走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use correct vocabulary and verb forms. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct word choice (treadmill) and tense consistency improve clarity.

示例: Not really. I usually work in an office, so I don't walk much during the day. However, I try to stay active by using the treadmill for about 15 to 20 minutes after work.

建议: Use consistent past tense and avoid clutter. Provide a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific details (activities, feelings). Correct grammar (played → play/past forms) and idiomatic phrases (‘create core memories’ → ‘created many happy memories’).

示例: Yes, I did, especially on weekends. In the afternoons I used to play and walk around the neighborhood with my cousins, and we often climbed trees or played football, which created many happy memories.

建议: Answer directly with clear reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (First, Also) and precise vocabulary (calm, facilities built for exercise). Keep it to two to three sentences.

示例: People like walking in parks mainly because of the green scenery, which helps them feel calm and relaxed. Also, parks often have paths and exercise equipment, so they are convenient places for physical activity.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating the preferred place, use correct grammar (have → has, a hiking → go hiking), and give a brief specific example. Use a linking phrase like ‘for example’ correctly.

示例: I would like to take a long walk in a rural area with lots of greenery because it makes me feel calm and relaxed. For example, I would enjoy going for a long hike through a forest trail.

建议: Use consistent tense and clearer time expressions (lately → recently). Begin with a direct answer, then add two specific details. Correct grammar (it's have → it has; good facilities → good facilities and a pleasant environment).

示例: Recently I have been walking in the park near my hometown. I drive there because it's quite far, but I like it because it has good facilities and a pleasant, peaceful environment.

× I would walk on the thread mill for 15 minutes to 20 minutes.

✓ I would walk on the treadmill for 15 to 20 minutes.

The sentence contains a spelling error ('thread mill' should be 'treadmill') rather than a grammar form error; corrected to the single-word noun 'treadmill' and simplified the time expression. Suggestion: use 'for 15 to 20 minutes' or 'for 15–20 minutes'.

× Usually in the afternoon I would go outside and played with my cousin.

✓ Usually in the afternoon I would go outside and play with my cousin.

When using 'would' to describe habitual past actions, the following verb should be in the base form (infinitive without 'to'), not the past tense. Change 'played' to 'play'. Suggestion: use 'would play' or 'used to play' for habitual past actions.

× We will walk around the neighborhood. I remembered.

✓ We would walk around the neighborhood. I remember.

Mixed tense: 'We will walk' (future) is inconsistent with the past narrative. Use 'would walk' to indicate habitual past action. 'I remembered' is past simple but context calls for a present reflection; 'I remember' expresses a current recollection. Suggestion: maintain past perspective with 'would' or present recollection with 'I remember'.

× I have so much fun and create so much core memory with my cousins.

✓ I had so much fun and created so many core memories with my cousins.

Tense inconsistency and count noun/quantifier errors: narrative is about past events so use past tense 'had' and 'created'. 'Core memory' is countable here and plural is needed: 'core memories'. Use 'so many' with countable nouns. Suggestion: 'I had so much fun and created so many core memories.'

× I think the main reason is because park have green scenery which will make people feel more calms and relax.

✓ I think the main reason is that parks have green scenery which makes people feel calmer and more relaxed.

Multiple issues: article/number and subject-verb agreement — 'park' should be plural 'parks' or preceded by 'the' but general statement uses plural. Therefore use 'parks have'. The relative clause needs verb agreement: 'which makes' (singular 'which' refers to 'green scenery' but better to use 'which makes' for singular idea). 'Calms' is incorrect; use adjective 'calmer'. 'Relax' should be 'more relaxed'. Also 'is because' is wordy; 'is that' is preferred. Suggestion: 'the main reason is that parks have green scenery which makes people feel calmer and more relaxed.'

× Beside that park also have a lot of facilities that build for people to use them for exercising.

✓ Besides that, parks also have a lot of facilities built for people to use for exercising.

Preposition 'Beside' is wrong; use 'Besides' to add information. Subject-verb agreement: 'park' should be 'parks' for general statement. 'That build' is incorrect passive/relative clause; use 'built' (past participle) to indicate facilities constructed for use. Remove redundant 'them'. Suggestion: 'Besides that, parks also have many facilities built for people to use for exercising.'

× At the moment I could not think of a specific place yet, but I would like to take a long walk in a rural area that have a green scenery that can make me feel calm and relaxed.

✓ At the moment I cannot think of a specific place yet, but I would like to take a long walk in a rural area that has green scenery and can make me feel calm and relaxed.

Tense mismatch: 'At the moment' calls for present 'cannot' rather than past 'could not'. Subject-verb agreement: 'area that have' should be 'area that has'. 'A green scenery' is incorrect article/uncountable use; use 'green scenery' without 'a'. Also simplify 'that can make me feel calm and relaxed.' Suggestion: use present tense for current inability and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× For example, maybe a hiking in the forest.

✓ For example, maybe a hike in the forest.

Incorrect article and noun form: 'a hiking' is wrong because 'hiking' is a gerund/verb form; the correct noun is 'a hike' or use 'hiking' without 'a' ('maybe hiking in the forest'). Suggestion: 'maybe a hike in the forest' or 'maybe hiking in the forest.'

× Lately I sometimes go for a walk at the park near my hometown.

✓ Lately I have sometimes gone for a walk at the park near my hometown.

Time adverb 'lately' pairs better with present perfect for recent repeated actions: 'have gone' or 'have been going'. Alternatively, 'Recently I sometimes go' is informal. Suggestion: 'Lately I have sometimes gone for a walk at the park near my hometown.'

× I have to drive my car there because it's quite far from my house.

✓ I have to drive there because it's quite far from my house.

Redundant 'my car' is unnecessary; 'drive there' suffices. This is stylistic; grammatically it's acceptable but removing redundancy improves naturalness. Suggestion: omit 'my car'.

× I love it there because it's have a good facilities and the environment.

✓ I love it there because it has good facilities and a nice environment.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it's have' is incorrect; use 'it has'. Article and count noun: 'a good facilities' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'good facilities' or 'a good facility'. 'The environment' awkward; 'a nice environment' or 'the environment there' works. Suggestion: 'it has good facilities and a nice environment.'