走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant with supporting details, but it's a little repetitive and has small grammar issues. Make the response more concise, avoid repeating words (e.g. “walk”/“by foot”), and use smoother linking phrases. Also correct minor grammar: say “I walk to the station every day” and “I take my daughter to nursery on some weekdays.”

示例: Yes. I walk a lot — I usually walk to the station every weekday to commute, and on some mornings I take my daughter to nursery on foot. At the weekend I also enjoy going for longer walks to relax.

建议: Good content with specific examples. To improve, use more natural collocations and streamline phrasing: say “go for walks” instead of “have a walk,” and use linking words to connect ideas. Also replace “sceneries” with “scenery.”

示例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. I enjoyed exploring the scenery and collecting little things along the road, like wild flowers and berries, because it felt like an adventure.

建议: Your answer gives good reasons but has grammar and word-choice issues. Avoid filler words like “uh,” correct singular/plural agreement, and eliminate redundancy (“green greenery”). Use linking phrases to list reasons more smoothly.

示例: I think people walk in parks because it's refreshing and good exercise. Moreover, parks with lots of greenery help people feel calm and relaxed, so they can unwind from a busy day.

建议: Your answer is personal and specific, which is good, but there are grammar problems and awkward phrasing. Improve sentence structure, fix prepositions and articles (“the river bank of the Tama River,” “near my home,” “a five-minute walk”), and avoid impossible claims like “you can't reach the end by foot” without clarifying. Use one or two concise sentences.

示例: I'd like to take a long walk along the Tama River bank, which is only a five-minute walk from my home. The river stretches for miles, offering beautiful views and peaceful spots where I can relax.

建议: Answer is relevant and specific but contains a repetition (“school school”) and could be slightly more fluent. Use a smooth opening phrase (e.g. “Recently I went…”), and connect actions with a linking phrase. Add a brief remark about how you felt to enrich the response.

示例: Recently I went to a park near my house after I took my daughter to nursery school. The park had many playgrounds and swings, and it was pleasant to sit and watch the children play.

× Weekdays I commute to work, I walk to the station every day and some weekdays I send my daughter to the nursery by foot and on the weekends I like to walk.

✓ On weekdays I commute to work; I walk to the station every day, and on some weekdays I walk my daughter to the nursery on foot. On weekends I like to walk.

Use 'on weekdays' and 'on weekends' for days; use 'walk my daughter to the nursery' or 'walk her to nursery' rather than 'send my daughter to the nursery by foot'. 'By foot' is a nonstandard prepositional phrase; the correct phrase is 'on foot'. Also add punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× Yes, as a child I went outside to have a walk and look at sceneries and find interesting stuff alongside the road, such as little flowers and berries.

✓ Yes, as a child I went outside to take walks, look at the scenery, and find interesting things along the road, such as little flowers and berries.

'Have a walk' is acceptable but 'take walks' is more natural; 'sceneries' is incorrect — 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. 'Stuff' is informal; use 'things'. Use 'along' instead of 'alongside the road' for natural phrasing. Maintain past tense consistently ('went', 'looked', 'found') — here present tense verbs were mixed; changing to infinitive with parallel structure or making past forms is necessary. In this correction I used infinitive phrasing consistent with 'went' as context; alternatively use past simple for all verbs.

× I guess one of the reason is that it's refreshing and, uh, it'll be good exercise.

✓ I guess one of the reasons is that it's refreshing and it will be good exercise.

'One of the reason' is incorrect; use the plural 'reasons' after 'one of'. Avoid filler 'uh' in formal speech. 'It'll' is acceptable spoken contraction but in writing expand to 'it will' for clarity; no adjective/adverb error beyond plurality here.

× Parks with a lot of green greenery makes you feel calm and relaxed.

✓ Parks with a lot of greenery make you feel calm and relaxed.

'Green greenery' is redundant; 'greenery' alone is sufficient. Subject 'Parks ...' is plural so verb must be 'make' not 'makes'. This is a subject-verb agreement point but caused by adjective phrase; corrected by simplifying noun phrase.

× I like to go on the river Bank of Tama River.

✓ I like to go to the riverbank of the Tama River.

Use 'to' with 'go' for destination, not 'on'. 'Riverbank' is one word. Include the definite article 'the Tama River' for natural English. Capitalization: 'Bank' should not be capitalized.

× This is because it's really near from my home.

✓ This is because it's really near my home.

Do not use both 'near' and 'from' together. Correct preposition following 'near' is none or 'to' in some contexts; here 'near my home' is correct.

× It's about 5 minutes walk and the river is so great you can't reach to the end by foot.

✓ It's about a 5-minute walk and the river is so long you can't reach the end on foot.

Use 'a 5-minute walk' with hyphenated adjective and article. 'Minutes walk' is ungrammatical. 'Reach to the end' is incorrect; use 'reach the end'. 'By foot' should be 'on foot'. Also 'great' is vague for length; 'so long' fits the meaning if intended.

× I went to a park near my house after I sent my daughter to nursery school school.

✓ I went to a park near my house after I sent my daughter to nursery school.

Duplicate word 'school school' is an error; remove the extra 'school'. Tense usage 'went' and 'sent' is correct past tense. No tense change needed.

× The park had a lot of playgrounds and swings.

✓ The park had a lot of playground equipment and swings.

'Playgrounds' suggests multiple separate playgrounds inside one park; while possible, more natural is 'playground equipment' or 'play areas'. This fixes potential plural mismatch and improves naturalness. 'Had a lot of ...' is acceptable past tense.