食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and precise: say the actual food you mean (you said "fruit" but described fried foods) and use clear vocabulary. Keep responses concise (1–3 sentences), use a topic sentence, then a brief detail using a linking word. Correct grammar (e.g., "fried things," not "fry things").

示例: My favourite food is fried chicken. For example, I enjoy crispy fried chicken and tempura shrimp because they are flavorful and crunchy.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" correctly and limit to 3–4 sentences. Choose precise expressions (e.g., "sweets" or "desserts") and correct articles and pronouns.

示例: When I was young, I liked sweets. For example, I often ate candies and cake after lunch because children usually have a sweet tooth.

建议: Answer directly then give one specific example with clearer structure and correct names. Use linking words such as "for example" and avoid vague phrases like "like" repeatedly. Check vocabulary (e.g., "Tết holiday", "Bánh chưng", "spring rolls").

示例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, during Tết (the Lunar New Year) we eat traditional dishes such as bánh chưng (sticky rice cake) and spring rolls.

建议: Give a clear past vs present comparison: one sentence stating change, one sentence explaining reason with specific vocabulary (e.g., "healthier," "balanced diet","vitamins, protein, carbohydrates"). Avoid filler words and unclear terms like "chiplessly" or "CAC born carbs."

示例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. When I was a child I liked sweets, but now I prefer plainer, healthier food because I want a balanced diet with more vitamins, protein and complex carbohydrates.

× My favorite fruit, probably the one with the fry things.

✓ My favorite food is probably the fried ones.

The student used 'fruit' incorrectly and 'fry things' is ungrammatical. 'Fried' is the correct adjective form of the verb 'fry' to describe food. Also 'ones' is needed to refer back to 'food' and 'favorite food' fits the question better.

× I like fry things, for example, like fried chickens, uh, tempura shrimp, or like seasoning food that fry or even another one.

✓ I like fried foods, for example fried chicken, tempura shrimp, or seasoned fried dishes.

Use 'fried' (adjective) rather than 'fry' and use the plural 'foods' or an uncountable noun 'food'. 'Fried chicken' is uncountable; 'chickens' is incorrect here. 'Seasoned fried dishes' is a clearer phrase than 'seasoning food that fry'.

× Probably the sweet thing because when I was young, I think everybody at the young age, they prefer the the sweet sweetness because they have a sweet tooth.

✓ Probably sweet things, because when I was young, I think everybody at that age preferred sweet things because they had a sweet tooth.

Tense consistency and subject-verb agreement: the main clause refers to the past ('when I was young'), so use past tense 'preferred' and 'had' not present. Remove redundant words ('the the', 'sweet sweetness') and use plural 'things' for general preference.

× For example, like candies or cake.

✓ For example, candy or cake.

'Candy' and 'cake' are more natural here without 'like' and 'candies' is acceptable but 'candy' as an uncountable or collective noun is common. Avoid redundant 'for example, like'.

× The the their favorite dessert things after the heavy lunch or dinner.

✓ They were their favorite desserts after a heavy lunch or dinner.

Pronoun use and redundancy: remove duplicate words; use 'they' as subject with plural verb 'were'. 'Desserts' plural fits 'favorite' and 'a heavy lunch' is more natural.

× It's perfect for kids.

✓ It was perfect for kids.

Maintain past tense to match 'when I was young'. Change 'is' to 'was' for tense consistency.

× We have like 3 to 4 holidays.

✓ We have about three or four holidays.

Use 'about' and write numbers in words in formal speech; 'like' is colloquial and should be replaced with 'about' or 'around'.

× For example, is Ted holiday will eat like June cake, one of the the traditional cake of Vietnam or spring rolls and for different.

✓ For example, during Tet holiday we eat mooncake or one of Vietnam's traditional cakes, and spring rolls.

Sentence was ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'during Tet holiday' and correct food names: 'moon cake' (or 'mooncake') and 'spring rolls'. Possessive 'Vietnam's traditional cakes' clarifies origin. Remove unfinished phrase 'and for different'.

× Ah, it did change when I was a child.

✓ Ah, it did change after I was a child.

'Did change when I was a child' suggests change occurred while child; likely intended meaning is change after childhood. Use 'after' and keep past tense 'did change' or 'it changed'.

× I tend to have uh, sweet things when the contrast.

✓ I tended to have sweet things during that time.

Tense should be past ('tended') to match childhood context. 'When the contrast' is unclear; 'during that time' is clearer.

× When I grow up I prefer something plain to have a good nutrition for my body to have more chiplessly vitamins, CAC born carbs.

✓ When I grew up, I preferred plainer foods to have better nutrition, with more vitamins and complex carbohydrates.

Maintain past tense 'grew' and 'preferred' to describe change since childhood. Use 'plainer foods' (adjective order), 'better nutrition' is more natural than 'a good nutrition'. Correct vocabulary: 'vitamins' and 'complex carbohydrates' instead of unclear words 'chiplessly vitamins, CAC born carbs'.