走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and tense errors.

示例: No, I don't walk much. I have a very busy schedule because I spend most days at an institute, so I rarely find time for walking.

建议: Use correct past tense and reduce repetition. Provide a specific memory or detail and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. I used to go to a nearby park with my grandmother, where we played games and I ran around with my friends.

建议: Give clear, specific reasons and correct grammar/tenses. Use linking words (for example, moreover) appropriately and avoid vague phrases like 'fine'. Provide one health reason and one social reason with brief explanation.

示例: People walk in parks because it improves cardiovascular health and helps strengthen leg muscles. Moreover, parks are social spaces where neighbors can meet, which builds community ties.

建议: Use conditional form correctly and give concise reasons. Mention a specific feature of the place and avoid informal phrases like 'highly influenced'.

示例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in Chandigarh, especially around the Rock Garden and Sukhna Lake, because the sculptures and lakeside views look very peaceful in photos I've seen on Instagram.

建议: Speak in clear past tense and avoid awkward phrases. Give one or two specific observations and link them to how you felt using a simple connector.

示例: Last weekend I walked in the local Riverside Park. The footpath and river were very clean, and the fresh air made me feel relaxed and refreshed.

× To be honest, no, I don't walk a lot because as I I don't have time for work.

✓ To be honest, no, I don't walk a lot because I don't have time for work.

The sentence repeats 'I' causing redundancy and the phrase 'as I I don't have time for work' is ungrammatical. Remove the extra 'I' and 'as' to make a clear present-tense reason: 'I don't have time for work.' Ensure subject and verb are in simple present to match the question about habitual action.

× I had a hectic schedule in my life.

✓ I have a hectic schedule in my life.

The student is describing a current habitual situation, so present simple 'have' is needed instead of past 'had'. Use present tense to match the ongoing context: 'I have a hectic schedule.'

× I often spend my whole day in an institute so I don't walk.

✓ I often spend my whole day at an institute, so I don't walk much.

Use present simple 'spend' for habitual action (already correct) but change preposition to 'at' for institutions and add 'much' to modify 'walk'. Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity. This keeps tense consistent.

× Yes, I still remember I often go for a walk when I was child.

✓ Yes, I still remember I often went for a walk when I was a child.

When referring to past habitual actions use past simple 'went' not present 'go'. Also include the article 'a' before 'child'. The sentence mixes present remembering with past habit; 'still remember' + 'went' is correct.

× I go to my nearby park with my grandmother where I played many games with my grandmother and with my friends.

✓ I used to go to the nearby park with my grandmother, where I played many games with her and with my friends.

Describe past repeated actions with 'used to' or past simple 'went'. Avoid repeating 'my grandmother' by using 'her'. 'Nearby park' should have 'the' to specify it. This fixes tense consistency and redundancy.

× People like to walk in parks because it will improve their health, it will make them physically fit and fine.

✓ People like to walk in parks because it improves their health and makes them physically fit.

When stating general facts or reasons, use present simple ('improves', 'makes') not future 'will'. Also combine clauses to avoid repetition. 'Fine' is vague; 'fit' suffices.

× Even their legs will get more stronger.

✓ Even their legs will become stronger.

'More stronger' is incorrect because 'stronger' already expresses comparative; do not use 'more' with comparative adjectives. Use 'become stronger' or 'get stronger'. 'Will' is acceptable if speaking about future effect, but for general statements prefer present: 'become stronger' or 'get stronger.'

× Moreover, our relationship with our neighbors will also be strong if they are with us.

✓ Moreover, our relationships with our neighbors also become stronger when we spend time with them.

Pronoun use and agreement were awkward: 'our relationship' vs plural neighbors suggests 'relationships' or 'rapport'. 'If they are with us' is vague; 'when we spend time with them' is clearer. Use present simple for general truth.

× I like to take a long walk in Chandigarh in the rock garden and the Sukhna Lake because the view is very beautiful there.

✓ I would like to take a long walk in Chandigarh, in the Rock Garden and at Sukhna Lake, because the view there is very beautiful.

The question is hypothetical ('Where would you like...'), so use 'would like' rather than 'like'. Capitalize proper nouns and use 'at' for lakes. Move 'there' after 'beautiful' for natural order.

× I often seen pictures online on social media apps like Instagram, so I am highly influenced from it.

✓ I have often seen pictures online on social media apps like Instagram, so I am highly influenced by them.

Use present perfect 'have seen' for experiences up to now. 'Seen' alone is past participle and needs auxiliary. 'Influenced from' is incorrect preposition; use 'influenced by'. 'Them' refers to 'pictures' (plural).

× I went for a walk in the local Riverside Park last weekend.

✓ I went for a walk in the local Riverside Park last weekend.

This sentence is correct. It uses past simple appropriately for a completed action. No change needed.

× The path is very beautiful and even the footpath and the river behind me is very clean.

✓ The path is very beautiful, and even the footpath and the river behind it are very clean.

Subject-verb agreement: 'footpath and the river' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. Replace 'behind me' with 'behind it' to refer to the park, and add a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× Fresh air is coming which makes my mind fresh.

✓ Fresh air was blowing, which made me feel refreshed.

Since the student described a past visit, use past tense 'was blowing' and 'made me feel refreshed'. 'Com­ing' is awkward in this context; 'was blowing' or 'blew' is natural. 'My mind fresh' is unidiomatic; 'made me feel refreshed' is clearer.