走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition (bike/bicycle) and fix verb tenses and agreement (it takes).

示例: I don't walk a lot. I usually cycle because it's faster and more convenient, so walking feels unnecessary. For example, cycling to work takes me only ten minutes, whereas walking would take half an hour.

建议: Use correct past tense and clearer structure: topic sentence then details. Replace awkward phrases (get went out, more rural side) with natural expressions, and add a linking word to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. I grew up in the countryside, so there were parks, ponds and pretty streets nearby, and I enjoyed exploring those places every weekend.

建议: Make a clear, grammatical statement and use linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Give a specific reason and an example to support your idea.

示例: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and escape from daily stress. For instance, a short walk among trees can reduce tension and also offers a chance to chat with friends or meet neighbours.

建议: Give a concise topic sentence and one clear reason. Remove filler words (uh) and complete the thought. Add a specific detail to make the answer vivid.

示例: I'd like to take a long walk along a coastal beach because the sound of the waves is very calming. For example, walking at sunrise while watching the waves and seabirds would help me unwind and feel refreshed.

建议: Use correct present perfect or simple past and clear word order. Be specific about the time and purpose, avoid fillers and incomplete sentences. Limit to one or two concise sentences.

示例: Recently I walked to the post office to send packages to friends and customers from an online flea market. It was a short walk of about ten minutes and a useful errand.

× it take shorter time compared to walking.

✓ it takes less time compared to walking.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires the third-person singular verb form 'takes' (Grammar Problem Type 2/27). Also use 'less time' rather than 'shorter time' when referring to an uncountable noun 'time'. Suggestion: use 'it takes less time' for clear natural phrasing.

× I would like to get somewhere by bike or by bicycle because it's easier to get there and it take shorter time compared to walking.

✓ I would like to go somewhere by bike because it's easier to get there and it takes less time than walking.

Mixed verbs and modal choice: 'would like to get somewhere by bike' is OK but 'get' is less natural than 'go'. Also compare using 'takes less time than walking' for correct comparison structure. Ensure third-person singular 'takes'. Suggestion: say 'I would like to go somewhere by bike because it's easier and takes less time than walking.'

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to take a walk when you were a child?

Verb collocation: In English we usually 'take a walk' rather than 'have a walk'. The sentence uses past tense question 'Did you...?' so keep base form 'go'. Suggestion: use 'take a walk' for natural collocation.

× I sometimes get went out to take a walk because when I was a child I lived at more rural side of my country so there's a lot of nature places like park and pond and beautiful street.

✓ I sometimes went out to take a walk because when I was a child I lived in the more rural part of my country, so there were many natural places like parks, ponds, and beautiful streets.

Multiple errors: 'get went out' is incorrect—use simple past 'went out' after 'sometimes' in past context (Past tense issue). Preposition 'in' fits 'lived in the rural part' (Preposition error). Use plural forms 'parks, ponds, streets' (Singular/plural). Use 'there were' not 'there's' for past (There be issue). Suggestion: simplify to 'I sometimes went out to take a walk...'

× So I just enjoyed.

✓ So I just enjoyed it.

Missing object: 'enjoyed' is transitive here and typically requires an object like 'it' or the activity. In context, 'it' refers to walking and the scenery. Suggestion: add 'it' or specify 'I just enjoyed walking.'

× I think it's because just walking around the park, I may ask us more relax and feel more comfortable just to connect and get more connected to the nature or people.

✓ I think it's because just walking around the park helps us relax and feel more comfortable, and it makes us feel more connected to nature or to other people.

Grammar and word choice issues: 'maybe ask us more relax' is ungrammatical—use 'helps us relax' (Verb + -ing / Present tense). 'get more connected to the nature' is awkward; use 'feel more connected to nature' (article error). Suggestion: use 'helps us relax' and 'feel more connected to nature or other people.'

× I may ask us more relax and feel more comfortable just to connect and get more connected to the nature or people.

✓ It helps us relax and feel more comfortable, and it helps us connect with nature or other people.

Incorrect modal/use of 'may ask'—the intended meaning is habitual effect, so use 'helps' rather than modal 'may'. Also use 'connect with' not 'to' in this context. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary modals when stating general truths; use present simple 'helps'.

× I'd love to take a walk alongside a coastal beach because I really, really like the beach side area because, uh, it's relaxing, just, uh, to watch, uh, waves and.

✓ I'd love to take a walk along the coast because I really like the beachside area; it's relaxing to watch the waves.

Article and word choice: 'a coastal beach' and 'beach side area' are redundant and awkward—use 'the coast' or 'the beachside area' (Article/order of adjectives). 'alongside' is acceptable but 'along the coast' is more natural. Remove filler 'uh' and finish the clause 'watch the waves.' Suggestion: streamline to 'take a walk along the coast...'

× Uh, recently I've been walked to the post office just to send packages or, uh, mail mails to my friends or to the customer in the net, uh, flea market.

✓ Recently I walked to the post office just to send packages or mail to my friends or to customers from the online flea market.

Tense and verb form: 'I've been walked' is passive/wrong form; use 'I've walked' (present perfect) or simple past 'I walked' for a recent completed action (Present/past tense issue). 'mail mails' is incorrect—use 'mail' or 'letters'. 'the customer in the net' should be 'customers from the online flea market' (preposition and noun choice). Suggestion: use 'I walked to the post office to send packages or mail to friends or to customers from the online flea market.'

× It's just short work, but it's.

✓ It was just a short errand, though.

Incomplete sentence and word choice: 'short work' is unnatural; 'short errand' is better. The sentence 'but it's.' is incomplete. Match tense with previous clause (past/simple). Suggestion: complete the idea and use 'errand' for postal task.