食物— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
What is your favourite food?
考生
My favorite food is definitely Japanese cuisine because I'm used to eating it. I love sushi and sashimi the most. I think fish used for sushi berries between countries. For example, in the UK people usually eat sushi with salmon and rice, but there are hundreds of species of fish in Japan.
考官
What kind of food did you like when you were young?
考生
When I was in my 20s, I liked eating ramen the most among Japanese dishes. For example, I usually went to ramen restaurant several times a week with my friends and colleagues after finishing work. But I haven't been going there recently because my tastes have changed a lot. I prefer much healthier and lighter foods compared to when I was young.
考官
Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?
考生
Yes, I definitely think I eat different dishes depending on the year. For example, since coming to London last year, I have eaten British traditional dishes like pie and roast beef more than before. On the other hand, when I was in Japan before moving to London, I occasionally ate washoku like yakiniku and sushi.
考官
Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?
考生
Yes, I definitely think my taste preferences have changed a lot since I was young. For example, in my childhood, I didn't enjoy eating vegetables because their flavors didn't suit me. However, as I grew older and took more care of my health, I came to like vegetables such as spinach and carrots.
评估
总分
Part 1
What is your favourite food?
分数: 72.0建议: Clarify main points and correct unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid inaccurate words (e.g., 'berries'), and provide one specific supporting detail about differences in ingredients or preparation. Use a linking word to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.
示例: I enjoy Japanese food the most, especially sushi and sashimi. For example, sushi in the UK often uses salmon, whereas in Japan chefs use many different fish species like tuna and mackerel. This variety is one reason I prefer authentic Japanese sushi.
What kind of food did you like when you were young?
分数: 86.0建议: Good structure and clear details. Improve by tightening phrasing and adding a linking phrase to show contrast more naturally (e.g., 'however' or 'lately'). Keep sentences concise (3–4 sentences).
示例: In my twenties I ate ramen most often and went to ramen shops several times a week with friends. However, lately I prefer lighter, healthier meals, so I rarely eat ramen now.
Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?
分数: 78.0建议: Fix the incorrect phrase 'depending on the year' to 'depending on the season or where I live.' Make comparisons clearer with linking words ('since', 'before', 'on the other hand') and be specific about seasons or occasions if possible.
示例: Yes. Since moving to London last year I eat more British dishes such as steak and pies, whereas before I lived in Japan and often ate traditional washoku like yakiniku and sushi.
Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?
分数: 90.0建议: Very clear and natural answer. To improve further, make the topic sentence a little more direct and reduce redundancy ('I definitely think' → 'Yes'). Provide one concise example and a linking word, as you did.
示例: Yes. I didn't like vegetables as a child, but as I grew older I became health-conscious and now enjoy vegetables like spinach and carrots.
语法
× I think fish used for sushi berries between countries.
✓ I think the types of fish used for sushi vary between countries.
The original sentence has several issues: 'fish used for sushi berries between countries' is ungrammatical. Likely intended verb is 'vary' not 'berries', and 'types of fish' clarifies count/reference (singular/plural). Also add the definite article 'the' for 'types' in this context. Suggestion: replace with 'the types of fish used for sushi vary between countries.' This corrects word choice and sentence structure (apply Grammar Problem Type IDs 26 and 1).
× For example, in the UK people usually eat sushi with salmon and rice, but there are hundreds of species of fish in Japan.
✓ For example, in the UK people usually eat sushi with salmon and rice, but there are hundreds of species of fish in Japan.
This sentence is actually acceptable, but note that 'hundreds of species' is plural and matches 'are'. No change needed. Keep as is. (Grammar Problem Type ID 1)
× When I was in my 20s, I liked eating ramen the most among Japanese dishes.
✓ When I was in my 20s, I liked eating ramen the most among Japanese dishes.
Sentence is grammatical and the tense fits the past context. No correction required. (Grammar Problem Type ID 6)
× For example, I usually went to ramen restaurant several times a week with my friends and colleagues after finishing work.
✓ For example, I usually went to a ramen restaurant several times a week with my friends and colleagues after finishing work.
English requires an article before a singular countable noun: 'a ramen restaurant' rather than 'ramen restaurant'. Adding 'a' fixes the article error. (Grammar Problem Type ID 22 and 1)
× But I haven't been going there recently because my tastes have changed a lot.
✓ But I haven't been going there recently because my tastes have changed a lot.
This sentence is acceptable: the present perfect continuous 'haven't been going' is fine to express the recent lack of visits; 'have changed' correctly uses present perfect to describe a change up to now. No correction needed. (Grammar Problem Type ID 6/7)
× I prefer much healthier and lighter foods compared to when I was young.
✓ I prefer much healthier and lighter foods than I did when I was young.
Use 'than' for direct comparisons rather than 'compared to' in this structure. Also include 'I did' to complete the comparison. This improves grammatical comparison structure. (Grammar Problem Type ID 25 and 13)
× Yes, I definitely think I eat different dishes depending on the year.
✓ Yes, I definitely think I eat different dishes depending on the season.
'Depending on the year' is odd when asking about different times of the year; 'season' or 'time of year' is more natural. Change to 'season' to match the question about times of the year. (Grammar Problem Type ID 11)
× For example, since coming to London last year, I have eaten British traditional dishes like pie and roast beef more than before.
✓ For example, since coming to London last year, I have eaten traditional British dishes like pie and roast beef more than before.
The natural adjective order in English is 'traditional British' rather than 'British traditional'. Swap the adjectives. The rest of the sentence is grammatical. (Grammar Problem Type ID 18 and 13)
× On the other hand, when I was in Japan before moving to London, I occasionally ate washoku like yakiniku and sushi.
✓ On the other hand, when I was in Japan before moving to London, I occasionally ate washoku such as yakiniku and sushi.
'Like' is acceptable, but 'such as' is slightly more formal and precise when listing examples. Tense 'ate' correctly matches the past time frame. No major correction needed; this is a style improvement. (Grammar Problem Type ID 6)
× Yes, I definitely think my taste preferences have changed a lot since I was young.
✓ Yes, I definitely think my taste preferences have changed a lot since I was young.
Sentence is grammatical and appropriately uses present perfect to describe change over time. No correction needed. (Grammar Problem Type ID 6)
× For example, in my childhood, I didn't enjoy eating vegetables because their flavors didn't suit me.
✓ For example, in my childhood, I didn't enjoy eating vegetables because their flavors didn't suit me.
This sentence is grammatical. 'Their' correctly refers to 'vegetables.' Consider using 'when I was a child' as a more natural alternative, but no grammatical correction required. (Grammar Problem Type ID 12)
× However, as I grew older and took more care of my health, I came to like vegetables such as spinach and carrots.
✓ However, as I grew older and took more care of my health, I came to like vegetables such as spinach and carrots.
Sentence is grammatical and the tense sequence is correct. No correction needed. (Grammar Problem Type ID 6)
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