旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatical, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, you know) and correct verb forms and articles. Aim for 2–3 sentences and include a concrete example of what you enjoy looking at.

示例: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, on long bus journeys I like observing small villages and farmland, which helps me relax and appreciate the trip.

建议: Make your answer direct and coherent: give one clear reason and one specific example. Fix grammar (e.g., "I take photos"), avoid repetition, and choose correct adjectives ("disturbing" is incorrect here). Keep it to 2 sentences and use a linking word like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery because I want to capture memories and share them with my family. For example, I took several photos of a red sunset from the car and later sent them to my parents.

建议: Answer clearly with a topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific, logical reasons. Correct grammar ("In my opinion," "they are"), avoid vague or incorrect phrases ("things which is touchable," "stunning will sky"), and reduce hesitations. Use linking words like "because" and provide a concrete example or feeling to support your choice.

示例: I prefer the mountains because I feel safer and I enjoy hiking there. For instance, I like walking on marked trails and admiring clear mountain views, while the sea makes me uneasy because I am not a strong swimmer.

× Absolutely, because when I traveling, I just wanted to enjoy at the moment and you know, the uh, when you are traveling, the stunning view can't make uh, can make me feel more enjoyable and chill, so I always.

✓ Absolutely, because when I am traveling, I just want to enjoy the moment and, you know, when you are traveling, the stunning view can make me feel more relaxed and happy, so I always do.

Errors: 'when I traveling' misses auxiliary and should be 'when I am traveling' (use present continuous for current habitual action). 'I just wanted' mixes past with general habit; use 'I just want'. 'Enjoy at the moment' is incorrect preposition and article—use 'enjoy the moment'. 'Can't make uh, can make' is redundant and incorrect modal use; choose 'can make'. 'Feel more enjoyable' uses adjective where adverb or different verb needed; use 'feel more relaxed and happy' or 'feel enjoyment'. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for habits, use correct auxiliary for -ing verbs, remove redundancies, and choose appropriate adjectives/adverbs.

× Yes, I always do, because I want to record this moment, I want to, I want to share this beautiful, this pretty disturbing views and moment to my friends, my close friends, my family and so on. So I always take photo about the.

✓ Yes, I always do, because I want to record this moment and share these beautiful, though sometimes disturbing, views and moments with my friends and family. So I always take photos of them.

Errors: 'this pretty disturbing views' has number and article mismatch and adjective order issues; use 'these ... views'. 'Share ... to my friends' incorrect preposition—use 'share ... with'. 'Take photo about the' is ungrammatical; use 'take photos of them'. Also 'this' vs 'these' for plural. Suggestion: use plural forms with correct demonstratives, use 'with' for sharing, and 'take photos of' to indicate photographing objects.

× So in my opinions I prefer the mountains because I have things which is touchable.

✓ So in my opinion I prefer the mountains because they are more tangible.

Errors: 'opinions' should be singular 'opinion' for the speaker's view. 'I have things which is touchable' is unclear and uses incorrect pronoun and verb agreement; 'things which is' should be 'things which are' but better phrased as 'they are more tangible'. Suggestion: use 'in my opinion' and match plural subjects with plural verbs; rephrase awkward expressions.

× I think she is more risky and dangerous.

✓ I think it is riskier and more dangerous.

Errors: 'she' incorrectly refers to 'the mountains' or 'the sea'—use 'it' or name the noun. 'More risky' should be 'riskier' (comparative form). 'More risky and dangerous' is redundant; use 'riskier and more dangerous' if both needed. Suggestion: use correct pronoun for the referenced noun and correct comparative adjective forms.

× I uh, I at least I felt a little bit afeared and scared about the sea.

✓ At least I felt a little afraid and scared of the sea.

Errors: 'afeared' is nonstandard; use 'afraid'. Redundant 'I uh, I at least I' should be simplified. Preposition 'scared about the sea' is less natural than 'scared of the sea'. Tense: use present or present habitual if describing general feeling—'I feel a little afraid' or past if referring to a past trip. Suggestion: use standard adjective 'afraid', correct preposition 'of', and streamline filler words.

× So I think mountain always has stunning will sky.

✓ So I think mountains always have a stunning, clear sky.

Errors: 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' to match general preference. 'Has stunning will sky' is ungrammatical: 'will' is incorrect here, likely meant 'clear' or 'wide'—use 'a stunning, clear sky'. Verb agreement: plural subject 'mountains' with 'have'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives and ensure subject-verb agreement and logical word order.