食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the dish, give one or two specific details (what it is, why you like it), and avoid repetition and filler sounds. Use correct names and short supporting detail about when you eat it.

示例: My favourite food is tteokbokki, a popular Korean dish of chewy rice cakes in a spicy sauce. I love it because the combination of sweet and spicy flavors is comforting, and I often eat it with friends after school when I want to relax.

建议: Answer directly and clearly. Begin with a topic sentence stating what you liked as a child, then give one reason or brief example. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect grammar; use simple past or used to for habits in childhood.

示例: When I was young, I liked spicy food. My mother encouraged me to try spicy dishes from about age five, so I became used to strong flavours early on and still enjoy them today.

建议: Give a direct yes/no and explain with a clear example. Keep it coherent: say whether your diet changes by season and then mention one specific occasion (trying Saudi snacks), and finish the thought. Avoid trailing off and repetition.

示例: Not really — I usually stick to familiar foods all year. However, I sometimes try new snacks when friends introduce them; for example, a Saudi friend once encouraged me to try Saudi snacks, and I enjoyed the sweet and spiced flavours.

建议: Be specific about the change. Start with a clear statement (yes/no), then briefly describe what you liked before and what you prefer now, giving one reason for the change. Avoid unclear phrases like 'inside chicken' and fix grammar problems.

示例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I mainly ate chicken because it was familiar, but now I prefer spicy dishes like tteokbokki because I enjoy stronger flavours and more variety in textures.

× My favorite food is a spicy rice cake which is very well known in Korea that uh some people called it topoki and that is a Kore Korea tradition fruit and also is Roman soul food.

✓ My favorite food is a spicy rice cake that is very well known in Korea; some people call it tteokbokki. It is a Korean traditional food and also a popular street food.

Issues: adjective/adverb misuse and word choice ('well known' placement and 'called it' tense/voice), repetition and wrong words ('Kore Korea', 'fruit' instead of 'food', 'Roman soul food' unclear). Suggestions: use 'that is' to introduce defining clause, use simple present 'call', correct Romanization 'tteokbokki', use 'Korean traditional food' and 'popular street food' for clarity.

× After school when I got a lot of stress I usually go to the Double Gear restaurant.

✓ After school, when I am very stressed, I usually go to the Double Gear restaurant.

Issue: wrong tense/form: 'got a lot of stress' is awkward and mixes past and habitual present. Use present-state description for habitual action: 'when I am very stressed' with simple present 'usually go'. Suggestion: use 'am stressed' or 'feel stressed' for current habitual feelings.

× Actually, is it related to my first question, my mom recommended me to eat a spicy food from from five years old.

✓ Actually, related to my first answer, my mom recommended that I eat spicy food from the age of five.

Issues: sentence structure and word order ('Is it related' misplaced), incorrect verb pattern ('recommended me to eat' should be 'recommended that I eat' or 'recommended I eat'), and awkward phrase 'from from five years old'. Suggestion: reorder clause to 'related to my first answer', use 'recommended that I eat' or 'recommended I eat', and 'from the age of five'.

× Because in Korea there are a lot of stress spicy food foods, so it is necessary to eat spicy food for surviving in Korea.

✓ In Korea, there are many spicy foods, and people often feel that eating spicy food is necessary to cope with stress.

Issues: adjective order and redundancy ('stress spicy food foods'), incorrect gerund/infinitive use ('for surviving'). Suggestions: use 'spicy foods' plural, place adjectives before nouns correctly, and use 'to cope with stress' or 'to relieve stress' instead of 'for surviving'.

× To be honest, I prefer to eat familiar foods, not a new thing for for instance, I-1 of my Saudi friends work encouraged me to try to Saudi Arabia snacks that that was my first time to eat that, but after eating that I was.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to eat familiar foods, not new things. For instance, one of my Saudi coworkers encouraged me to try Saudi Arabian snacks; it was my first time trying them, but after eating them I enjoyed them.

Issues: run-on sentence, repetition, incorrect phrases ('a new thing', 'I-1 of my Saudi friends work', 'to try to Saudi Arabia snacks', 'I was.' unfinished). Suggestions: break into clear sentences, use 'one of my Saudi coworkers' or 'friends', 'try Saudi Arabian snacks', and use proper past tense 'it was my first time trying them' and finish the thought 'I enjoyed them'.

× Yes, when I was young, just five years old, I usually eat chicken except excepting the inside chicken because I don't like the taste of an enough chicken.

✓ Yes, when I was young, at about five years old, I usually ate chicken except the inner parts because I didn't like their taste.

Issues: tense mismatch ('when I was young' requires past 'ate' not 'eat'), repetition ('except excepting'), awkward phrase 'inside chicken' and 'an enough chicken'. Suggestions: use past tense 'ate', say 'except the inner parts' or 'except the dark meat/innards' and 'didn't like their taste'.

× So but now my my preferring taste is a big change.

✓ But now my preferences have changed a lot.

Issues: awkward wording 'preferring taste' and repetition 'my my', and unnatural 'is a big change'. Suggestions: use 'my preferences have changed' or 'my taste has changed a lot' to express change over time.