走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a direct, concise topic sentence then one or two clear supporting details. Fix basic grammar (use contractions carefully) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' correctly and keep under five sentences.

示例: Not really. I usually cycle or take the train to school and my part‑time job because I want to save time, so I rarely walk long distances.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence about frequency, then add one specific detail about where you walked. Use past tense consistently and linking words such as 'because' or 'so'. Avoid vague endings.

示例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because I lived in a fairly rural area. I used to walk to the nearby park almost every day to play and explore.

建议: Provide a clear main idea then two specific reasons, using correct grammar and linking words like 'because' and 'also'. Use precise vocabulary (relaxing, mental and physical health) and avoid redundancy.

示例: People like walking in parks because being in nature is relaxing and reduces stress. Also, walking is good exercise that benefits both physical fitness and mental health.

建议: Answer directly with a clear location, then give one or two specific reasons. Use correct word order and complete sentences; avoid unfinished phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: I would like to take a long walk along a cold coastal beach because I love the wide sea views and fresh air. Walking on the shoreline would be peaceful and visually inspiring.

建议: Give a clear past or recent activity as a topic sentence, then add specific details about purpose and frequency. Avoid filler sounds ('uh') and incomplete sentences. Use simple past or present perfect appropriately.

示例: Recently I've been walking to the post office to drop off packages for customers and friends. It's a short walk from my home that I do a few times a week.

× I'm not really, I usually go get to school or to my part time job by bicycle or by train because I don't want take a lot of time to get somewhere so I hate walk walking to somewhere.

✓ I'm not really; I usually go to school or to my part-time job by bicycle or by train because I don't want to take a lot of time to get somewhere, so I hate walking anywhere.

Pronoun and phrasing issues plus missing particles: 'go get to' is incorrect; use 'go to'. 'Part time' should be hyphenated 'part-time' as a compound adjective. 'Don't want take' needs 'to' after 'want'. 'Hate walk walking to somewhere' should be 'hate walking anywhere' for natural idiom. Also add punctuation to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, when I was a child I lived bit a rural area compared to now. So I take a walk to get to the park or it is enough just take a walk to get.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I lived in a more rural area than I do now. I would take walks to get to the park, or sometimes a short walk was enough.

Several structure and word-choice errors: 'lived bit a rural area' should be 'lived in a more rural area' (preposition and comparative). 'Compared to now' better as 'than I do now'. Tense and habitual action should use past habit 'would take walks'. 'It is enough just take a walk to get' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'sometimes a short walk was enough'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I think it is because walking in the nature make makes us a more relaxed and it is just comfortable in pre pleasure time and it's just good exercise for mental health and for a physical health.

✓ I think it is because walking in nature makes us more relaxed; it is comfortable and a good form of exercise for mental and physical health.

Subject-verb agreement: 'walking' (singular gerund) requires 'makes' not 'make'. 'In the nature' should be 'in nature' (article error). 'A more relaxed' is incorrect adjective use; use 'more relaxed' without 'a'. 'For a physical health' should be 'for physical health'. Also consolidate awkward phrases for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I would like to walk alongside cold coastal beach 'cause I really love the view and scenery from the long coast next to the beach and there is a huge.

✓ I would like to walk along a cool coastal beach because I really love the view and scenery along the long shoreline, and there are wide open spaces.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'alongside cold coastal beach' should be 'along a cool coastal beach' or 'along the coast'. 'Cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. 'From the long coast next to the beach' is redundant; 'along the long shoreline' is clearer. The sentence ended abruptly 'and there is a huge.' so provide a complete noun phrase such as 'wide open spaces'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Recently I've been walking to the post office just to uh, uh, send what I have to the customer or to my friend. But it's small work from my home. Just take.

✓ Recently I've been walking to the post office just to send items I have to customers or to my friend. It's a short trip from my home.

Awkward infinitive and noun choice: 'just to uh, uh, send what I have to the customer' should be 'just to send items I have to customers' (plural and clearer). 'But it's small work from my home. Just take.' is ungrammatical; rephrase as 'It's a short trip from my home.' Also remove filler sounds and use present perfect continuous appropriately. Grammar problem type ID:6