建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, sentence structure and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a concise reason using correct verb forms and prepositions. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid sentence fragments (e.g., combine the first two sentences).

示例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. Because we live close to the airport, there are height restrictions, so the tallest buildings in my neighbourhood are only two or three storeys high.

建议: Make a complete, concise response with correct vocabulary and grammar. State your main idea, then give specific reasons using simple linking words (e.g., because, for example). Avoid invented or incorrect words; use 'composition' or 'photographic skill' instead of 'odyssey'. Finish sentences fully.

示例: No, I don’t usually take photos of buildings because architectural photography needs specific skills. For example, you need to find the right angle and wait for the perfect light, so I prefer to leave it to professional photographers.

建议: Correct article use and word order, give a clearer description and reason with specific details. Begin with a topic sentence naming the place, then briefly describe what attracts you and why, using linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the Mushroom Castle Cafe, which is on the south side of my city. I’m interested because it has very unusual architecture — its rounded, colourful shapes look like a fairytale building, and I want to see the interior design up close.

建议: Provide a clear main sentence followed by specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., because, however) and correct phrasing like 'apartments don't offer' and avoid fragments. Mention specific advantages you value to make answer more convincing.

示例: No, I don’t want to live in a tall building because I prefer a house with a garden. For example, a house gives me more outdoor space for plants and relaxation, whereas apartments usually don’t offer a private garden.

× No, there aren't any tall building near by my neighborhood.

✓ No, there aren't any tall buildings near my neighborhood.

The noun 'building' should be plural 'buildings' after 'any' because 'any' with a countable plural noun requires plural form. Also 'near by' should be one word 'near' or phrase 'near my neighborhood'; corrected to 'near my neighborhood' for natural phrasing.

× Because we live close to the airport, they have some restriction for the building high.

✓ Because we live close to the airport, they have some restrictions on building heights.

Use plural 'restrictions' because there can be multiple rules. The preposition 'on' is used with 'restrictions'. 'Building high' is incorrect; the correct noun phrase is 'building heights'. This makes the sentence grammatically and idiomatically correct.

× So the tallest building in my neighborhood only two or three floors.

✓ So the tallest buildings in my neighborhood are only two or three floors high.

The original lacks a verb ('are') and has singular/plural mismatch. Use 'buildings' plural or restructure; add verb 'are' and adjective 'high' for correct description. Also align subject-verb number.

× No I don't because taking picture of building it requires sense of odyssey for example finding a good angle and the perfect light through the building.

✓ No, I don't because taking pictures of buildings requires a sense of artistry, for example finding a good angle and the perfect light on the building.

Use third person singular 'requires' to agree with the gerund subject 'taking pictures of buildings'. 'Picture' and 'building' should be plural when referring generally. 'Sense of odyssey' is incorrect collocation; 'sense of artistry' or 'an artistic sense' is more natural. Remove redundant 'it' after the gerund phrase. Use 'on the building' for light falling on it.

× It's required skill profession so I usually.

✓ It requires professional skills, so I usually don't.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'It requires professional skills' uses correct verb form and collocations. The fragment 'so I usually' is incomplete; adding 'don't' completes the thought: 'I usually don't' take such photos. Ensure sentence has a subject and verb.

× Yes, there is a name Mushroom Castle Cafe near in my city in the South side.

✓ Yes, there is a place called Mushroom Castle Cafe near my city on the south side.

Use 'a place called' to introduce a name. 'Near in my city' is incorrect; use 'near my city' or 'in my city'. 'South side' should be 'the south side' or 'on the south side' for correct preposition and article use.

× I would like to go visit because it is a amazing architecture.

✓ I would like to visit because it is an amazing piece of architecture.

Use the article 'an' before a vowel sound ('amazing'). 'Go visit' is redundant; 'visit' suffices. 'Architecture' as a noun describing a building should be phrased as 'a piece of architecture' or 'an impressive building' for natural English.

× No I don't. I prefer the place I live.

✓ No, I don't. I prefer the place where I live.

Add 'where' to link 'the place' with the relative clause 'I live' for grammatical completeness and natural phrasing.

× Can have spacious place in the garden, however the in the building with apartment doesn't afford that.

✓ I can have a spacious garden, however an apartment building doesn't allow that.

Original sentence lacks a clear subject and has article errors. 'Can have spacious place in the garden' should be 'I can have a spacious garden' or 'I can have a spacious place with a garden'. 'The in the building with apartment' is ungrammatical; use 'an apartment building' and the verb 'doesn't allow' to express inability. This correction supplies a subject, correct articles, and proper verb choice.