建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve accuracy, fluency and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and pronunciation errors, use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles), and provide one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep the answer under five sentences.

示例: Yes. I live in Ho Chi Minh City, so there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there are several modern office skyscrapers and high-rise apartment blocks around my district. These buildings are mostly used by companies and residents, which makes the area very busy during weekdays.

建议: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear statement, then give specific reasons and an example using linking words. Reduce hesitation and repeat words, and use plural/singular forms correctly.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing buildings, especially from windows because the view often includes interesting light and cityscapes. For example, I often take pictures at sunset when the skyline looks particularly beautiful.

建议: Clarify meaning and stay on topic. Start with a direct answer, explain your preference clearly, and give a specific example of a building you would like to visit. Avoid unclear words and fillers and keep sentences concise.

示例: Not really — I prefer natural scenery to urban buildings. For instance, I would rather visit a seaside villa or a garden house where I can relax outdoors, rather than a tall city tower.

建议: Provide a structured, coherent response with clear condition and preference. Use linking words (if, but, however) to connect ideas, correct grammar for conditionals and time expressions, and give one concrete reason for each preference.

示例: It depends. If I work in the city, I would prefer living in a tall building because it is convenient and close to my office. However, when I raise a family, I would rather live in a house with a garden because it offers more space and a better environment for children.

× I live in Ho Chi Minh City, so close to me.

✓ I live in Ho Chi Minh City, so it is close to me.

The original sentence omits a subject for the clause 'so close to me.' Use 'it is' to refer to the city (or the place) and form a complete clause. Suggestion: include a clear subject and verb (e.g., 'it is close to me').

× Have uh, many Tom buildings.

✓ There are many tall buildings.

The original fragment lacks a proper subject and verb and contains mispronounced words. Use the 'there be' construction to state existence: 'There are many tall buildings.' Also correct 'Tom' to 'tall.'

× There's are a few, umm, apartments in my neighborhood.

✓ There are a few apartments in my neighborhood.

The phrase incorrectly combines 'There's' and 'are.' Use only 'There are' for plural 'apartments.' Remove contraction redundancy. Ensure subject-verb agreement for plural noun.

× Uh, official office workers and uh, taught us skyscaper, so yes.

✓ There are office workers and tall skyscrapers, so yes.

The original is unclear and uses incorrect pronouns and verbs ('taught us'). Rephrase to clearly state what exists: 'There are office workers and tall skyscrapers.' Use 'there are' for existence and correct adjective 'tall' and noun 'skyscrapers.'

× I, I also love take photos of building, especially from the windows.

✓ I also love taking photos of buildings, especially from windows.

After 'love' when referring to a general activity, use the gerund 'taking.' Also pluralize 'buildings' for general reference and remove the article before 'windows' when speaking generally.

× I also take photos from window, uh, when I see, uh, beautiful scenery yeah.

✓ I also take photos from windows when I see beautiful scenery.

Use plural 'windows' for general situations and place the prepositional phrase without extra commas. 'From window' is incorrect; use 'from windows' or 'from a window' depending on context.

× I love, uh, natural, uh, scenery, so I don't really choose uh, toy building to visit.

✓ I love natural scenery, so I don't usually choose to visit buildings.

The sentence has disfluent fillers and the phrase 'toy building' is incorrect. 'Don't really choose to visit buildings' is clearer; 'usually' better conveys frequency. Remove filler words for fluency.

× I just want to visit on uh, a House of a garden or uh, in the beach.

✓ I just want to visit a house with a garden or go to the beach.

Prepositions are incorrect: use 'a house with a garden' to show possession and 'go to the beach' rather than 'in the beach.' Also correct capitalization and articles.

× If I work, uh, I want to, uh, work at uh, Tom buildings because it's uh, convenient, uh,

✓ If I work, I would like to work in tall buildings because it's convenient.

Use 'would like' for a hypothetical preference and use 'in tall buildings' rather than 'at Tom buildings.' Also correct 'Tom' to 'tall.' Use 'in' for working inside a building. Remove fillers for clarity.

× but I, when I live in family, I want to live in a house for a week, a garden, umm, yes.

✓ But when I live with my family, I want to live in a house with a garden for a while.

'Live in family' is incorrect; use 'live with my family.' 'A house for a week, a garden' is awkward; combine into 'a house with a garden for a while.' This clarifies duration and relationship and uses correct prepositions and noun phrases.