食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar while adding a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also correct article use and comparative phrasing.

示例: I love Japanese food because I grew up with those flavours and they comfort me. However, it’s hard to find authentic ingredients in the US; for example, miso paste and fresh daikon at the Asian store cost nearly three times more than in Japan, so I cook simpler versions at home.

建议: Give a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence, avoid hesitations, and explain timeline clearly with linking words. Provide a brief reason why you liked that food and a concise timeline statement.

示例: When I was young I enjoyed Western fast food like burgers, fries and soda because they felt exciting and different. After I moved to the US, it was only after about ten to fifteen years that I rediscovered those flavours and started eating them regularly again.

建议: Answer directly and clearly, correct sentence structure and vocabulary, and give one specific supporting detail or example about what you eat in different seasons or why you don't. Use linking words to show contrast or reason.

示例: Not really — I usually eat the same kinds of food all year because I mostly buy supermarket ingredients. For example, I often rely on frozen vegetables and packaged meals rather than seasonal fresh produce, so my diet doesn’t change much with the seasons.

建议: Respond directly with a clear statement, avoid confusing fragments, and give a concise explanation and an example of foods you still like. Use linking words to clarify continuity.

示例: No, my tastes haven’t changed much since childhood. I still enjoy fresh vegetables, meat and sweets; for instance, I often cook grilled vegetables and eat fruit-based desserts just like I did when I was young.

× I love Japanese food because I'm from Japan, so I'm so accustomed to Japanese flavor.

✓ I love Japanese food because I'm from Japan, so I'm so accustomed to Japanese flavors.

'Flavor' should be plural 'flavors' when referring generally to the variety of tastes in Japanese cuisine. Use plural to indicate different tastes or a general category.

× Although it's quite difficult to purchase Japanese ingredients here in the US, I can go to a Asian grocery, but things can be a three times more expensive as those in Japan.

✓ Although it's quite difficult to purchase Japanese ingredients here in the US, I can go to an Asian grocery, but things can be three times more expensive than those in Japan.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound: 'an Asian grocery'. Use comparative structure 'three times more expensive than' to compare prices; do not use 'a' before 'three' and use 'than' not 'as' for this comparison.

× Ironically, when I was in Japan, I loved western food such as burgers, French fries and soda.

✓ Ironically, when I was in Japan, I loved Western food such as burgers, French fries, and soda.

Capitalise 'Western' as it is a proper adjective. Add a comma in the list for clarity. Tense 'loved' is correct for past preference so no change to tense.

× It took probably 10 or 15 years from us, uh, from I moved to the US until I rediscovered the the taste.

✓ It took probably 10 or 15 years from when I moved to the US until I rediscovered the taste.

Use 'from when I moved' to introduce the time point correctly; 'from us' is incorrect and 'from I moved' is ungrammatical. Remove the duplicated 'the'. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× I don't necessarily eat different types of food throughout seasons, I mean buy different seasons.

✓ I don't necessarily eat different types of food throughout the seasons; I mean buy them in different seasons.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'seasons' when speaking about seasons in general. Original second clause was ungrammatical: 'buy different seasons' should be 'buy them in different seasons' to express purchasing at different times of year. Use a semicolon or conjunction to connect related clauses.

× I tend to buy ingredients from supermarket so majority of them are processed food.

✓ I tend to buy ingredients from the supermarket, so the majority of them are processed food.

Use the definite article 'the supermarket' when referring to a specific common place. Use 'the majority' to refer to most items. Also add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses.

× No, I don't think that might taste bad. Have changed since childhood.

✓ No, I don't think my tastes have changed since childhood.

The original contains fragments and incorrect modal use. Combine the ideas into one grammatical sentence: 'my tastes have changed' correctly uses subject and present perfect to indicate change since childhood. 'I don't think that might taste bad' is unclear and ungrammatical in context.

× I still like fresh vegetables, meat and of course sweets.

✓ I still like fresh vegetables, meat, and, of course, sweets.

Add commas for correct list punctuation and around the parenthetical phrase 'of course'. No article change needed otherwise.