旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Bạn trả lời rõ ý chính nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, sự lặp từ và tiếng tặc lưỡi (uh, umm) làm giảm độ tự nhiên. Cần sửa động từ (I'm prefer → I prefer), loại bỏ tiếng tặc lưỡi và rút gọn câu sao cho tự nhiên (1–3 câu). Thêm liên từ ngắn như "because" hoặc "so" để nối ý và cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể về cảnh bạn thích nhìn (ví dụ: biển, núi).

示例: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery outside. For example, on train journeys I like watching the passing countryside and small villages, which helps me relax.

建议: Câu trả lời thiếu hoàn chỉnh, ngữ pháp nhiều lỗi (me and my parents → my parents and I; always have → always had). Bạn cũng dừng lại và lặp từ. Cần trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề, theo sau là chi tiết cụ thể (một chuyến đi nổi bật: địa điểm, thời gian, hoạt động). Dùng quá khứ cho sự kiện đã xảy ra và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết.

示例: Yes, when I was a child my parents and I often went on long summer trips. One memorable trip was to the coast when I was ten, where we spent a week swimming, collecting shells and exploring nearby towns.

× Umm, to be honest, I'm prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling because, uh, when I sit by the window, I can see all the view uh, in outside and I feel very comfortable and peaceful after.

✓ Umm, to be honest, I prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling because, when I sit by the window, I can see all the view outside and I feel very comfortable and peaceful afterward.

Error type: third person singular / verb form and other small issues. The main mistake is using 'I'm prefer' which incorrectly combines the auxiliary 'am' with the main verb 'prefer'; the correct simple present is 'I prefer'. Also 'in outside' is ungrammatical; use 'outside' without a preposition. 'After' at the end is informal and unclear; 'afterward' (or 'afterwards') is the correct adverb to express the idea of 'later' or 'as a result'. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual preferences (I prefer), drop unnecessary auxiliaries, use correct prepositions (outside), and use appropriate adverbs (afterward).

× When I was a child, uh, me and my parents, uh, always have a journey, a long journey in the summer, uh, like umm, the last, the last summer, I and my family.

✓ When I was a child, my parents and I always took long journeys in the summer. For example, last summer my family and I took a trip.

Error type: sentence structure and tense agreement. 'Me and my parents' is incorrect word order and case; use 'my parents and I'. 'Always have a journey' mixes present tense with past context; because the sentence begins 'When I was a child' the past tense should be used: 'always took long journeys'. The phrase 'a long journey' repeated is redundant; use plural 'journeys' for habitual trips. The fragment 'like umm, the last, the last summer, I and my family' is disfluent and ungrammatical; rephrase to 'For example, last summer my family and I took a trip.' Suggestions: use correct subject order and case, match tense to time markers (past with 'when I was a child'), avoid repetition, and break into two clear sentences if giving an example.