食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail (reason or example). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words to make it coherent.

示例: I love pastries, especially cookies, brownies and cinnamon rolls. I enjoy them because their sweetness and soft texture make me feel comforted after a long day. For example, I often bake cinnamon rolls at weekends and share them with my family, which makes the treat even more enjoyable.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence about your childhood preference, avoid hesitations and grammar errors, and give one specific detail explaining why you liked that food. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

示例: When I was young, I liked fried fish the most. My mother says I even liked the fish eye because it was crunchy and flavorful. Because my family often ate seafood, I grew used to that taste and looked forward to fish dishes at mealtimes.

建议: Answer the question directly about seasonal changes rather than general cuisine preferences. If you mention cuisines, explain when or why you choose them, use linking words and correct small errors. Keep it concise (3–4 sentences).

示例: Yes, I do choose different foods at different times of the year. In winter I often prefer hearty Filipino soups like sinigang because they are warm and comforting, while in summer I crave lighter Japanese dishes such as sashimi. I also try Korean barbecue when friends visit, since it is social and filling.

建议: Give a clear yes/no topic sentence about change, avoid repeating earlier answers, and provide a concise reason or an example showing continuity or change. Use correct grammar and linking words to connect ideas.

示例: No, my favourite foods have not changed much; I still prefer sweet treats like pastries. As a child I loved sweets, and now I enjoy baking and trying new dessert recipes, which keeps my preference the same.

× I am very much into pastries, particularly cookies, brownies and cinnamon rolls.

✓ I am very fond of pastries, particularly cookies, brownies, and cinnamon rolls.

The phrase 'very much into' is colloquial and awkward here; 'very fond of' is more natural. Also add a comma before 'and' in the list for clarity (Oxford comma). Use of adjectives/adverbs corrected for idiomatic expression.

× I think I am a sweet tooth person and I just love.

✓ I think I am a sweet-toothed person, and I just love sweets.

'sweet tooth' is a noun phrase; to describe a person use the adjective 'sweet-toothed'. The original sentence also ends abruptly with 'I just love' which lacks an object; add 'sweets'. This fixes adjective use and completes the sentence.

× I just love eating desserts, yeah.

✓ I just love eating desserts, yes.

The spoken filler 'yeah' is acceptable in speech but 'yes' is more appropriate in a test response. This change addresses sentence register; the structure is fine but wording adjusted for formality.

× I am not a food picker when I was a child so I think I was able to eat uh any food given to me.

✓ I was not a picky eater when I was a child, so I could eat any food given to me.

'food picker' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'picky eater' (noun). Tense consistency: use past tense 'was' to match 'when I was a child'. Replace 'was able to' with 'could' for natural past ability. Remove filler 'uh'.

× But what my mom told me about it I really like eating as a child is fried fish, specially the eye part.

✓ But my mom told me that what I really liked eating as a child was fried fish, especially the eye part.

Fix word order and tense: report what mother said using 'told me that' and keep past tense 'liked' and 'was'. 'Specially' is incorrect here; use 'especially'. Also reorder to make the sentence grammatical.

× Yeah, I love trying out foods from different cuisines.

✓ Yes, I love trying foods from different cuisines.

'Trying out foods' is acceptable conversationally; 'trying foods' is more concise. 'Yeah' changed to 'Yes' for formality. This addresses tense/register clarity.

× Like some there are times that I would love Korean food.

✓ There are times when I really want Korean food.

Original sentence has extra filler 'Like some' and awkward structure. Use 'there are times when' plus present simple/continuous preference 'really want' for natural expression.

× Sometimes I'm craving for for Japanese food.

✓ Sometimes I crave Japanese food.

'Crave' is a stative verb; use 'I crave' rather than 'I'm craving for'. Also remove duplicate 'for'. Preposition 'for' is not needed after 'crave'.

× But what's my favorite among all is of course, Filipino dishes.

✓ But my favorite of all is, of course, Filipino dishes.

Reorder for natural word order: 'my favorite of all is' and place 'of course' set off by commas. This corrects awkward adjective/adverb placement.

× So I love Sinigang Kari and all that.

✓ So I love sinigang, kare (kari), and similar dishes.

Capitalize or format dish names consistently; 'Sinigang' is fine but 'Kari' should be 'kare' (Filipino curry) or 'kari' if referring to 'curry'—clarify and list items naturally. 'and all that' is informal; replace with 'and similar dishes.'

× As I mentioned, my favorite food at this age are pastries and I think I still loved it back when I was a child because naturally and most of the time children loves to eat sweet food so I think it's still the same.

✓ As I mentioned, my favorite foods at this age are pastries, and I think I still loved them back when I was a child because, naturally, most children love to eat sweet food, so I think it's still the same.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and pluralization ('favorite foods... are pastries' and 'loved them' to match plural). 'Children loves' is incorrect; use 'children love'. Tense consistency: 'still loved them back when I was a child' is acceptable for referring to past preference; commas added for clarity and 'naturally' set off. This corrects present tense and agreement errors.