life' is redundant; removing 'also' produces a more natural expression. This is an article/style improvement rather than strict grammar, but fits under article/errors affecting naturalness.

× One of the main reasons is that it's more convenient because you can also buy umm, typing boards that are better for your health or for your wrists.

✓ One of the main reasons is that it's more convenient because you can also buy ergonomic keyboards that are better for your health and for your wrists.

'Typing boards' is nonstandard; 'ergonomic keyboards' or 'keyboard wrist rests' are correct terms. 'Better for your health or for your wrists' is awkward; use 'and' to link related benefits. This corrects word choice/quantifier use and improves clarity.

× Umm, which?

✓ Which do you mean?

Fragment 'Umm, which?' is incomplete and unclear. Expanding to 'Which do you mean?' provides a complete question with subject and verb, resolving the sentence structure error.

× The skill I learned when I was in 7th grade because we had umm weekly IT classes where we learned how to use a computer and also how to type.

✓ I learned the skill when I was in 7th grade because we had weekly IT classes where we learned how to use a computer and how to type.

Original begins with 'The skill I learned' creating a noun phrase fragment; make it a complete past-tense sentence 'I learned the skill' to match the past time frame. Also remove redundant 'umm' and duplicate 'also' for clarity.

× After that when I started my apprenticeship we also had weekly classes and I've got better by practicing.

✓ After that, when I started my apprenticeship we also had weekly classes and I got better by practicing.

Mixing past simple 'started' with present perfect 'I've got better' is inconsistent. Use past simple 'I got better' to maintain past timeline. Also add a comma after 'After that' for clarity.

× You can improve your typing by practicing once a week.

✓ You can improve your typing by practicing regularly, for example once a week.

Original suggests a fixed schedule 'once a week' which may be intended as an example. Clarifying with 'for example' and 'regularly' makes the modal 'can' sentence more natural and accurate in advice giving.

× I also did that first in 7th grade during my IT classes which we had every week.

✓ I first did that in 7th grade during my weekly IT classes.

Original 'did that first in 7th grade during my IT classes which we had every week' is wordy and has awkward clause order. Reordering to 'I first did that in 7th grade during my weekly IT classes' uses past tense consistently and is more concise.

× So I improved my typing speed and there's also programs that you can use which measure the time you have.

✓ So I improved my typing speed and there are also programs you can use that measure your typing time.

'There's also programs' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; with plural 'programs' use 'there are'. Also 'which measure the time you have' is vague; 'that measure your typing time' is clearer. This fixes pronoun reference and agreement.