旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases."So much of funds" and "you please have new look" are unclear—use concrete vocabulary like "reduces my stress" or "makes me feel relaxed." Aim for 2–3 sentences, use linking words such as "because" or "especially when", and correct basic grammar (e.g., "I like watching the view outside" not "watching outside").

示例: I do look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because watching the scenery makes me feel calm and relaxed. Especially when I go somewhere new, I enjoy noticing landmarks and landscapes, which helps reduce my stress and makes the trip more interesting.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two concrete reasons with linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., "it gives me good memories" not "it's give me"). Replace vague phrases like "I cheer for my memories" with specific meanings such as "I feel happy remembering the trip." Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition about posting on social media unless adding a reason.

示例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside because they help me remember places and moments. I usually post some pictures on Instagram to share with friends, and later looking at them makes me feel happy and nostalgic.

建议: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give 1–2 specific supporting reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "also"). Fix grammar ("I prefer the sea" not "I like to prefer sea") and avoid repetition. Use precise vocabulary: "relax on the beach", "eat seafood", "go swimming". Limit to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

示例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. I also love seafood and the relaxing atmosphere of the coastline, which lifts my mood.

× Yes, I like watching outside.

✓ Yes, I like watching outside.

The sentence uses 'watching' correctly as a gerund after 'like' so no change in wording is needed; however, a more natural phrasing would be 'Yes, I like looking outside.' Use 'looking' for viewing scenery from a vehicle.

× Uh, I when I go, especially I, when I go for somewhere new, it's uh, it's new feeling calm and relaxing for me.

✓ When I travel somewhere new, it feels calming and relaxing for me.

The original sentence contains redundant and disordered phrases. Rearranging to 'When I travel somewhere new, it feels calming and relaxing for me' corrects word order and tense. Use 'travel' instead of 'go for somewhere' and 'feels' to match 'it' as subject.

× It reduce the stress and so much of funds and you please have new look and uh, I want to see outside.

✓ It reduces stress and relieves a lot of tension, and you get a new perspective, so I want to look outside.

Use 'reduces' to agree with singular subject 'It'. 'So much of funds' is incorrect phraseology; replace with 'a lot of tension' or 'stress'. 'You please have new look' is ungrammatical; 'you get a new perspective' conveys the intended meaning. Maintain present simple for general statements.

× Yes, of course I take photos because it's give me a good memory and I post in social media or like Instagram or Facebook.

✓ Yes, of course I take photos because they give me good memories and I post them on social media like Instagram or Facebook.

Use plural 'they' and 'give' to agree with plural 'photos'. Use 'memories' (plural) and 'post them on' for correct object pronoun and preposition. 'On social media' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× I post that and I feel like when I return to my home, I see their photo and I cheer for my memories.

✓ I post them, and when I return home I look at the photos and feel happy remembering those moments.

Replace 'that' with 'them' to refer to photos. 'Return to my home' is wordy; 'return home' is natural. 'Their photo' is incorrect pronoun; use 'the photos' or 'those photos'. 'I cheer for my memories' is unnatural; use 'feel happy remembering those moments.' Maintain consistent tense and pronouns.

× It's give me good positive thinking for.

✓ They give me positive thoughts.

'It's give' is incorrect; use 'They give' to match plural 'photos'. 'Positive thinking for' is incomplete; 'positive thoughts' or 'a positive mindset' is clearer. Keep present simple.

× I like to prefer sea because I like water and I like to swim on the laying on the, uh, like a beach and I like a seafoods and I do I most of them.

✓ I prefer the sea because I like water and swimming on the beach, and I enjoy seafood.

'Like to prefer' is redundant; use 'prefer'. Use 'the sea' with article. 'Swim on the laying on the beach' is ungrammatical; use 'swimming on the beach' or 'swimming at the beach'. 'Seafoods' should be 'seafood' (uncountable). Simplify to natural collocations.

× I like to prefer a sea because I like a water and I like foods also.

✓ I prefer the sea because I like the water and I also like the food.

Use 'the sea' and 'the water' when speaking generally about a specific type (sea/water). 'Foods' is awkward; use 'food' or 'seafood'. Avoid 'like to prefer' redundancy.

× So it's, it's give me a good vibrations and.

✓ So it gives me good vibes.

'It's give' should be 'it gives' to agree with subject. 'A good vibrations' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'good vibes' or 'a good feeling'. Simplify phrasing for natural spoken English.