打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with brief examples. Avoid repetition and unfinished phrases. Use linking words (for example, furthermore) to make it coherent, and keep your answer to 3–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer typing because it is faster and makes editing simple. For example, when I work on long assignments I can reorganize paragraphs quickly, and I can share documents with classmates via email or cloud storage. Furthermore, using spell-check reduces mistakes, so overall typing saves me time.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and add one concise supporting detail explaining why the laptop is preferred. Avoid repeating the same idea twice. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: I usually type on a laptop rather than a desktop because I don't own a desktop and I value portability. For instance, I can work in different rooms or at a café without carrying heavy equipment.

建议: Start with a clear answer (e.g., I learned gradually rather than formally), then give a brief timeline or example of when you needed it. Avoid redundant phrases and long clauses. Use linking words like 'so' or 'as a result' to show cause.

示例: I didn't take formal lessons; I learned gradually as I needed to use computers. For example, during secondary school I started typing more for essays and projects, so I practised on my own and improved over time.

建议: Provide a structured response: one sentence stating your main method, one with a specific activity or resource, and one giving an example of progress. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

示例: I improve my typing mainly through regular practice by typing documents and notes. Additionally, I watch tutorial videos on YouTube to learn proper finger placement and shortcuts. As a result, my speed and accuracy have improved over several months.

× Then I can easily edit my works.

✓ Then I can easily edit my work.

'Work' as an uncountable noun is used to refer to written work in general; using the plural 'works' is incorrect here. Use the base noun 'work' or 'my documents' depending on meaning.

× Especially when I'm working on a long project, I'm working on an assignment.

✓ Especially when I'm working on a long project or an assignment.

The original sentence repeats 'I'm working' unnecessarily and has awkward coordination. Combine the ideas with 'or' and use a single verb phrase to avoid redundancy.

× It's also easier for me to share my documents with others.

✓ It's also easy for me to share my documents with others.

Style: 'easier for me' is acceptable but repetitive with other 'easier' uses. Change to 'easy for me' for smoother parallelism. (If keeping comparison with another method, 'easier' is fine.)

× Then correcting my mistakes is quite easy when I type as opposed.

✓ Correcting my mistakes is quite easy when I type compared with handwriting.

The phrase 'as opposed' is incomplete; it requires an object (as opposed to handwriting). Provide the comparison target to complete the sentence.

× Well, I do not type every day, but whenever I need to write I do that using my laptop.

✓ Well, I do not type every day, but whenever I need to write, I do it using my laptop.

Use 'do it' to refer to the action 'type/write' rather than 'do that'. 'Do it' is the common pronoun usage for actions; add a comma before the subordinate clause for clarity.

× I do not currently have a desktop, so I use my laptop and it gets the job done.

✓ I do not currently have a desktop, so I use my laptop; it gets the job done.

Add appropriate punctuation to separate clauses; pronoun 'it' is correct but the sentence reads better with a semicolon or full stop.

× It's also easier for me to do with my laptop.

✓ It's also easier for me to do on my laptop.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'laptop' when referring to performing tasks using the device ('do on my laptop'), not 'with'.

× I never really took out time to learn how to type and this is because there's not been any time for me to learn to do that and some things just came to me naturally.

✓ I never really took the time to learn how to type because there was not any time for me to learn, and some things just came to me naturally.

Use the fixed expression 'take the time' (not 'took out time'). Match past tense consistently: 'there was not' rather than 'there's not been' to keep past reference. Simplify and punctuate for clarity.

× As I grew there was an increasing need to switch to computer usage, so it was just something that I learnt to do by myself.

✓ As I grew, there was an increasing need to switch to using a computer, so I learned to do it by myself.

Add a comma after introductory clause. Use 'learned' (American) or 'learnt' (British) consistently; 'use a computer' is more natural than 'computer usage'. Replace 'to do it by myself' for clarity.

× I try to get better in typing by doing it often.

✓ I try to get better at typing by doing it often.

Use the correct preposition 'better at' with 'get better at something'. 'In typing' is incorrect here.

× Regular use makes me better.

✓ Regular practice makes me better at typing.

Specify what regular use refers to: 'practice' and 'at typing' clarify the object and improve sentence completeness.

× Yeah. Then I also, if there's something that I'm not clear about, I go on YouTube, watch videos on how to fix it, how to get better at that.

✓ If there's something I'm not clear about, I go on YouTube and watch videos on how to improve and fix it.

Remove filler 'Yeah. Then I also,' and streamline the sentence. Use parallel structure ('improve and fix it') and combine clauses with 'and' rather than commas to avoid run-on phrasing.

× So yeah, that those are things that.

✓ So yeah, those are the things I do to improve.

The original fragment is ungrammatical and incomplete ('that those are things that'). Provide a complete sentence specifying what 'those' refers to.