走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Keep the answer concise with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and a specific supporting detail. Use simple present tense correctly, avoid wordy phrases like 'go by a walk', and replace vague 'maintain that' with what you maintain (e.g., fitness). Use one linking phrase to add a reason.

示例: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk to school every day because it helps me stay fit and saves money on transport.

建议: Answer directly about childhood habits using past tense and a clear topic sentence. Avoid confusing mixed tenses and repetition. Provide a specific example of activities you did as a child and use a linking word to connect ideas.

示例: Not really formal walks, but I played and ran outside a lot as a child. For example, I often ran around the neighborhood with friends after school.

建议: Start with a clear reason and avoid irrelevant or incorrect assumptions (e.g., walking barefoot). Give two specific, logical reasons and use linking words (for example, also). Correct word order and articles are important.

示例: People like walking in parks because the air is cleaner and the scenery is pleasant. For example, many walkers prefer soft grass paths and the peaceful environment.

建议: Respond directly to the hypothetical question with a clear location and reason. Use conditional form correctly (I would). Be specific about where you would start and how long the walk would be. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and use linking words like because or so.

示例: I would like to take a long walk from my home to the nearby fields because the route is quiet and scenic. It would be about four kilometers, which is a comfortable distance for me.

建议: Use past tense for a recent action and a clear topic sentence. Provide a brief detail about the walk (duration, purpose, or what you saw) and a linking word if adding another point.

示例: This morning I went for a walk through the fields near my house. I walked for about 30 minutes and enjoyed the fresh air and the view of the crops.

× Yes, I walk a lot. When I go to school, I go by a walk. It burns my calories and it's very helpful to maintain that.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot. When I go to school, I walk. It burns calories and it's very helpful for maintaining my fitness.

The phrase 'go by a walk' is incorrect; English uses 'walk' without 'go by' for traveling on foot (issue 8: verb + -ing/form of verb usage). 'It burns my calories' is unnatural: use 'burns calories' (uncountable/general) and 'helpful to maintain that' should be 'helpful for maintaining my fitness' for clarity and correct verb form. Suggestion: use simple present 'I walk' and the gerund 'maintaining' with appropriate noun.

× Not like that, but when we are child we are just playing and run everywhere. So that's yes, when I'm child I go outside for a walk.

✓ Not really. When we were children we just played and ran everywhere. So yes, when I was a child I went outside for walks.

The student mixes present and past. Use past tense for past habits (were, played, ran, went) (issue 5). 'Child' needs plural 'children' when referring to 'we' and 'a child' must be 'a child' with 'I was a child'. Suggestion: use past simple for actions in childhood and match subject number with nouns.

× Sadly, but I think people mostly walk barefoot so they don't walk on roads so they prefer to walk on grass so they walk in park.

✓ Unfortunately, I think people often walk barefoot, so they avoid walking on roads and prefer to walk on grass in parks.

Multiple preposition errors: 'walk in park' should be 'walk in parks' or 'in the park'; 'walk on roads' is fine but sentence flow needed linking. Also 'mostly' to 'often' and 'so they don't walk on roads so they prefer' should be combined. Suggestion: use 'in parks' and restructure sentence for clarity.

× No, there is not a Pacific, there is not a one place that where I can should walk to prefer where could I start working from my home to the fields? So they took around 4 kilometers.

✓ No, there isn't a specific place. There isn't one place where I should prefer to start walking. From my home to the fields is about four kilometers.

The original is ungrammatical and confused (issue 26). 'Pacific' seems wrong; likely 'specific'. Use 'there isn't a specific place' and break into clear sentences. 'There is not a one place that where I can should walk to prefer' mixes modal and relative clauses incorrectly. Suggestion: simplify and use 'about four kilometers' for distance.

× Today morning I go for a walk through my fields.

✓ This morning I went for a walk through my fields.

The time expression 'this morning' with a past action requires past simple 'went' not present 'go' (issue 6). Also 'Today morning' is nonstandard; use 'This morning'. Suggestion: match tense to time expressions and use past simple for completed actions earlier today.