旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more concise, correct grammar and avoid fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Replace vague phrasing like “relax in my mind” with natural expressions.

示例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I find the changing landscape calming, and for example, seeing trees and fields helps me unwind after a busy day.

建议: This response is not an answer to the question. Answer directly with a short topic sentence, then add one specific detail or example. Use linking words if you give extra information.

示例: Sometimes I do, especially when the view is unusual. For example, I often photograph colourful sunsets or interesting countryside scenes when the bus stops or I’m a passenger in a car.

建议: Organise the response: state your preference clearly, then give specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (use plural/singular properly) and avoid repetition. Provide one concrete example or feeling to support your view.

示例: I prefer the mountains because I love being surrounded by greenery and wildlife. For instance, hiking in the hills lets me smell the pine trees and hear birds, which I find more refreshing than the beach.

× Yes, of course I do because uh, I like watching scenery over run landscape and it helps me to relax in my mind so.

✓ Yes, of course I do, because I like watching the scenery and the surrounding landscape, and it helps me relax.

The student used incorrect prepositions and awkward word choice: 'over run landscape' is ungrammatical. Use 'the scenery' (definite article) and 'surrounding landscape' as the correct noun phrase. Also 'relax in my mind' is unnatural; use 'helps me relax'. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'so'. Use commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Do you take photos sooner?

✓ Do you take photos often?

The student's reply repeats the examiner's question incorrectly and uses 'sooner' (which refers to time comparison) instead of 'often' (frequency). The intended meaning is likely frequency of taking photos, so 'Do you take photos often?' or 'Do you take photos?' is correct. This fixes word choice and sentence intent. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer mountains 'cause I like green and when I go to mountain I can see so many greens and animals and I can feel the grounds or smells from the plants.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I like the green scenery, and when I go to the mountains I can see many plants and animals, and I can smell the scents of the plants.

Articles are missing or incorrect: use 'the mountains' when speaking generally about a type, and 'the green scenery' or 'greenery' rather than 'green'. 'Go to mountain' needs plural or 'a mountain' with article; use 'the mountains'. 'So many greens' is unnatural—use 'many plants' or 'greenery'. 'Feel the grounds' is incorrect; you 'feel the ground' or 'feel the breeze' and you 'smell' scents, not 'smells from the plants'. Clarify and restructure the sentence for natural English. Grammar problem type ID:22

× It's nice. If I go to the beach, I don't feel, I don't feel like that.

✓ It's nice. If I go to the beach, I don't feel the same way.

The phrase 'I don't feel, I don't feel like that' is repetitive and uses a vague pronoun 'that' without clear antecedent. 'Feel the same way' is the natural idiom to contrast feelings. Remove repetition and use a clear comparison. Grammar problem type ID:12