走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a clear direct answer first, avoid repetition, use correct tense and natural collocations (e.g., "I walk a lot" / "I go for a walk every morning"). Keep to 2–4 concise sentences and add one specific detail (time, duration, or who you walk with). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly.

示例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually go for a 30-minute walk every morning because it helps me stay fit and clears my mind. I often walk with a friend, which makes the time enjoyable and motivates me to keep going.

建议: Answer directly about past habit using past tense and concise structure. Avoid fillers and repetition. Give one or two specific examples of activities and contrast briefly with your current routine using linking words (e.g., "but now").

示例: Yes, I often went outside as a child. I played football and other outdoor games with my friends almost every day, which meant a lot of walking and running. But now I exercise differently, for example I go running near my home in the mornings.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two specific reasons. Use correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and linking words to connect ideas. Provide concrete examples of activities and social benefits.

示例: People like walking in parks because they offer a pleasant, natural environment and opportunities to meet others. For example, visitors can join group exercises, walk with friends, or sit and chat, which helps reduce stress and improves social life.

建议: Give a clear hypothetical answer with correct phrasing and fewer repetitions. Specify the place and why you chose it, using linking words like "because" and concrete sensory details. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I would like to take a long walk along a coastal boardwalk about 10–15 kilometres long because I love nature. The sea air and wide views would help me relax and clear my mind while I walk or run.

建议: Answer clearly in past tense about a recent walk, avoid vague expressions and fillers. Name a specific place and one detail (what you saw or felt). Use 2–3 concise sentences and link ideas with words like "last week" or "recently".

示例: Recently I went for a walk along the riverside near my city. I enjoyed the city views and watched people jogging and cycling, which made the walk pleasant and lively.

× As I usually work a lot because it makes me fit and fit and physically fine.

✓ I usually walk a lot because it keeps me fit and physically well.

The student used 'work' incorrectly instead of 'walk' for the activity and repeated 'fit'. The verb 'usually walk' suits habitual present tense. 'Keeps me fit' is a natural collocation; 'physically well' is better than 'physically fine'. Use consistent present simple for habits.

× And I do walking in my morning term because it makes me fresh and refreshment of my mind and my health.

✓ I go for a walk in the morning because it refreshes my mind and improves my health.

Use the verb phrase 'go for a walk' rather than 'do walking'. 'Refreshes' is present simple for habitual effect. 'Refreshment of my mind' is unnatural; use 'refreshes my mind'. 'Improves my health' is clearer.

× And I prefer to walk with my friends because they can make my mood enhance.

✓ I prefer to walk with my friends because they can lift my mood.

'Make my mood enhance' is incorrect collocation. Use the phrasal verb 'lift my mood' or 'improve my mood'. Also use present simple 'prefer' for habitual actions.

× As since childhood, I, I always go outside to play, uh, different kinds of outdoor games like uh, football and many types of games where we should go outside to walk and play the game.

✓ Since childhood, I always went outside to play various outdoor games such as football and others that required walking and playing.

The time reference 'since childhood' can be used with present perfect or with simple past to describe past habits. Here 'always went' is appropriate for repeated past actions. 'Different kinds of outdoor games' -> 'various outdoor games'; avoid filler words.

× But now, uh, I still go to work, uh, like running and different kinds of uh.

✓ But now I still exercise, for example running and other activities.

'Go to work' contradicts context; likely meant 'exercise' or 'go for a run'. Use present simple 'I still exercise'. Remove fillers and finish the list with 'other activities'.

× People likes to walk in park because because there are many peoples and they can communicate with each others and help and abode social enhance.

✓ People like to walk in parks because there are many people and they can communicate with each other and enhance their social life.

Use plural verb 'like' with plural subject 'people'. 'In parks' plural fits general statement. 'Peoples' is incorrect; use 'people'. 'Each others' should be 'each other'. 'Abode social enhance' is nonstandard; 'enhance their social life' is correct.

× And in a park there are different kinds of activities to do like running and different kinds of physical activities.

✓ In parks, there are various activities to do, such as running and other physical exercises.

For general statements use plural 'parks' or omit article. 'Different kinds of activities' -> 'various activities'. 'Such as' is a clearer expression. Avoid repetition of 'different kinds of'.

× Since I have been a nature lover, I would like to take a long walk to to a near deck because it is almost 10 to 15 kilometer where I can walk or run where I can.

✓ Since I am a nature lover, I would like to take a long walk to a nearby dock that is about 10 to 15 kilometers away where I can walk or run.

'Have been a nature lover' is acceptable but 'I am a nature lover' is simpler. Use 'nearby' as adjective, not 'near'. 'Dock' likely intended rather than 'deck'. Use '10 to 15 kilometers away' to express distance. Avoid repeating 'where I can'.

× Where can I have a Peace of Mind and measure vibes I like to.

✓ There I can have peace of mind and enjoy the atmosphere I like.

The original is a fragment with awkward word order. Use declarative structure: 'There I can have peace of mind and enjoy the atmosphere I like.' 'Peace of mind' should not be capitalized; 'measure vibes' is unclear — 'enjoy the atmosphere' conveys the intended meaning.

× I have been working lately like uh different kinds of sort views area, like uh different kinds of uh heels or uh sides of reverse reverse side and many kinds of work.

✓ Lately I have been walking in different kinds of areas, such as hills or riverbanks, and various other places.

'Have been working' conflicts with context; 'have been walking' matches 'lately' ongoing action. 'Sort views area' unclear — use 'areas'. 'Heels' likely 'hills'; 'reverse side' likely 'river side' or 'riverside'. Use clear nouns.

× But I usually like to go in a obscure heels towards a city view from.

✓ But I usually like to go to a secluded hill to enjoy the view of the city.

Use 'go to' with destinations. 'Obscure heels' should be 'secluded hill' (singular) or 'obscure hills'. 'Towards a city view from' is ungrammatical; use 'to enjoy the view of the city'.