打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your current preference, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unfinished phrases.

示例: I prefer typing now because it is much faster and more convenient. For example, I can quickly edit text, copy and paste information, and search online references, which saves time when writing emails or reports.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence and organize reasons with linking words. Use specific, relevant vocabulary (e.g., notes, medical records) and correct small errors ("tires" unclear).

示例: I use both. For example, I use my laptop for browsing the web, taking notes and watching videos, while I use a desktop at work to enter patient names and medical records because it has a larger screen and more reliable software.

建议: Use correct tense and clearer sequencing. Begin with a topic sentence stating when, then describe the learning method concisely with linking words. Fix unclear phrases ("keywords", "five page book").

示例: I learned to type in the fourth grade when it was part of our curriculum. First we memorized the keyboard layout, and then we practiced by typing exercises from a five-page workbook to improve speed and accuracy.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and specific methods for improvement. Use linking words to show sequence or cause. Mention concrete practices (timed tests, online tutors) and measurable improvements.

示例: I improve my typing through daily practice and targeted exercises. For instance, I do timed typing tests, use online typing programs to practice accuracy, and set weekly goals to increase my words-per-minute, which has steadily improved my speed and reduced errors.

× I used to prefer handwriting because I don't have the the devices to do that back then.

✓ I used to prefer handwriting because I didn't have the devices to do that back then.

The original mixes past context 'used to' and present tense 'don't have'. Use past tense 'didn't have' to match 'back then'. Also remove duplicated 'the'. Use 'the devices' if referring to specific devices; past tense ensures consistency.

× However, these devices made me realize that typing saves you time and also very efficient because right now you can click, edit, copy and paste different words all at once within a few seconds and also.

✓ However, these devices made me realize that typing saves time and is very efficient because you can click, edit, copy and paste different words within a few seconds.

The sentence had missing verb 'is' before 'very efficient' and unnecessary repetition 'and also' and 'all at once'. Streamline to maintain subject-verb structure: 'typing saves time and is very efficient'. Remove redundant phrases for clarity.

× I do type on both.

✓ I type on both.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in a simple present affirmative sentence. Use 'I type on both' to state habitual action.

× First, I type on my laptop for entertainment purposes whenever I search for websites and different kinds of note taking like tires.

✓ First, I type on my laptop for entertainment purposes, whenever I search websites and take different kinds of notes like essays.

Use 'search websites' (no 'for') and 'take notes' instead of 'note taking'. 'Tires' is likely a wrong word; replace with 'essays' or another intended example. Add comma for clarity.

× Meanwhile I do desktop typing for office work, mainly on typing different patient names and data.

✓ Meanwhile I do desktop typing for office work, mainly typing different patient names and entering data.

'On typing' is incorrect; use the present participle 'typing' as a verb phrase. Add 'entering' to clarify 'data' handling.

× I'll learn to type on a keyboard.

✓ I learned to type on a keyboard.

The question asks about when the student learned; use past tense 'learned' rather than future 'I'll learn' to indicate completed action in the past.

× Back in my 4th grade it was a subject in my school.

✓ Back in fourth grade it was a subject at my school.

Use 'fourth grade' (no 'my 4th grade') and 'at my school' is the correct preposition for location. Maintain past tense 'was' is fine.

× We had to type first by memorizing the keyboard and then letting us handle keywords by typing what was on our five page book.

✓ We had to type first by memorizing the keyboard and then practice typing what was in our five-page book.

'Letting us handle' is awkward and ungrammatical here. Use 'practice typing' and 'in our five-page book' with hyphenated compound adjective 'five-page'. Also 'keywords' unnecessary; simplify to 'what was in the book'.

× Every skill is improved by constant practice, and I did practice a lot because I started young, so after getting older, each time I become more skilled and more proficient in typing or in coding.

✓ Every skill is improved by constant practice, and I practiced a lot because I started young, so as I got older, I became more skilled and more proficient in typing and coding.

Tense consistency problems: change 'did practice' to simple past 'practiced'; 'after getting older' to 'as I got older'; 'each time I become' to past 'I became'. Use 'and coding' instead of 'or in coding' for parallelism.