食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “my favorite meat, AJ” is confusing), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add a brief reason and a specific detail (flavour, ingredients or occasion) using linking words.

示例: My favourite food at the moment is rice with chicken curry. I especially like it when my friend AJ makes it because the curry is rich and aromatic, with warm spices like cumin and coriander. It tastes comforting and is perfect for family meals.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid informal fillers (e.g. “just a normal lad”), and use linking words to contrast childhood treats and regular meals. Be specific about why you liked certain foods and what dalbat contains.

示例: When I was young I loved special treats such as ice cream and instant snacks like momos and noodles. However, our everyday meal was dalbat, which was very nutritious because it included rice, lentils and vegetables. As a child I enjoyed the treats because they were rare and tasted sweet or spicy.

建议: Clarify the main idea and correct unclear vocabulary (e.g. “beer season”, “all around the air” are confusing). Use 2–3 coherent sentences with linking words to explain seasonal availability and give specific examples of foods per season.

示例: Yes, our diet changes with the seasons because we grow most of our food. For example, in harvest season we have fresh vegetables and maize, while in winter we eat more preserved foods like dried pulses and pickles. Therefore the variety depends on what is in season.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence stating whether your preference changed, then use linking words to compare past and present with specific reasons (e.g. smell, occasion, ingredients). Avoid unclear phrases like “used to hit the smell”.

示例: Yes, my favourite food has changed somewhat. As a child I loved the special curry cooked for major festivals because the aroma and spices made it memorable. Now I prefer dishes with goat meat because I enjoy the richer flavour and texture they offer.

× Right now my favorite food is rice and chicken Curry, which is specially prepared by my favorite meat, AJ.

✓ Right now my favorite food is rice and chicken curry, which is specially prepared by my favorite chef, AJ.

The student used 'meat' incorrectly to refer to a person; this is a word choice error (adjective/noun misuse). Also 'Curry' should be lowercase. Suggest replacing 'meat' with 'chef' (or 'cook') to refer to a person who prepares food. Ensure proper noun capitalization: 'curry' is a common noun. Provide practice: replace incorrect nouns that refer to people, and review common noun capitalization rules.

× His food is so delicious and has got so strong aroma.

✓ His food is so delicious and has such a strong aroma.

Using 'so strong aroma' is ungrammatical; English uses 'such a' before a noun phrase with an adjective. Also 'has got' is informal and redundant; 'has' is sufficient. Suggest using 'has such a strong aroma' or 'has a very strong aroma'. Practice forming 'such a/an + adjective + noun' and prefer 'has' over 'has got' in formal speech.

× I fell in love with his food.

✓ I fell in love with his food.

This sentence is correct in past tense and matches context, so no change needed. Explanation: 'fell' is the correct past tense of 'fall' to describe a past event.

× I was just a normal lad so I craved for those kind of food which were hard to get like ice cream, instant food like momos, noodles.

✓ I was just a normal lad, so I craved those kinds of food that were hard to get, like ice cream and instant foods such as momos and noodles.

Errors: 'craved for' is incorrect - 'crave' does not require 'for'. 'Those kind of food' should be pluralized to 'those kinds of food' or 'that kind of food'. Also list punctuation and count nouns: 'instant food' should be 'instant foods' or 'instant food items'. Suggest practicing quantifier agreement: 'those kinds of' for plural, and omitting 'for' after 'crave'.

× But our regular meal was dalbat, which were full of nutrients.

✓ But our regular meal was dalbat, which was full of nutrients.

Relative clause subject 'which' refers to 'meal' (singular), so the verb should be singular 'was' not 'were'. Ensure subject-verb agreement in relative clauses: match the verb number to the antecedent.

× In the bulk we harvest our own food, so we have to harvest various kind of crop in beer season.

✓ Mostly we harvest our own food, so we have to harvest various kinds of crops in the harvest season.

Problems: 'In the bulk' is awkward; use 'Mostly' or 'Generally'. 'Various kind of crop' should be pluralized to 'various kinds of crops' or 'various kinds of crop'. 'Beer season' seems incorrect—likely 'bihar' or 'beer' is wrong; assuming 'harvest season'. Ensure quantifier and noun number agreement. Suggest learning common adverbial phrases and pluralization after 'various'.

× So we do get the variety of food all around the air.

✓ So we do get a variety of food all year round.

'All around the air' is incorrect idiomatically; the intended meaning is 'all year round' (throughout the year). Also 'the variety of food' should be 'a variety of food' for generality. Practice common temporal expressions (all year round, throughout the year).

× I definitely remember I used to hit the smell of good Curry which is specially prepared on the main festival in Nepal.

✓ I definitely remember I used to love the smell of good curry that was specially prepared for the main festivals in Nepal.

Multiple issues: 'hit the smell' is incorrect—we use 'love' or 'enjoy' the smell. 'Curry' should be lowercase. 'Which is specially prepared on the main festival' mixes tenses; because referring to past habit, use past 'was specially prepared' and preposition 'for' a festival rather than 'on'. Also pluralize 'festival' if referring to recurring events. Suggest using verbs that collocate with 'smell' (enjoy, love), match tense consistently, and use correct prepositions.

× But nowadays I have got the strong aroma of goat meat.

✓ But nowadays I get the strong aroma of goat meat.

'Have got' is informal and in this context 'I get' (present simple) better expresses current experience. 'Have got the strong aroma' is awkward; native phrasing is 'I can smell the strong aroma of goat meat' or 'I get the strong aroma'. Suggest using 'I can smell' to emphasize perception, and prefer 'get' or 'can smell' over 'have got' in this context.