建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (singular/plural, prepositions) and avoid listing unrelated places. For example, say whether there are many tall buildings and give one or two examples with brief descriptions.

示例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For instance, there is a large hospital tower and a multi-storey shopping center about ten minutes away, both of which are visible from my street.

建议: Start with a clear yes/no and a brief reason, then add one specific example using linking words (for example, last month...). Reduce hesitation and filler words, and keep to 2–3 sentences. Correct awkward phrases like “photo joining person” to “photography enthusiast.”

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings because I like architectural details. For example, last month in Shimla I photographed several striking shopping malls and restaurant facades, which had interesting shapes and colors.

建议: Give a direct answer naming the building, then explain briefly why with specific reasons or known facts. Avoid repetition and filler. Use correct vocabulary (tall, know about it from travel shows/articles). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world. I want to see the observation deck and experience the city view, which I have seen only in photos and documentaries.

建议: Answer directly and give one or two clear reasons with specific details (view, convenience, noise level). Fix grammar (prefer living in a tall building) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like because or however if adding a contrasting point.

示例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the high floors offer great views of the city and more natural light. However, I would also consider potential downsides like elevator wait times before deciding.

× I live in a city where many to all buildings near my hometown such as hospitals, shopping center, UH, Gurdwara, Saab and many more buildings.

✓ I live in a city where many buildings near my home, such as hospitals, a shopping center, a university (UH), a gurdwara, and many more, are located.

The original uses 'many to all' which is ungrammatical and ambiguous; 'many' alone is the correct quantifier. Also 'hometown' conflicts with 'I live in a city'; 'my home' is clearer. Several nouns require articles ('a shopping center', 'a university'); list items should be separated properly. Improve by using 'many' and adding appropriate articles and punctuation. Grammar problem type's ID: 14

× Being a photo joining person, I love to click a lot of photos.

✓ As a photography-enthusiast, I love to take a lot of photos.

'Photo joining person' is incorrect phrasing; use 'photography enthusiast' or 'person who enjoys photography'. 'Click' is informal and nonstandard in this context; 'take' is the typical verb collocated with 'photos'. Use 'as' to introduce a role rather than 'being'. Grammar problem type's ID: 13

× Uh, I vividly remember last month I went to Shimla, so that time I clicked a lot of photos, uh, related to tall buildings, uh, where I saw many big shopping malls, restaurants.

✓ I vividly remember that last month I went to Shimla, and at that time I took a lot of photos of tall buildings; I saw many large shopping malls and restaurants.

Mixes tense markers and informal verbs. 'Clicked' is informal; 'took' is preferred for photos. 'So that time' is awkward; use 'at that time' or link clauses with 'and'. 'Big' can be replaced with 'large' for formality. Ensure past tense consistency ('went' and 'took'). Grammar problem type's ID: 5

× It was very beautiful and.

✓ The scenery was very beautiful.

The original is an incomplete sentence ending with 'and' and lacking an object. Restructure to a complete clause conveying the intended meaning; here 'the scenery was very beautiful' completes the thought. Grammar problem type's ID: 26

× There are many buildings that I would like to visit, but now I but now one building that I want to visit that is Burj Khalifa.

✓ There are many buildings I would like to visit, but the one I most want to visit now is the Burj Khalifa.

Contains repetition ('but now I but now') and awkward structure. Simplify by removing redundancy and using 'the one I most want to visit now is...' to clearly indicate preference. Grammar problem type's ID: 26

× It was, it is very tale.

✓ It is very tall.

'Tale' is a misspelling of 'tall'. Maintain present tense 'is' when describing a building that still exists. Correct the adjective to 'tall' and remove redundant phrasing. Grammar problem type's ID: 13

× So I want to see that building. I know about, uh, many things from.

✓ So I want to see that building. I know many things about it from reading and videos.

The second sentence is incomplete ('from' with no object). Complete the sentence with a source ('reading and videos') and keep present tense 'know'. This fixes sentence fragment and clarifies meaning. Grammar problem type's ID: 6

× I want to live in a tall building because when we live there we can see the view from the window.

✓ I would like to live in a tall building because from there we can see a nice view from the windows.

Use 'would like' to express preference politely. 'When we live there' is acceptable but 'from there' is more natural. 'Window' pluralized to 'windows' or keep singular with article; adjust for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type's ID: 6

× It it is very beautiful.

✓ It is very beautiful.

Duplicate 'It it' is a repetition error. Remove the extra word to form a correct sentence. Grammar problem type's ID: 13

× So that's why I want to prefer live in a hall building.

✓ That's why I prefer to live in a tall building.

'Want to prefer live' is ungrammatical; use either 'want to live' or 'prefer to live'. 'Hall' is a misspelling of 'tall'. Use 'prefer to live' for expressing preference. Correct word order: 'prefer to live' and adjective 'tall'. Grammar problem type's ID: 26