打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and small grammar errors (e.g., 'specially' -> 'especially', 'taking down notes' -> 'taking notes').

示例: I prefer handwriting for deep study but I use typing for quick lecture notes. For instance, when I need to memorize complex concepts I write by hand because it helps me remember better; however, during fast-paced lectures I type notes on my laptop to keep up.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence in simple past, use correct tense and fewer redundant phrases. Link reasons with words like 'because' or 'so'. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I always used', 'every day', 'we were in online classes').

示例: I used my laptop keyboard every day in high school because we had online classes during the pandemic. Since I didn't have a tablet, I relied on my laptop to type notes while the teacher taught.

建议: Give a single clear sentence stating when you learned, then add one concise supporting detail. Avoid confusing or irrelevant information and correct grammar and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain how you learned.

示例: I learned to type at about five years old because my father often brought his laptop home. I practiced by typing movie titles and simple words while playing, which helped me get comfortable with the keyboard.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence about your main method for improving typing. Then give specific details and sequence using linking words like 'for example' or 'after that'. Fix grammar and unclear phrases ('practice overnight', 'I got a perfect score').

示例: I improved my typing through targeted practice and a lab simulation in my nursing informatics class. For example, we practiced touch-typing with our eyes closed, so I kept practicing at home until I could type accurately and eventually achieved a perfect score.

× For example when I am studying I prefer handwriting, specially if the topic really needs in depth learning.

✓ For example, when I am studying I prefer handwriting, especially if the topic really needs in-depth learning.

'specially' is a misspelling; correct adverb is 'especially'. Also 'in depth' used as a compound adjective before a noun should be hyphenated as 'in-depth'. Add a comma after the introductory clause 'For example' for clarity.

× But for typing I can just use it for taking down notes when my professor is discussing the lesson.

✓ But for typing I can just use it to take notes when my professor is discussing the lesson.

Using 'use it for taking down notes' is wordy and 'taking down notes' is less natural. Replace with the infinitive 'to take notes'. Also 'discussing the lesson' is fine; this change improves idiomatic pronoun and verb usage.

× Before I always use my laptop keyboard everyday when I was in high school because during that time it was pandemic and we are in online class and I do not have iPad before that is why I always use my keyboard to type the notes which my professor is discussing.

✓ Before, I always used my laptop keyboard every day when I was in high school because during that time there was a pandemic and we were in online classes and I did not have an iPad; that is why I always used my keyboard to type the notes that my professor was discussing.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses. Use past tense consistently (used, was, were, did not have) because the events occurred in the past. 'Everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverb). 'It was pandemic' should be 'there was a pandemic'. 'We are in online class' should be past 'we were in online classes'. 'Which my professor is discussing' becomes 'that my professor was discussing' to match past context.

× I learned at early age, when I was five years old, my father, who is a seafarer, always brought his new laptop and I always played there like the dress up Barbie watching movies where I always type the title of it it, it's good.

✓ I learned at an early age; when I was five years old my father, who is a seafarer, often brought his new laptop and I used to play dress-up Barbie and watch movies, and I always typed the titles; it was fun.

Use past tense consistently for past events: 'learned', 'was', 'brought', 'used to play', 'typed', 'was'. Add the article 'an' before 'early age'. 'Dress up Barbie' should be 'dress-up Barbie' and 'watching movies' becomes 'watch movies' to parallel structure. Remove duplicate 'it'. Replace 'it's good' with 'it was fun' to match past tense and be idiomatic.

× From my experience in one of my subject in nursing informatics laboratory, we had the simulation where we close our eyes and type.

✓ From my experience in one of my subjects in the nursing informatics laboratory, we had a simulation where we closed our eyes and typed.

Use plural 'subjects' and include the definite article 'the' before a specific laboratory. 'Had the simulation' is better as 'had a simulation'. Also adjust tense to past ('closed', 'typed') to match the recounted experience.

× So I practice overnight with for it and good thing I got the perfect score and it was just hard work.

✓ So I practiced overnight for it, and the good thing is I got a perfect score; it was just hard work.

Use past tense 'practiced' for a past action. Remove the incorrect preposition sequence 'with for' and use 'for it'. Add 'the' before 'good thing' and rephrase for clarity. Maintain consistent tense in the clause describing the result; present 'is' can be used to comment on the result, but keeping past ('was') is also acceptable: here we use 'the good thing is' to highlight the positive outcome and then explain it 'it was just hard work'.