建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence stating whether there are tall buildings, then give one or two specific details (what the building is, where it is, how long you've noticed it). Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (article use, verb forms). Use a linking word if adding a second detail.

示例: Yes, there is a tall office tower called the Hawaiian Building near my home. I can see it clearly from my window, and I have noticed it for as long as I can remember.

建议: Give a direct answer and one clear reason with a specific example. Correct word choice and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect your reason.

示例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of interesting buildings. For example, when I see a striking modern façade, I photograph it and post it on social media because I want to share the design with friends.

建议: Organise your response into a clear topic sentence and supporting details. State the building name and location, then give specific reasons (features, activities). Avoid hesitations and correct grammar (singular/plural, articles). Keep it to two to three concise sentences.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the Baiyoke Tower in the heart of Bangkok. It is one of the tallest buildings in Thailand and has a rooftop buffet and observation deck, so I want to go for the views and the unique dining experience.

建议: Answer directly and give one or two specific reasons with coherent linking. Correct grammar and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'dormitory', 'spacious'). Avoid unnecessary fillers and repetition.

示例: No, I wouldn't. I lived in a university dormitory before and it felt lonely and uncomfortable, so I prefer my own house because it has more space and privacy.

× Yes, that is a Hawaiian building near my home and I can see it clearly if an office tower.

✓ Yes, there is a high-rise building near my home and I can see it clearly; it looks like an office tower.

Original sentence uses wrong words ('Hawaiian' and 'if') and an unclear structure. The verb 'is' fits 'there is' for existence (There be issue) and 'if' is incorrect — likely intended 'like' or 'as'. Use 'high-rise' instead of 'Hawaiian' and rephrase into two clauses connected by a semicolon for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'there is' to state existence and 'like' to make comparisons; keep description concise.

× I'm not sure when it's when it was built, but I've been seeing it for as long as I can remember.

✓ I'm not sure when it was built, but I've seen it for as long as I can remember.

The sentence contains redundant phrases ('it's when it was') and incorrect progressive perfect 'I've been seeing' which is awkward for a long-term state; use simple present perfect 'I've seen' to express experience up to now. Also remove the extra 'when'. Suggestion: Use 'when it was built' for past event and 'I've seen' to describe a continuous awareness from past to present.

× Sometimes I take photos of buildings. When I see striking buildings and articulator, I usually put them on social media because I want to share them to other to other people.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of buildings. When I see striking buildings or architecture, I usually post them on social media because I want to share them with other people.

Errors: 'articulator' is a wrong word, should be 'architecture' (word choice error treated as preposition/word use here), 'put' is better as 'post' for social media, and preposition 'to other to other people' is incorrect — use 'with other people'. Suggestion: Use precise vocabulary ('architecture'), correct verb for action ('post'), and correct preposition 'with' to indicate sharing.

× Yes. One building that I would like to visit is the bayeux tower located in the heart of Bangkok is one of the more uh, tallest buildings in Thailand It's offers uh, a rooftop buffet with the reasonable price, so I would like to visit them if I.

✓ Yes. One building I would like to visit is the Bayeux Tower in the heart of Bangkok; it is one of the tallest buildings in Thailand. It offers a rooftop buffet at a reasonable price, so I would like to visit it.

Multiple errors: missing capitalization and article use ('the bayeux tower' should be 'the Bayeux Tower' or 'Bayeux Tower' depending on name), redundant 'is' creating a run-on, wrong comparative 'more uh, tallest' — use 'one of the tallest'. 'It's offers' is incorrect (extra 's'), and 'the reasonable price' should be 'a reasonable price'. Pronoun 'them' wrong for singular building — use 'it'. Suggestion: Capitalize proper nouns, remove redundant verbs, use correct comparative form, use 'it' for singular antecedent, and choose indefinite article 'a' for nonspecific price.

× No not really. I used to live in a dorm when I was as a university and it made me feel lonely and uncomfortable.

✓ No, not really. I used to live in a dorm when I was at university, and it made me feel lonely and uncomfortable.

Errors: missing comma after 'No', wrong preposition 'as a university' should be 'at university' or 'at a university'. Sentence needs a comma before conjunction 'and' connecting two clauses. Suggestion: Use 'at university' to indicate being a student and include proper punctuation for clarity.

× I prefer to live in my own house which is uh have area that I currently left and feel com feel more comfortable.

✓ I prefer to live in my own house, which has an area where I currently live and feel more comfortable.

Problems: incorrect verb 'have area that I currently left' and wrong pronoun/relative clause structure. 'Left' should be 'live'. Use 'which has an area where I currently live' to express the idea. Remove filler words and correct verb forms. Suggestion: Use 'which has' to describe the house, 'where I currently live' for location, and ensure verbs match intended meaning.