建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, accurate and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), avoid contradictory or impossible facts (e.g., “1213 floors”), fix grammar (articles, word order) and repetition. Add one specific supporting detail with a linking phrase. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. However, in the city where I work there are a few high-rises, including my office building, which is quite tall and has a modern, spacious lobby.

建议: Use natural verbs (take photos, photograph) and correct grammar (relative clauses, tenses). Provide a brief reason and an example using a linking word (for example/for instance). Keep it to two sentences maximum.

示例: Yes, I often take photos of interesting buildings because I enjoy their design. For example, I recently photographed an old theatre with ornate facades that looked very unique.

建议: Be specific and avoid repetition. Use correct names and grammar (e.g., “a lot of things”, “view Dubai”). Give one clear reason and one detail using a linking word (because/so). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world. From the observation deck you can see the whole city, and I’d like to experience that view.

建议: Give a clear direct answer, correct grammar (avoid repeated words, use live not leave), and explain reasons concisely with linking words (because, however). Provide one specific supporting point (e.g., views, ventilation, convenience). Keep to two sentences.

示例: Yes, I would prefer to live in a tall building because apartments often have better views and ventilation. However, I would choose a higher floor to avoid street noise and get more natural light.

× Not really, but there are few tall buildings in the city where I work.

✓ Not really, but there are a few tall buildings in the city where I work.

Use 'a few' to indicate some; 'few' without 'a' implies almost none. Here the speaker means there are some tall buildings, so 'a few' is correct.

× In fact my the company I work is also very tall and it has around 1213 floors in it and it's look it looks very beautiful and spacious inside.

✓ In fact, the company I work for is also very tall; it has around 1,213 floors and it looks very beautiful and spacious inside.

Multiple issues: word order and missing preposition ('work for'), extra article ('my the'), punctuation to separate clauses, redundant words ('it's look it looks'). Also write numbers with commas for clarity. Correct structure: 'the company I work for' and 'it looks'.

× Yes, I often do click pictures of the buildings which I found very beautiful and which is unique from other buildings.

✓ Yes, I often take pictures of buildings that I find very beautiful and that are unique compared with other buildings.

'Do click' is unnatural; use 'take pictures'. Tense consistency: use present simple 'find' not past 'found' because habitual action. Relative clause agreement: 'which is unique' should be 'that are unique' to match plural 'buildings'. Use 'compared with' or 'compared to' rather than 'from'.

× Yes, I do want to visit Burj Khalifa which is in Dubai which is very unique and it has lot of other stuffs inside and also when when we go inside we can view the entire du Dubai from the top of the building.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai; it is very unique and has a lot of other things inside, and when we go up, we can view the entire city of Dubai from the top.

Use modal 'would like' for polite desire. Include definite article 'the' before famous building. Remove duplicate 'when'. Use 'a lot of' and 'things' not 'stuffs'. 'View the entire city of Dubai' is correct phrase. Use 'go up' or 'go inside' consistently.

× Well, yes, I prefer to live in a tall building because nowadays the the construction of buildings are happening in a way that there is no space in between.

✓ Well, yes, I prefer to live in a tall building because nowadays the construction of buildings is happening in a way that there is no space between them.

Subject-verb agreement: 'construction' is singular so use 'is'. Remove duplicate 'the'. 'No space in between' should be 'no space between them' for clarity and correct preposition use.

× But if I leave on the last floor then there is a chance of getting good ventilation and air.

✓ But if I live on the top floor, there is a better chance of getting good ventilation and fresh air.

Verb error: 'leave' should be 'live'. Use 'top floor' instead of 'last floor'. Improve collocation: 'fresh air' and 'better chance' are more natural. Present simple for general truth is appropriate.