建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and fix errors (e.g., "There is/There are", "It has 180 floors"). Use a linking word if adding another detail.

示例: Yes, there is a very tall building near my home. It has about 180 floors and includes a large shopping mall, so many people visit it for shopping and dining.

建议: Respond directly with a clear statement, give one or two specific reasons and correct tense/use of verbs. Remove irrelevant or unclear phrases ("I worked in the building ever"). Use linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, I often take photos of that building because its architecture is striking and the glass facade reflects the skyline beautifully, so the pictures look dramatic.

建议: Start with a direct answer naming the building, then give two precise reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitations and repetition; use clearer phrasing like "I'd recommend visitors see it because..."

示例: Yes, I would like visitors to see the skyscraper near my home because it is an iconic symbol of the city and offers panoramic views from its observation deck.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with correct word choice (e.g., "live on the top floor" not "leave the top"). Avoid repeating the same idea; use linking words like "because" and "so" for clarity.

示例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the views from the top floors are spectacular, so I could enjoy the city skyline every day and feel more privacy.

× Yes, there is a very tall building near my home.

✓ Yes, there are very tall buildings near my home.

The student replied to a question asking 'Are there tall buildings near your home?' The question uses plural 'buildings', so the correct reply should use plural 'there are'. Match number (singular/plural) between question and answer to be coherent.

× It there is 180 floors in this building.

✓ There are 180 floors in this building.

Incorrect word order and subject-verb agreement for 'there is/are'. With a plural noun '180 floors' use 'there are' and place 'there are' at the start of the clause: 'There are 180 floors in this building.'

× There is a big shopping mall near the building.

✓ There is a big shopping mall near the building.

This sentence is correct: singular 'a big shopping mall' matches 'there is'. No change needed.

× Yes, I take a lot of photos of this building.

✓ Yes, I take a lot of photos of this building.

This present simple sentence is acceptable if the student means a habitual action. No grammatical change required.

× Oh, it is fantastic. I worked in the building ever, you know.

✓ Oh, it is fantastic. I have worked in the building before, you know.

The use of 'worked' alone suggests simple past but 'ever' is incorrect here. To express experience at an unspecified time before now, use present perfect: 'I have worked' and replace 'ever' with 'before'. This matches the present reference 'it is fantastic.'

× The building I just talked is very, is very beautiful building.

✓ The building I just talked about is very beautiful.

The verb phrase 'talked' needs the preposition 'about' to be transitive here: 'talk about something.' Also remove the redundant 'is very' repetition and the extra noun 'building' which is already referenced by 'The building'. Clean structure: 'The building I just talked about is very beautiful.'

× It's fantastic.

✓ It's fantastic.

Sentence is correct as a comment. No grammatical correction needed.

× I would like to introduce all the visitors to visit it.

✓ I would like to introduce it to all visitors.

The original is wordy and uses 'introduce' plus 'to visit' awkwardly. Use 'introduce it to all visitors' or 'encourage all visitors to visit it.' Also word order: direct object 'it' should follow 'introduce'.

× Uh, it is, it is a symbol of uh, my city.

✓ It is a symbol of my city.

Repeated fillers 'it is, it is' and 'uh' are speech disfluencies; grammatically the correct concise sentence is 'It is a symbol of my city.'

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

Add comma after 'Yes' for correct punctuation in writing. The sentence is otherwise grammatically correct.

× I would like to live in a tall building because the view of the tall building is fantastic.

✓ I would like to live in a tall building because the view from a tall building is fantastic.

Use preposition 'from' to indicate viewpoint: 'view from the building' rather than 'view of the building' which describes the building itself. Also use 'a tall building' for generality.

× I can see all the views of our of the city in a tall building.

✓ I can see all the views of our city from a tall building.

Remove the duplicated 'of' and use 'from' to indicate vantage point. 'Views of our city' is fine, but 'from a tall building' clarifies location.

× I would like to leave the top of the building.

✓ I would like to live at the top of the building.

The student likely meant 'live' not 'leave'. Use preposition 'at' or 'on' for location within a building: 'live at the top' or 'live on the top floor.' Also corrected verb from 'leave' to 'live'.